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On the other hand, statistics shows than women still do more house
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chores than men. this results in economics ----and educational issues.
Because of this, many of the women which are responsible for
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housework and and------ raising children are economic dependent. Moreover,
they don’t have enough time to achieve higher levels of education.
To conclude,
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I do believe that there is a long path to go through to solved gender
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inequality. The only way to eradicate this,Pis education. Is necessary to
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------ change old traditions and mentality of population and its implicateG
to still teaching the new generation to get rid of gender stereotypes.
TIP: do no include new ideas in the last paragraph (STEREOTYPES)
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