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Essay Sample No
Essay Sample No
No.
3 4 Instead of clearly agreeing The student presents Writer does not clearly Student should analyze well-
or disagreeing with the examples such as speeding take a stance on the written essays. Examine how the
statement provided the and issues of privacy-related argument. authors structure their arguments,
writer states that they offenses to support his/her use language, and present
agree with one part and stance. evidence.
disagrees with another.
The language used is Lack of depth in
This depicts the writer as
discussing the impact on The student should set aside time
being unsure of which generally clear and to write regularly, whether it's
understandable. social order.
aspect of the essay they journaling, creative writing, or
will focus on. Irrelevant Disorganized structure academic essays. The more the
The structure follows the
points in the third and lack of coherent student writes, the more he/she
general structure of an
paragraph. Instead of development of ideas. will refine his/her skills.
essay, introduction, body
justifying why the writer
and conclusion.
disagrees with the Lack of credential The student should also review
argument he presents a evidence and revise his/her essay multiple
new view as to what times. Check for grammar,
should be done to in the Issues with grammar,
punctuation, and sentence punctuation, and spelling errors.
light of social issues. Also, assess the coherence and
structure and spelling.
The student presents flow of his/her ideas.
examples such as The strayed from the
second point made in the Student should back up his/her
speeding and issues of
privacy-related offenses introduction. arguments with evidence,
to support this stance. examples, or citations from
However, the essay lacks reputable sources.
depth in discussing the
broader impact or
implications of these
actions on social order,
focusing more on personal
perspectives and limited
evidence.
The essay lacks clear
structure and
organization. While it
attempts to present
arguments supporting the
prevalence of law-
breaking, the points are
scattered and lack
coherence. There's a need
for better transitions
between ideas to improve
the flow of the essay.
Additionally, the lack of a
clear counter-argument or
analysis of Trippett's
perspective on the
foundations of social
order weakens the overall
development of the
argument.
The language used is
generally clear and
understandable, but there
are issues with grammar,
punctuation, and sentence
structure that affect the
overall quality of the
essay. There are run-on
sentences and some errors
in phrasing that hinder the
reader's comprehension.
Organisation and
Development of
Argument (Score: 1):
The essay lacks a clear
structure and coherence in
presenting arguments. The
points are disjointed and
fail to build a cohesive
argument. There is a lack
of clear transitions
between ideas, resulting
in a fragmented and
disorganized essay. The
argument lacks depth and
development, making it
challenging to follow the
train of thought.