GEARTAP Y12 SUMMARY OF COMMENTS

ALSO, DOUBLE-CHECK IF YOUR PROPOSAL PASSES OR FAILS ACCORDING TO

THE CHECKLIST BELOW
1. THREE PAGES LONG AND FOLLOWS THE DESIGNED FORMAT
2. HAS ALL THE PARTS
a. GROUP NAMES
b. VIDEO ESSAY TITLE
c. OBJECTIVES
d. ACCOMPANYING TEXTS OR MATERIALS /REFERENCES/CITATIONS
e. BODY OF THE MAIN DISCUSSION [THIS IS ACTUALLY A
SUMMARIZED OUTLINE OF WHAT YOU USED IN YOUR
PRELIMINARY REPORT]
f. GROUP PRESENTATION /VIDEO STORYBOARD
g. MEMBER ASSIGNMENTS

3. UPLOADED ON CANVAS
a. ONE FOR FINAL CONSULTATION – CREDIT ON DISCUSSION BOARD
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b. ONE FOR FINAL SUBMISSION – REVISED
SUMMARY OF FINAL COMMENTS [NO CONSULTATIONS WILL FOLLOW AFTER
NOVEMBER 21]
GROUP 1
Please note that this proposal Paper should not be more than three pages long. All narratives
that you are going to say in the video essay need not be inscribed in the final revised paper
you will submit. Note that if all these narratives aren't heard in the video essay, the narratives
inscribed in this proposal paper are useless. Since all this content is relevant and satisfactorily
meets your objectives in the video essay, make sure that you are indeed going to say these in
the video. Please note that you cannot do a mere projection of PowerPoint with your faces
reporting on video. But you need to do a VIDEO ESSAY.
GROUP 2
Your Proposal Paper is still very unsatisfactory. BENCAB is a well-renowned artist but if you
are using the framework of Social Realism for his art in your video essay, you cannot talk
about him in General but only aspects of his Social Realist Artist Phase. In this case, be
careful about the art frames you are going to use. Please avoid a mere recording of yourself
reporting using PowerPoint. This is a video essay so that requirement is different from just
you reporting on video still using PowerPoint. I am seeing a narrative here that is largely a
hodgepodge of something about BENCAB but no focus at all.

GROUP 3

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This proposal paper has not followed the desired format. All narratives should be heard on the
video essay itself and must not be reflected here but there. The outline of your preliminary
report should be reflected in this Proposal paper. Go back to the template and revise this
paper. Also, this PP should not exceed 3 pages, and you should avoid merely reporting using
PowerPoint and your faces on video. Remember, this is a video essay of an art appreciation
of your chosen artist. As for the narrative content, this should depend on your objectives so
you should begin with Neil Pasilan so you can maximize your 15 minutes. But I don't know
from this long paper which will comprise your storyboard.

GROUP 4
This proposal paper has not followed the desired format. All narratives should be heard in the
video essay itself and must not be reflected here but there. The outline of your preliminary
report should be reflected in this Proposal paper. Go back to the template and revise this
paper. Also, this PP should not exceed 3 pages, and you should avoid merely reporting using
POWERPOINT and your faces on video. Remember, this is a video essay of an art
appreciation of your chosen artist. As for the narrative content, this should depend on your
objectives. This proposal paper should be clear on what will comprise your storyboard.

GROUP 5
This group does not have a submission for this assignment
GROUP 6
This proposal paper should not exceed 3 pages, and you should avoid merely reporting using
POWERPOINT and your faces on video. As for the narrative content, you need not reflect
those on this paper. Since the storyboard is clear in your head, simplify your storyboard here
and remove the images. Those images should be seen and heard in the video essay itself. All
narratives that are your appreciation, including your introduction here should be in that video
essay.

GROUP 7
This paper is complete but to further simplify this, remove all images since they will be in
that video essay you're going to show anyway. Kudos for following the format and the near-
complete Proposal Paper.

GROUP 8
Try to follow the format. The group members' names should be on top then the title then the
objectives etc. To further simplify this paper, remove all narrative content and just include the
topics in your outline as you have summarized. Anyway, they should be heard and seen on

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the video essay itself. Needless to say, if these texts are here and not in the video essay, they
are useless. Also, you did not include your consultation sheet in the appendix.

GROUP 9
To further simplify this paper, remove the images since you will show them in the video
essay anyway. Also, include only a minimum or no narrative here since they should be heard
and seen in the video essay. Put the group members' names on top, and the assignments at the
bottom as already been placed here. The storyboard is still quite thin as I've commented
before.

for clarifications: go to this zoom link during class time on November 21, 2023
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