The diagram below shows how orange juice is produced.

METHOD = WAY
The picture describes the process of producing orange juice.
In general, the illustration comprises various steps, beginning with collecting fresh oranges and
ending with transporting FINAL PRODUCTS (sản phẩm cuối cùng) to THE shop.
At the beginning of the process, oranges are collected by farmer TO BE PUT IN TO A TRUCK and
they ARE sold forTO A factory. After THAT, this factory transit oranges to industry. Thirdly, ONCE
THE ORANGEs are DELIVERED SUCCESSFULLY, thESE fruitS ARE washed by machine TO
ELIMINATE THE WASTE. (CHÚ Ý CÁCH DÙNG LƯỢNG TỪ). Then, oranges are extracted.
Moreover, it is BEFORE BEING divided into two waysMETHODS OF PROCESSING,. tThe first
way is that it is pressed into pure orange juice and packaged into bottles cubes for storeAdditionally,
the second wayAND ANOTHER WAY is that the dirt is removed and THEN it is fed to the animals.
The diagram continues with the fresh juice is prserved by the refrigerator truck. Next, it is evaporated
TO. In addition, it is removed from steam. AT THIS POINT, It IS made into concentrated juice.
Then, it is canningED and transported to warehouse. After that, it was taken to another factory of this
company and given another can of water. Finally, it was packed and marketed through stores.
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The diagram below shows how tomato ketchup is made commercially.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and
make comparisons where relevant.

The illustration SHOWS how tomato ketchup is produced.

It is clear that that process comprises 15 stages, starting with tomatoes are picked and put in the
basket, ending with labelling ??????/ ENDING WITH USING/ CONSUMING IT WITH HAM....
Firstly, AT THE BEGINNING OF THE PROCESS, RIPEN tomatoes are picked and put in THE
basket. Secondly, they FARMERS sorted good and bad tomatoes TO ENSURE THE QUALITY OF
THE PRODUCTS. Thirdly, tomatoes are transported to factory,This location AT THIS POINT, they
are removed stalk, seeds and skinSTALK, SEEDS AND SKIN ARE REMOVED BEFORE PUTTING
CLEAN TOMATOES IN A CONTAINER. After removing, tomatoes are put in container. Before
adding vinegar and salt, they are crushed by A machine. After BEING BOILDED, boiling, it is
cooledLEAVED IN AVERAGE TEMPERATURE within 2 hours TO BE COOLED. Then it is
poured into bottles.
The process continues with LABELLING BOTTLES TO EXPEIENCE THE QUALITY CONTROL
PROCESS tomato ketchup is labelling. After putting in box, they are transported DELIVERED to
supermarket WHERE THEY WILL BE SOLD. Besides, it is used with hamburger and
friesCUSTOMERS CAN USE IT WITH HAMBURGER AND FRIES
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- BÀI VIẾT THIẾU TỪ NGHIÊM TRỌNG (LÍ DO: BỎ QUA 1 SỐ STEP, NÓI THIẾU FUNCTION)
- CÁCH DÙNG NGỮ PHÁP, CẤU TRÚC CÂU CÒN HƠI LOẠN

The diagram below shows one way of manufacturing ceramic pots.

The picture describes the pots are manufacturing.HOW THE CERAMIC POTS ARE
MANUFACTURED.

In general, the illustration comprises various steps, beginning with collecting raw materials,
AND ending with finishING pots.

At the beginning of the process, raw materials are collected BY MODERN MACHINES and
THEN they are transported to the factory. Then AFTER THE FACTORY SUCCESSFULLY
RECEIVES MATERIALS, raw materials THEY are crushed TO GET READY FOR
FURTHER PROCESS. In addition, ????they are mixed WITH WATER AND EXPRIENCE
THE MOULDS STEP. After BEING mouldEDing, they are dryingED within 4-6 hours
UNDER AVERAGE TEMPERATURE TO ASSEMBLE THE SHAPE OF CLAY POTS.
Next, the molded raw materials are assembled clay pots.

The process continues with the raw vases POTS are put in the oven 1000 degrees Celsius
???????. Subsequently they are painted TO???? and heated TO????. At the final stage of the
process, pots are finished.

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VÀ KHÔNG BỊ THIẾU TỪ

The diagram below shows the recycling process of plastics.

The process how plastics are recycled.
It is clear that the illustration comprises various stages, starting with plastics are collected homes,
ending witth they are become landfull or sorted.
At the beginning of the process, the plastics are collected houses and they are transported to industry.
Next , the plastics are processed, which are made products. After selling in shops, they are become
bags and rubbish, the bottles are collected in homes.
The picture describes the process of HOW TO PUBLISH a book.
OVERALL, IT IS CLEAR THAT the illustration comprises 9 steps, beginning with
writing and ending with distributing books to the bookshops.
At the beginning of the process, book is written, which is THEN sent to THE
publishing houses, AT THIS POINT, IT IS GETTING READY TO BEING
PRODUCED. SUBSEQUENTLY, Before a contract IS made with publishing houses,
THE PREVIOUS BOOKS ARE studied by EDITORS TO AVOID UNWANTED
MISTAKES.
The diagram continues with a book is designed of layout, WHICH IS IMPORTANT
IN TERMS OF MAKING THE BOOK BECOMES MORE EYE-CATCHING.
NEXT, A FINAL DECISION IS MADE ON THE LAYOUT. ONCE THE BOOKS
ARE PRINTED SUCCESSFULLY, THEY ARE BINDED. At the final stage of the
process, THE FORMER documentS ARE distributED to bookshOPS TO BE SOLD
FOR CUSTOMERS.