Your structure is really good for all the questions, you answer how you are meant to.

You
should try to do more in-depth analysis on specific words to create alternative meanings to
achieve better marks.

Q1-4/4
Q2- 6/8
Your opening points for paragraphs really good.
Para 1: Do try embedding it will make your work more sophisticated instead of using the
words.in the quiet. You analysed the quote well, but I think you could have chosen a better
quote with more elements of mystery/strangeness/uniqueness. Also use synonyms not just
evokes a sense of mystery but creates a perplexing atmosphere etc.
Para 2:
Makes the reader feel on edge as there is incompletion, suggesting something disruptive will
come.

Don’t use ‘nothing good’ ‘something bad’ when talking about darkness colloquial. Say
instead as nighttime provides an ambiance for commotion. Misfortune will occur. Also, you
could have spoken about the fact that there are vague timings which creates a sense of thrill
and confusion as the circus operates on its own and does not pander to the auspice like
typical circuses do. The choice of using the word ‘night fall’ can also be questioned as we
refer to it as ‘nighttime’ but the word ’fall’ brings a greater sense of ominousness and chaos.

Q3-6/8 your analysis needs to have more exploration- could mean…could also suggest
Circus appears to be its own independent entity, dictating where it goes and has a conceited
character, arriving abruptly with no warning.

I agree with engaging them but try not to say ‘in the story themselves’ it gives the same
vibes as the reader will want to read on. Change it to the reader will want to solve this
mystery-saying the same thing but in a better way.
Also try to use interest the readers at least one probably in your opening line and then you
can change to engage intrigue captivate fascinate entertain etc.

The quote for your second paragraph is too long.

I feel like your second paragraph should have been on the shift because it’s such a
prominent and interesting part of the story. There is a shift from an omniscient third person
narrator to a limited third person narration as the focus shifts from the entirety of the crowd to
the singular ‘you’. This unnamed character becomes the focal point of the narration and is
last more mysterious than the circus, captivating readers attentions entirely. Readers
question why the ‘you’ is unnamed and what the narrator’s line is to this person, and they
would note the intriguing shift from a cold and unemotional atmosphere to a more romantic
and darker one as the story centres this new character. It is also sister, and this sudden shift
would excite readers as the narration juxtaposes its previous disconnected nature with a
more intimate one.

Q4-