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Academic Style  Exercise With Tips Kopyası
Academic Style  Exercise With Tips Kopyası
Academic Style  Exercise With Tips Kopyası
Make changes to the sentences below to obtain a ‘more appropriate’ academic style.
Note: All of the sentences are grammatically correct.
Tips are provided in square brackets indicating what the ‘issue’ might be and/or a way to
make a suitable change.
- Globalisation may lead to continued food insecurity and poverty in rural communities.
4. Smallholder farmers have an important role to play in getting rid of hunger and
poverty.
[multi-word verbs can be informal, neutral or formal. Replacement with single-word verbs
might be an appropriate strategy to maintain the required level of formality]
5. You can find further details of the World Food Summit of 2009 in Jackson (2011).
[Depending on the requirements of, for example, the field of study, task giver or publisher,
personal language may not be acceptable; in which case, avoid]
-Further details of the World Food Summit of 2009 can be found in Jackson (2011).
-One can find further details of the World Food Summit of 2009 in Jackson (2011).
-The readers can find further details of the World Food Summit of 2009 in Jackson
(2011).
-Jackson (2011) provides further details of the World Food Summit of 2009.
7. People who rent a farm rather than own it haven’t got a lot of incentive to improve
the land.
[avoid contractions and colloquial words and phrases that are vague or overused in spoken
language]
- People who rent a farm rather than own it do not have much incentive to improve the
land.
-People who rent a farm rather than own it have got little incentive to improve the land.
–positive cümleler daha iyi düşünce uyandırır!
-Farmer tenants have than own it have got much incentive to improve the land.
-less words are better!
-It seems that farming does not receive the attention it deserves.
-exclude me!
-It is unacceptable that so many people are overweight in developed countries when so
many people in developing countries go hungry.
10. A teacher who mistreats his pupils is not fit to do the job.
[Use gender neutral language]
-Teachers who mistreat their pupils are not fit to do the job.
-A teacher who mistreat their pupils is not fit to do the job. -also acceptable!
-making plural is better in academic writing.
- Vast amounts of food are destroyed by rodents such as/like rats and mice.
-such as is better compared to like!
[Avoid ‘etc.’ at the end of a list (as well as alternatives such as ‘and so on’ and ‘and so
forth’)]