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Benjamin Healey - Mla Template 1
Benjamin Healey - Mla Template 1
Benjamin Healey
Ms. Michko
3 January, 2023
Reflection
points more complex and in depth. I worked on making my analysis more straight to the point
and of higher detail in order to advance my argument to a further degree. In my first body
paragraph I worked to transform my inferior evidence that used many filler words to a more clear
and concise argument. For example I transformed all of my “this quote shows” or “this quote
explains” to a more direct form of addressing my quote like “Because certain jobs are being
changed.” I was much more specific when revising my analysis by describing what the word
Next, I revised my thesis in order for it to describe more accurately what was happening
in my essay by connecting current events to the meaning of the American dream. Before my
thesis had very little if not anything to do with the American dream, I revised this by adding a
whole new section to my thesis describing how my topic was going to connect to said dream. I
did this by adding the sentence “The American dream is affected by this increase in technology
because when people can't get jobs, this denies them the ability and opportunity to achieve the
American dream since without money, the American dream is pretty much unachievable.”