TAMIU FYWP Essay 2 Visual Analysis 1301

Unit 2 Peer Review Workshop

Directions: Mark your responses directly onto the paper you are editing. Or, you can write your
answers here. If you are unsure, simply state that something seems off but you are unsure of
what.

1. Is the essay in MLA format? If not, what suggestions can you make to the author to get it
to MLA format? Here is the link to OWL Purdue MLA so you can check:
2. - Yes.

3. What is the thesis statement? Mark it in the essay.

4. - Marked.

5. Is the author’s thesis statement clear and direct? Does it mention all the elements that the
author goes on to talk about in their essay in the same order in which they are discussed
in the body paragraphs? Does it mention what the image is? Does it mention the
message/idea that the elements convey?

6. - Though I know your short on the word count you are on point. Obviously just need to
add further details but your there.

7. Does the author primarily focus on discussing the deeper/hidden meanings/implications

of the elements of the image? If not, what are they focusing on? How can they switch
their focus?

8. - In my opinion, you've covered the image as a whole. Color, texts, people, and
backgrounds. You've mentioned them all just again, the details.

9. Does each paragraph contain relevant topic sentences that let the reader know what the
paragraph is about and aren’t too vague or too specific? How can the author improve their
topic sentences if you believe they need revision? Give your peer an example.

10. - Im not sure theres paragraphs its just a whole one go essay but I understand most of it.
Cant really say vague or too specific when theres isn't enough for me to say. Its enough
for me to know?

11. Where could the author use more detail to further illustrate his/her explanation of the
hidden meaning/implications of the element(s) of the image? Mark these in the text and
give some suggestions to your peer.

12. - Ive said it. Obv you need more details. Mention the line of words behind the title which
is repeating as I never noticed it before.
13. Does the author discuss the image as if it’s the first time they are seeing it? If not, point
out where they’re using their own knowledge about the subject of the image in order to
discuss its elements. How can/should they change the way they talk about the image?
Give your peer an example. (Remember that there are some exceptions to this rule such
as, for example, public figures used in advertisements. If you are unsure that the subject
of you peer’s paper is an exception then ask the professor).

14. - Yes. I read it and it seems like your acknowledging as if the reader don't know what it
is. All assumption.

15. What are three things that this author does very well?

16. - Being on point, pointing out the many elements, and the whole essay could be you intro.
Its a nice start to further talk about every element youve mentioned.

17. What are three revision suggestions you have for the writer?

18. - Not sure what to say. Just write more? Can't really say much when its incomplete but it
IS a good start and your there.