TAMIU FYWP Essay 3 Rhetorical Analysis 1301

Unit3 Peer Review Workshop

Directions: Mark your responses directly onto the paper you are editing. Or, you can write your
answers here. If you are unsure, simply state that something seems off but you are unsure of
what.

1. Is the essay in MLA format? If not, what suggestions can you make to the author to get it
to MLA format? Here is the link to OWL Purdue MLA so you can check:
https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/research_and_citation/mla_style/mla_formatting_and_style_g
uide/mla_general_format.html

2. What is the thesis statement? Mark it in the essay.

3. - The last sentence in the first paragraph.

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5. Is the author’s thesis statement clear and direct?

6. - Yes. As I mentioned in your questions. Its on point with your paragraphs and each point
has been mentioned.

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8. Does it mention the name of the article and the author of the article?

9. - Multiple times it has been mentioned Yes.

10. “Sexualized Images on Social Media and Adolescent Girls’ Mental Health:

11. Qualitative Insights from Parents, School Support Service Staff and Youth Mental Health

12. Service Providers,” by Alana Papageorgiou, Donna Cross, and Coleen Fisher

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14. Does it contain the 3-5 subpoints (rhetorical strategies) that each body paragraph will
discuss?

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16. > Yes. She mentioned about 4-5 points.

17. Does it mention what the article/author’s argument is?

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19. - take action by presenting the insights of parents and their view

20. on the staffs helpfulness

21. - providing strategies

22. - interventions to counteract the negative

23. - influence of the images, providing insights from experts such as youth mental health
service providers

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25. Does it mention if the argument is successfully, strongly, or persuasively made? If not,
give the author suggestions for revision.

26. - Yes it is. No revision needed.

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29. Does the author primarily focus on discussing what rhetorical strategy the author is using
and how/why it is effective given who the intended audience for the source is in each
paragraph? If not, what are they focusing on? How can they switch their focus?

30. - Your focus to the article to essay is on point. You have broken it down by your 4 points
(as mentioned) and don't go off the path.

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32. Does each paragraph contain relevant topic sentences that let the reader know what the
paragraph is about and aren’t too vague or too specific? How can the author improve their
topic sentences if you believe they need revision?

33. - You've been pretty clear what the topic is about. You mentioned who made the article and why
the article was made. I understood it. I wasn't confused or stuck on anything. Each point has
been mentioned with an example and why the point is what it is. No vagueness or too specific
just the right amount.

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35. Where could the author use more detail to further illustrate their explanation of the
rhetorical strategy being used and/or how/why it is effective? Mark these areas in the text.

36. - I've think your stratergy has been effective so far because you show,explain, and break
it down.
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38. Does the author avoid using words like “we, me, my our, I, us, etc.”? Mark in the text
where the author is getting distracted from what should be the main focus of the
paragraph or where they are not conducting a rhetorical analysis.

39. - Yes she did avoid it. Nowhere to be found.

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41. What are three things that this author does very well?

42. - On point

43. - Not off topic

44. - Do not repeat your point either.

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46. What are three revision suggestions you have for the writer?

47. - Can't really say much. Just dot your i's and cross your t's.

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