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Nowadays, gender inequality remains a serious issue for many

Even though women have achieved a good...


countries all around the world. Instead that woman achieves a good
there is still
deal related with rights, even now is a lot left to keep fighting.
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One of the biggest problem that women still dealing is related to work
opportunities. For example, many of them are not considered for a
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highly position just for cause of gender, instead that have a better
education background than a man. In addition, lot of women have been
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suffered an
---- abuse situation on their work place.

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On the other hand, statistics shows than women still do more house
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chores than men. this results in economics ----and educational issues.
Because of this, many of the women which are responsible for
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housework and and------ raising children are economic dependent. Moreover,
they don’t have enough time to achieve higher levels of education.
To conclude,
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I do believe that there is a long path to go through to solved gender
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inequality. The only way to eradicate this,Pis education. Is necessary to
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get
------ change old traditions and mentality of population and its implicateG
to still teaching the new generation to get rid of gender stereotypes.
TIP: do no include new ideas in the last paragraph (STEREOTYPES)

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