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AQA GCSE English Language Structure Answering The Exam Questions PAPER 1 QUESTION 5
AQA GCSE English Language Structure Answering The Exam Questions PAPER 1 QUESTION 5
Paper 1 Question 5
(2nd Edition)
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Contents
Answering Paper 1 Question 5 – Descriptive & Narrative Writing 4
Exploring Descriptive Writing: ‘The Beach’ 5
Introduction to Language Devices 13
Identifying Language Devices: Part 1 18
Identifying Language Devices: Part 2 – Sensory Language 19
Practising Language Devices 20
Exploring Descriptive Writing: ‘The Monday Morning Ritual’ 25
Improving Your Vocabulary 28
Improving Your Descriptive Writing: Task 1 33
Improving Your Descriptive Writing: Task 2 34
Practising Descriptive Writing: Task 1 35
Practising Descriptive Writing: Task 2 37
Identifying Language Devices: Task 3 38
Identifying Language Devices: Task 4 – Other Devices 39
Exploring Narrative Writing: ‘What’s Your Problem?’ 41
Exploring Narrative Writing: ‘Magenta Skies’ 42
Exploring Narrative Writing: Correcting & Continuing ‘A Parting of Ways’ 48
Exploring Narrative Writing: Beginning Your Own Piece 53
AQA GCSE English Language Paper 1 Question 5 Mark Scheme 56
Important Note
However, many of its tasks will also equip you for the rest of Paper 1 as well as
parts of Paper 2.
Answering Paper 1 Question 5
Descriptive & Narrative Writing
For Paper 1 Question 5, you will be asked to produce a piece of creative writing. Normally (but
not always) you are given the option of writing a) a purely descriptive piece based on a picture,
or b) a short story or the opening of a story. Whichever task you choose, you should aim to
write five or six strong paragraphs.
On the following pages, you will find a wide range of exercises to help you explore and practise
descriptive and narrative writing in readiness for this big 40-mark question.
• at the beginning, drop your reader straight into a particular situation or location
• stick to one main focus or ‘topic’ per paragraph (and expand on it)
• keep direct speech to a minimum (or avoid it completely unless you have learnt
how to structure it properly)
Or: Write a story about a time you explored an unfamiliar place. [40 marks]
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Exploring Descriptive Writing: ‘The Beach’
By Joe King
Perhaps it is the heat that is causing my imagination to wander into strange territory, but my
thoughts are soon interrupted. On the path beyond the beach, a red-faced toddler chants "I
want ice cream! I want ice cream!" as he passes a tired-looking Mr Whippy van with his
exasperated mother. She looks as though she regrets their day out already. Maybe life will be
easier when he is older…
Shops and cafés also line the path, and a warm breeze wafts the savoury scent of doughnuts
and hotdogs towards the beach-dwellers, tempting them to abandon all restraint and be ‘good’
to themselves. Seagulls circle above like vultures; each year they seem bolder and more
provocative, dive-bombing dangerously close to the crowds beneath them. Maybe, by some
evolutionary step forward, they have finally, wholeheartedly joined the dark side and become
vultures. It is hard not to believe as they pounce on left-over chips and fallen ice cream, and
even target treats in the hands of unsuspecting punters.
At the quiet, rocky end of the beach, proud little crabs scuttle across the sodden, sea -stained
sand, frantically making their escape from determined rock poolers. A young girl perches on a
boulder, wielding a flimsy pink net, oblivious to the dangers of such slippery, jagged terrain.
She laughs with delighted cruelty as she scatters the alien-like creatures, and I am saddened
by her parents’ indifference to this needless, unpleasant behaviour. Nearby, her slightly older
brother giggles as the surf’s watery remains glide across the
shore and tickle his feet. He seems to have forgotten the shells
clutched in his hand, trapped in a cage of selfish fingers. “Kids…”
I mutter to myself cynically.
Complete the following questions about ‘The Beach'. They will help you to explore the piece in
greater detail.
Task 1
In the table below, match each word on the left (from Paragraph 1) with its definition on the
right. Use a dictionary if you need to.
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Task 2
In Paragraph 1, the writer gives us a sense (a feeling) of the beach visitors’ excitement when
he says, “Carefully choosing their places among the hundreds of sunbathers…”
a) What does he give us a sense of when he says, “the seafront is positively brimming and
space is in high demand”? Pick two of the following statements:
b) What does he give us a sense of when he says, “it is as if a gathering of great importance
is taking place…eagerly awaiting some kind of majestic, otherworldly visitor” ? Pick two
of the following statements:
c) What makes Paragraph 1 an effective opening? Provide one strong idea of your own.
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Task 3
In Paragraph 2, how does the writer present the young boy? Fill in the gaps below with the
correct bullet points from the table.
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Task 4
In Paragraph 3, how does the writer present the seagulls? Fill in the gaps below with the correct
bullet points from the table.
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Task 5
In Paragraph 3, the writer also presents the seagulls as threatening. Find evidence of this (a
short description) and use it to complete the following sentence:
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Task 6
[1]
At the quiet, rocky end of the beach, proud little crabs scuttle across the sodden, sea -
stained sand, frantically making their escape from determined rock poolers. [2]
A young girl
perches on a boulder, wielding a flimsy pink net, oblivious to the dangers of such slippery,
jagged terrain. [3]
She laughs with delighted cruelty as she scatters the alien-like creatures,
and I am saddened by her parents’ indifference to this needless, unpleasant behaviour. [4]
Nearby, her slightly older brother giggles as the surf’s watery remains glide across the
shore and tickle his feet. [5]
He seems to have forgotten the shells clutched in his hand,
trapped in a cage of selfish fingers. [6]
“Kids…” I mutter to myself cynically.
a) Look up the following words from the passage and provide a simple definition for each one.
scuttle [verb]
sodden
perch [verb]
wield
flimsy
oblivious
jagged
indifference
needless
cynical
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b) Identify five words or phrases in the paragraph that give us a sense of location.
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d) What word type are both of these? (Noun, verb, adjective or adverb?)
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e) By bringing these two words together, the writer creates a particular impression of the
crabs. What is it? Provide one strong, concise idea of your own.
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f) Which sentence describes a young girl behaving carelessly? Just provide its number.
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g) Which sentence describes her behaving unkindly? Again, just provide its number.
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h) In Sentence 3, how does the writer feel about the girl’s parents – and why? Provide one
strong, concise idea of your own.
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i) In Sentence 4, what word shows that the “older brother” is enjoying himself?
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k) Look again at Sentence 5 and Sentence 6. How does the writer feel about the children –
and why? Again, provide one strong, concise idea of your own.
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Task 7
In Paragraph 5, the writer is fascinated by the elderly man on a cliff above the beach. Identify
three descriptions of this man that stand out to you and briefly comment on the effect of each
one.
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This shows / suggests / gives me the impression … [provide one strong idea of your own]
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This shows / suggests / gives me the impression … [provide one strong idea of your own]
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This shows / suggests / gives me the impression … [provide one strong idea of your own]
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Task 8
Throughout the piece, there are several changes of location within the beach setting. These
clever shifts in focus give the piece a strong structure (order).
a) Identify each change of location in the text and fill in the gaps below.
b) What is the overall effect of this structure? Provide one strong, concise idea of your own.
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c) Look again at Paragraph 6. Structurally-speaking, what does the writer include in this final
paragraph? Pick one of the following:
• a cliff-hanger [ ]
• a twist [ ]
• a flashback [ ]
• a ‘full circle’ [ ]
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Introduction to Language Devices
Language devices are techniques used by writers to make their work more descriptive,
engaging and meaningful. You must be able to identify and comment on writers’ use of these
devices and put them into practice in your own work.
Test your existing knowledge: try matching the classic language devices in the first box with
their definitions in the second box.
➢ When you put two or more words close together that have the same initial sound.
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➢ When you use strong vocabulary to make something seem overly good or bad (to trigger an
emotional response).
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➢ When you exaggerate in a way that is unrealistic and cannot be taken literally.
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How well did you do on page 13? Here are the answers…along with some useful examples:
1. Alliteration
Alliteration is when you put two or more words close together that have the same initial
sound.
This often makes the text more appealing, fluent and memorable.
The ‘rule of three’ is when you put three key words or phrases together, each being equal
in some way.
▪ “After years of sex, drugs and rock ‘n’ roll, Danny was ready for the quiet life.”
This often makes the text more punchy, emphatic and memorable.
3. Emotive Language
Emotive language is when you use strong vocabulary to make something seem overly
good or bad.
▪ “The two lovers were overwhelmed by their passion for each other.”
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4. Comparative
▪ “Today’s lesson was more [or less] interesting than last week’s.”
5. Superlative
▪ “Of all the students, Rafal is the least worried about his exams.”
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Introduction to Language Devices (continued)
Figurative Language
6. Simile
A simile is when you compare one thing to another using ‘like’ or ‘as’.
7. Metaphor
A metaphor – in the basic sense – is when you describe a thing as something else
(normally something very different).
8. Personification
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9. Hyperbole
Hyperbole is when you exaggerate in a way that is unrealistic and cannot be taken
literally (i.e. you over-exaggerate).
10. Onomatopoeia
11. Oxymoron
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Identifying Language Devices: Part 1
Identify two of each language device in the table below. An example has been provided.
Winter’s icy grip held her tightly. Tom remained very still as the dog growled at him.
Personification
The delighted couple had a wonderful day. He bumped into an old flame at the cinema.
Climbing Mount Everest was the hardest challenge My noisy neighbours are such a nuisance.
I’ve ever faced.
Her laughter was like a catchy song on Radio 1. The Christmas turkey was as tough as old boots.
An earthquake rumbled beneath the city. The traitor was ruthlessly executed.
The teacher planted seeds of wisdom among his We waited an eternity for the bus.
students.
That summer, the sun grew warmer and brighter Children were running, skipping and fighting in the
each day. playground.
I’m busy doing nothing this morning. The Pink Star Diamond is the most expensive ring
in the world.
Melanie’s cat likes clawing the cushions. The fire swallowed an entire forest.
I’m so hungry I could eat a horse. The living dead were everywhere, closing in on the
survivors.
Then the Terminator said: “I need your clothes, The kryptonite made him weaker by the second.
your boots and your motorcycle.”
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Identifying Language Devices: Part 2
Sensory Language
Sensory language is when you use one of the five human senses (sight, hearing, touch,
smell and taste) to attract or repel your reader.
In each example sentence below, identify a) the sense being engaged, and b) whether
the sense is being attracted or repelled.
At sunset, the sky was filled with a marvellous I was in terrible pain when I trod barefoot on a
blood-orange glow. spiky sea urchin.
Only when he bit into his sandwich did he realise A hot bath eased my aching limbs after running
the bread was full of mould. the marathon.
The band’s Number 1 hit was very melodic and The film’s violent scenes were excessive and
anthemic. difficult to watch.
As they opened the back of the lorry, they were This steak is delicious! So tender and full of flavour.
hit by the stench of rotting flesh.
Hugo loves stroking his pet rabbit; it’s very soft. Workmen started drilling the road outside and the
baby began to wail.
From woody, earthy aromas to sweet floral and The ballerinas were incredibly nimble and elegant.
berry notes, Tanvi loved scented candles.
The music was so loud I thought my ears would His face was covered with large boils that oozed
bleed. yellow slime.
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Practising Language Devices
Task 1
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Task 2
Have a go at completing the following ‘as’ similes. Again, be as descriptive as you can.
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e) Her smile shone as brightly as ...
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Task 3
Task 4
Comparative Superlative
smaller
highest
driest
hungrier
better / worse
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Task 5
Task 6
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d) Tired, hungry and bored, the child in the waiting room turned into a / an …
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Task 7
Complete the following examples of personification. Fill in the gaps using the words in
the box.
g) The smell of fresh coffee ________________ me every time I pass that café.
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Task 8
The following words are all examples of onomatopoeia (written in the past tense).
Pick five of them (or five of your own) and put each one into a descriptive sentence.
Sentence No.1
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Sentence No.2
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Sentence No.3
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Sentence No.4
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Sentence No.5
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Exploring Descriptive Writing: ‘The Monday Morning Ritual’
By Anna Conda
Task 1
The following sentences and clauses form the opening paragraph of a descriptive piece of writing.
However, they are jumbled up. Put them in order by writing out the paragraph properly.
I hit the snooze button hard, The alarm clock jolts me awake,
It’s time for the Monday morning ritual… Its red digits glare at me in the darkness,
and shattering the silence. but somehow the menacing device keeps protesting.
Task 1.5
Identify three ways that the writer has created an engaging opening.
1)
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Task 2
Now read the second paragraph of the piece and fill in the gaps with the words in the box.
As I __________ out of bed, the __________ chill snaps at my bare feet like a __________.
I quickly __________ my old jeans and jumper and dress without __________. The dog stirs
with __________ at the early hour, but knows the __________ of the day. He stretches out,
performing his __________ moves with a __________ beginning to show in his __________.
eyes order vanity dread autumn yoga grab glint roll piranha
Task 3
Read the third paragraph of the piece, then answer the questions that follow.
Down the stairs and through the door; tea and toast will have to wait. I pull on my ice -cold
boots and put the dog on his lead. Then we begin our journey under darkened skies, my furry
friend sniffing and scent-marking every waiting leaf. Beacons of light guide us safely through
residential streets until we reach our goal, a local country park, where the ground changes
from unforgiving concrete to soft, dewy grass. I release the hound to freedom and he bounds
into an underworld of undergrowth, more excited than …
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c) Complete the description at the end of the paragraph: “[The dog] is more excited than
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Task 4
Read the fourth paragraph of the piece, then complete the questions that follow.
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d) What does this show or suggest about the ‘thing’ personified? Provide one strong idea of
your own.
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e) The writer refers to “swans like marble statues”. What language device is this?
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f) What does it show or suggest about the swans? Provide one strong idea of your own.
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Task 5
Read the final paragraph of the piece, then complete the question that follows.
A moment later, it hits us: a tidal wave of light, full of warmth and splendour. Over an endless
landscape of woods and fields, the magnificent sun emerges, filling the sky with reds, oranges
and yellows. A sigh escapes my lungs as the dog and I absorb the scene. It doesn’t take long
to feel refreshed and revived, ready for the gift of a brand-new day.
What makes this an effective closing to the piece? Provide one strong idea of your own.
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Improving Your Vocabulary
Task 1
Improve the following sentences by making the underlined words stronger and more
emotive. An example has been provided.
The man really hurt the security guard. His actions were very unfair.
The thug severely injured the security guard. His actions were completely unjustified.
a) All of the students were very happy with their very good exam results.
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d) I really like that singer! Seeing her perform at the O2 was a great experience.
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e) Needy and sad, the homeless person asked for money from a passer-by.
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f) I ran to the station, worried that I would miss both my train and my interview.
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h) It was good of you to give us those nice chocolates for our anniversary.
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i) Suddenly, a yucky thing with big claws and smelly breath came out of the cave.
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Task 2
‘Nice’ is a very common, overused word in everyday English. In your creative writing,
it should normally be replaced by other more interesting adjectives. For example, a
nice meal could be described as ‘tasty’, ‘satisfying’ or ‘delicious’ instead.
For each gap below, find a strong synonym (alternative / similar word) for ‘nice’. Use
a thesaurus if you need to.
a) A / An ___________________________ car.
b) A / An ___________________________ apple.
c) A / An ___________________________ person.
d) A / An ___________________________ tune.
e) A / An ___________________________ armchair.
f) A / An ___________________________ sunset.
g) ___________________________ handwriting.
h) A / An ___________________________ garden.
i) A / An ___________________________ dress.
j) A / An ___________________________ party.
k) A / An ___________________________ smell.
l) A / An ___________________________ gift.
m) ___________________________ weather.
n) ___________________________ manners.
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Task 3
Using a thesaurus, find at least three strong synonyms (alternative / similar words) for
each word in the table, avoiding any repetition.
a) ‘good’ k) ‘walk’
b) ‘bad’ l) ‘find’
d) ‘sad’ n) ‘scary’
e) ‘big’ o) ‘nasty’
f) ‘small’ p) ‘funny’
g) ‘love’ q) ‘dangerous’
h) ‘hate’ r) ‘interesting’
i) ‘think’ s) ‘descriptive’
j) ‘speak’
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Task 4
Fill in the gaps below using the adjectives near the bottom of the page. You must not
repeat any of them.
trouble.
d) She was a ____________________ girl who always wanted her own way.
f) Our old coach was very ____________________, but the new one is
____________________ to please.
g) Even though my feet were sore, I was ____________________ to finish the race.
Christmas.
i) She was an ____________________ lady who wore fine clothes and had a
____________________ smile.
j) Through thick and thin, we’ve always been ____________________ to each other.
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Task 5
Fill in the gaps below using the adverbs at the bottom of the page. You must not repeat
any of them.
c) The police asked Libby to think ____________________ about everything she did
d) He ____________________ took all the sweets for himself and refused to share
them.
f) Once more, he ____________________ declared his love for her, but the princess
refused to listen.
h) Vanita did nothing all day; she just slouched on the sofa, ____________________
watching TV.
the beach.
j) The judge made it clear that the man was a liar and had committed the crime
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Improving Your Descriptive Writing: Task 1
Read the following extract. Can you make its descriptions more vivid and engaging? Write
out the piece in the space provided, but improve the parts underlined. You can use your
own words/descriptions or the suggestions at the bottom of the page.
Stars shone a long way off in the dark sky. The only sound that could be heard
was the sound of the campfire. Its flames made us feel spaced out as they moved
in front of us. Everyone was really quiet and like statues. Then a nice breeze came
through the forest, blowing on our warm faces. An owl made a noise far away and
the nice smell of cooked marshmallows woke us up, blocking out the strong smell
of the pine trees around us. In the end, someone said something, got up and
handed out the sweets. A bottle of drink was also sent round. It was time for
the stories from way back to begin.
Read the following extract. Can you make its descriptions more vivid and engaging? Write
out the piece in the space below, but improve the parts underlined.
It was a nice night in the city centre. Bright lights were all around us, making our
eyes blink. Cars, buses and bicycles went by like runners in a race. The air was nice
and warm, and people went in all directions – some going home after work, others
having time off. We felt free being out and about in just shorts and t-shirts. The
mix of old and new buildings was interesting, and we liked looking around in our own
time. It was a place where lots had happened. When our legs got really tired, we
went to a restaurant and had a nice meal. The taste of nice fish, cooked really well,
was amazing, especially with a glass of cold white wine.
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Practising Descriptive Writing: Task 1
Write a descriptive paragraph, 10-14 lines long, inspired by one of the pictures below.
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Practising Descriptive Writing: Task 2
Write another descriptive paragraph (10-14 lines long) inspired by one of the pictures
on page 35 or a place of your choice.
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Identifying Language Devices: Part 3
The killer had a heart of stone. Bees played ‘hide and seek’ among the flowers.
Josie worked harder than ever to meet the deadline. The artist splattered paint on a large canvas.
After two weeks in Barbados, I felt rejuvenated, The clouds were like scoops of coconut ice cream.
body, mind and soul.
Mum is going to kill us when she sees how much I felt humiliated by the bully’s comments.
mess we’ve made.
Their relationship had a bittersweet ending. The lion licked its lips at the sight of so many
wildebeest.
The dry, brown grass begged for water. Lancelot is the bravest of King Arthur’s knights.
Antonio was voted the friendliest shopkeeper in Our maths teacher has been at the school since
Bedford. time began.
The singer’s legs turned to jelly when she saw how Hanish felt sharper after a strong cup of coffee.
big her audience was.
Henry loves to help the homeless in his city. The car was old, rusty and falling apart, but its
engine miraculously started.
The Olympian swam as gracefully as a dolphin. The couple shed tears of joy and gratitude as a
fireman saved their daughter.
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Identifying Language Devices: Part 4
Other Devices
Find a simple definition and example for each of the following devices:
1. Pathetic fallacy
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Example: _______________________________________________________________
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2. Sibilance
Definition: ______________________________________________________________
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Example: _______________________________________________________________
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3. Juxtaposition
Definition: ______________________________________________________________
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Example: _______________________________________________________________
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4. Imagery
Definition: ______________________________________________________________
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Example: _______________________________________________________________
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5. Metonymy
Definition: ______________________________________________________________
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Example: _______________________________________________________________
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6. Anaphora
Definition: ______________________________________________________________
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Example: _______________________________________________________________
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7. Semantic field
Definition: ______________________________________________________________
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Example: _______________________________________________________________
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Exploring Narrative Writing: ‘What’s Your Problem?’
Most good narratives (stories) are about someone facing a problem that needs
to be solved or an issue that needs to be laid to rest. Often this problem or issue
was unexpected, interrupting the character’s normal routine or circumstances.
If, in your Paper 1 exam, you pursue a story-writing option, ask yourself the
following questions:
• What journey (inside or out) must they take to reach their goal?
He opened the boot of the car. She was, of course, still there, a limp mess staring
into the distance. She looked alarmed, frozen in that moment several hours before
when her life had been suddenly, so unexpectedly cut short. Surely this wasn't
meant to have happened? How had God or fate or the universe allowed it? What
had those eyes seen as they encountered 'the other side'?
The light from his torch glistened on her bloody forehead. Hesitantly, he put his
hand to her cheek, imagining that the slightest touch would bring her back; would
snap her out of the dreamy daze in which she seemed to be trapped. "Wake up!"
he whispered desperately. "Please, wake up!" She had always been attentive to his
voice, always responsive, but now her silence tormented him. Of all people, surely
he could cause her heart to beat again and her lips to smile. But she was gone, her
body cold and lifeless.
Above the treetops, the sky had become a rich magenta; sunrise was only an hour
away. His mind raced at the thought of her parents. They wouldn't even know she
was missing yet. He wondered how things would unfold when, at about 7:30am,
they would find she hadn't come home. Her mother would be anxious. She would
think aloud, reminding herself of where her daughter had said she was going the
night before. Her father would simply listen and continue getting ready for work.
She's eighteen, Linda. She probably just stayed at a friend's house. But once her
mother had phoned her friends and discovered she hadn't stayed with any of them,
a sense of something terrible would begin to gnaw at them both. Parents’ intuition,
perhaps.
He wondered how long it would take for them to go to the police. He had once read
or heard that a person must be gone for 24 hours before they can be officially
classed as missing. Maybe the police would make an exception in this case because
she was a good girl who got straight As and did voluntary community work, or
because her dad used to be an officer and got special treatment – something like
that. Then her disappearance would be all over the news. TV crews would arrive
out of nowhere, ready to feed on the story like a school of hungry sharks. They
would smell the blood indeed.
Smartly dressed reporters would speak with great concern about someone they
didn't even know. Crying students would be interviewed, each claiming to be a
close friend of the girl when, in fact, they had held grudges against her and spread
rumours about her that caused pointless, hurtful fall-outs. Neighbours and family
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friends would lead a candle-lit procession through town to raise awareness of her
disappearance, and her parents would give a moving speech at a hastily organised
press conference, pleading with their precious only child to simply come home. But
it would all be in vain...and in the course of time, her parents would struggle to
overcome their grief, and their marriage would be pushed to breaking point
because such a loss is enough to drive even the happiest apart.
The thought of all this became too much, crushing him inside. No one would believe
that his sweet girlfriend had simply had an accident. After all, he had caused it. He
had been utterly foolish and careless, and was fully responsible. In the eyes of the
world he would be viewed – and despised – as a murderer.
Guilt and regret hung round his neck like a millstone, pulling him down to his knees.
His life was over too. He lifted his heavy head to the sky again, wishing he could
somehow take its deep, mesmerising magenta and breathe it into the pallid face
and limbs before him. But it was useless. There was no time to waste. He went to
the backseat of the car, took out a shovel and began to dig.
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Complete the following questions about ‘Magenta Skies’. They will help you to explore the piece
in greater detail.
Task 1
a) What types of journey take place in the story? Pick two of the following:
• a physical journey [ ]
• an emotional journey [ ]
• a psychological journey [ ]
• a spiritual journey [ ]
b) What are the main themes of the story? Pick three of the following:
• revenge [ ]
• good vs evil [ ]
• coming of age [ ]
• death [ ]
• following your dreams [ ]
• friendship [ ]
• tragedy [ ]
• relationships [ ]
• redemption [ ]
• someone trying to play God [ ]
c) How would you describe its genre? What category does it belong to?
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e) Magenta is commonly described as ‘purplish red’. What might the sky and its colour
symbolise in the piece? Provide one strong idea of your own.
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f) The story is told from an omniscient (all-knowing) point of view. What is the effect of this?
Provide one strong, concise idea of your own.
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g) What, in your opinion, is the story’s moral or message? Provide one strong, concise idea
of your own.
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Task 2
c) What impression do you get of the TV crews from this line? Provide one strong, concise
idea of your own.
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Task 3
c) What impression do you get of the young woman’s parents from this line? Provide one
strong, concise idea of your own.
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Task 4
c) What impression do you get of the young man from this line? Provide one strong, concise
idea of your own.
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Task 5
“She had always been attentive to his voice…but now her silence tormented him.”
b) In this line, the writer shows us a powerful difference between the young woman before
and after her death. What is the name of this technique?
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c) What impression do you get from this quotation? Provide one strong idea of your own.
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Task 6
“Hesitantly, he put his hand to her cheek…her body cold and lifeless.”
a) Look again at Paragraph 1 and identify three ways that the writer has created an effective
opening to the story.
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b) The writer only uses direct speech briefly (in Paragraph 2). What is its effect? Provide one
strong, concise idea of your own.
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c) The writer uses plenty of long, complex sentences throughout the piece. What might these
reflect? Provide one strong, concise idea of your own.
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d) What is the effect of the ellipsis (…) in Paragraph 5? Again, provide one strong, concise
idea of your own.
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e) Look again at Paragraph 7 and identify three ways that the writer has created an effective
closing to the story.
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Exploring Narrative Writing: Correcting & Continuing ‘A Parting of Ways’
By Holly Wood
Task 1
Read the opening of ‘A Parting of Ways’ below. It is full of spelling and grammar errors
and has no punctuation. Your task is to write out the piece properly, correcting the
errors and adding punctuation as you go along.
the old man stud up slow he looked directly at lyndon and told him they must ever see
or speak to each other again the files were missing lost in a forein country and the two
men would now had to lay low for the rest of there lifes no more secret misions no
more spying on the enermy
although it has been dangerous both men had enjoyd every minuite of there time
together the old man had became a sort of father figure to lyndon teaching him valuble
lessons about life an love his wisdem have made lyndon release how much he loved
daniella he knew he has said some bad things leaving her in pain and confuson
lyndon shake the old mans hand say goodbye and left on the steps outside rusty the
dog was sleeping when she hear the door open she get up and wagged her tale lyndon
would miss her she licked his hand as he pated her one last time then she barked
excited making him look up and around he didnt want to drew any atention to himself
she folowed him to the car looking up with sad eye but he huried into the veichle and
drive away
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Task 2
Notice how this opening ‘shows’ more than it ‘tells’. This is what good storytelling should
do. Now write the next paragraph of the story (10-14 lines long). Use your imagination
to consider the following:
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Task 3
Put the following sentences and clauses in order to form your teacher’s example
Paragraph 4. You must write out the paragraph properly (in the space below) and not
just number the lines.
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Task 4
Now continue the story from your own or your teacher’s Paragraph 4, writing at least
one more paragraph (10-14 lines long).
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Exploring Narrative Writing: Beginning Your Own Piece
Begin your own short story inspired by one of the pictures below. You should produce
at least two strong paragraphs (each 10-14 lines long).
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If you want to, use one of the following sentences (or something similar) to open your
first paragraph:
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AQA GCSE English Language
Paper 1 Question 5 Mark Scheme
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(These grade boundaries are approximate and only a rough indication of quality.)
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Notes
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