Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later, and it is often argued

that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a
crime.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Opening

There is no doubt that crime is a perennial problem that all societies face. Among all the
measures to reduce crime, educating the young about the repercussions of criminal activities
is arguably one of the most important. Some people argue that ideally it is reformed prisoners
who should be talking to teenagers about crime. While this may work to some extent, I would
argue that it is far from being the optimal way to help youngsters become law-abiding
citizens.

Body 1 (60/40)

It is understandable why some people propose that ex-prisoners should talk to teenagers
about crime. The key rationale is that these individuals have had first-hand experience of the
hardships in prison, and the candid nature of their stories could steer young students away
from a criminal lifestyle. However, former convicts can appear intimidating and frighten their
audience and they may fail to communicate their message as a result. There is also the
possibility that teenagers, many of whom have a rebellious tendency, may aspire to the
lifestyle that criminals lead since. These scenarios show how letting prisoners talk to students
could be counter-productive.

100% agree or disagree có nhiều cách ở đây có 1 cách anh có thể chỉ em đó là em khen xong
rồi em chê 1 phía là kiểu viết 60/40

Body 1

Bước 1: Anh dẫn vào topic sentence giới thiệu view a sẽ viết ở body 1

Template: It is understandable why some people propose that S + V (ç dẫn view 1 em cần
khen chê 1 lúc )

It is understandable why some people propose that ex-prisoners should talk to teenagers
about crime.

Bước 2: Sau đó anh bảo lý do người khác đồng ý với ý kiến đó

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Template : The key rationale is that S + V (ç dẫn ý khen cho view 1 lý do người ta đồng
tình )

The key rationale is that these individuals have had first-hand experience of the hardships in
prison, and the candid nature of their stories could steer young students away from a criminal
lifestyle (ç anh khen ý cho ex-prisoner vì những kinh nghiệm của họ khiến hs thích thú )

Bước 3: Tới câu thứ 3 anh sẽ phản biện lại ý trên là anh không đồng tình dù cho người ta
đồng ý như thế

Template: However, S + V

Hoặc However, this is merely a theory since S + V (ç nghĩa là tuy nhiên ý ở trên chỉ là lý
thuyết bởi vì S + V )

However, former convicts can appear intimidating and frighten their audience and they may
fail to communicate their message as a result (ç anh bảo là tuy nhiên những người từng bị kết
án thì họ có dáng vẻ không hợp cho việc giáo dục trẻ em như làm cho chúng sợ hay
intimidating )

Bước 4: anh cho supporting idea cho ý anh phản biện lại là không đồng tình

Template There is also the possibility that S + V

There is also the possibility that teenagers, many of whom have a rebellious tendency, may
aspire to the lifestyle that criminals lead since. (ç anh giải thích là mấy đứa học sinh nổi loạn
chúng sẽ “khoái” và bắt chước những người phạm tội )

Bước 5 : anh conclusion khẳng định lại ý anh

These scenarios show how letting prisoners talk to students could be counter-productive

Và Body 1 của mình sẽ đủ 5 bước là khen xong rồi chê kiểu 60/40 cho việc giáo dục trẻ em
về phạm tội

It is understandable why some people propose that ex-prisoners should talk to teenagers
about crime. The key rationale is that these individuals have had first-hand experience of
the hardships in prison, and the candid nature of their stories could steer young students away
from a criminal lifestyle. However, former convicts can appear intimidating and frighten
their audience and they may fail to communicate their message as a result. There is also the

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 possibility that teenagers, many of whom have a rebellious tendency, may aspire to the
lifestyle that criminals lead since. These scenarios show how letting prisoners talk to
students could be counter-productive

Qua body 2 em nói nghiêng hẳn về việc khác sẽ tốt hơn việc trên trong giáo dục trẻ về Crime

Body 2 (Alternatives would be better)

Instead of letting ex-inmates share with teenagers about their experience, I believe more
viable alternatives could be considered. For example, policemen, rather than criminals,
should be assigned to schools to give talks about the dangers of crime. Their account will be
reliable since they have witnessed the struggles that prisoners and wrong doers have to go
through, but their presence would not alarm young teenagers. In addition to this, schools
could also organize field trips to correctional facilities. On these visits, students will get to
see for themselves the harsh life inside prison and become aware of the consequences that
committing a crime entails.

Conclusion

In conclusion, while inviting ex-prisoners to talk to teenagers could be one of the ways to
prevent them from getting involved in criminal activities, I believe the outcome of this
method is still uncertain, and thus other steps are needed.

Sample 1

Proponents of raising fuel prices might argue that it could lead to a significant
decrease in fuel demand, which could be synonymous with a reduction in CO2
emissions, one of the chief culprits behind global warming. However, this is merely a
theory, since using fuels seems to be a deep-rooted practice of humans, as evidenced
by the fact that almost all vehicles today / nowadays use fuels as the main source of
energy. This means that modifying their prices upwards would have a meager bearing
on fuel demand, and, by extension, the status quo of environmental deterioration.

Body 1:

Topic sentence: Main idea

Proponents of raising fuel prices might argue that it could lead to a significant
decrease in fuel demand, which could be synonymous with a reduction in CO2
emissions, one of the chief culprits behind global warming.

Counter-argument 1:

However, this is merely a theory, since using fuels seems to be a deep-rooted practice of

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humans, as evidenced by the fact that almost all vehicles today / nowadays use fuels as the
main source of energy. This means that modifying their prices upwards would have a
meager bearing on fuel demand, and, by extension, the status quo of environmental
deterioration.

Counter-argument 2:

It is also noteworthy [of note] that many environmental problems like

deforestation do not closely correlate with fuel consumption, and thus could hardly
be contained / controlled / rectified by an increase in fuel prices.

Sample 2
The only way to improve safety on our roads is to give much stricter
punishments for driving offences. What extent do you agree or
disagree?

Granted, stricter punishments for traffic violations may improve road safety to
a certain extent. For example, those found running the red lights, driving
recklessly, or speeding would have to pay hefty fines, and those found driving
under the influence of alcohol or drugs would have their driving license
suspended or even be sentenced to jail. These punitive measures may deter
road-users from committing traffic offences, leading to fewer accidents.

However, this only works if people are made aware of these changes. This
requires a more fundamental approach, which is to make people apprised/
cognizant of traffic laws in the first place. This can be done by making driving
tests harder: both written and driving tests must be more difficult so that only
those who know how to drive safely are allowed on the roads. People should
also be required to retake driving tests once every two years to reinforce their
understanding of traffic laws and learn about the new regulations in effect.
These steps would even render imposing harsher punishments unnecessary,
given how severe most punishments for traffic offences already are. Evidence
indicates that an overwhelming number of tragic deaths are caused by subpar
roads, blind spots, or insufficient numbers of road signs. Therefore, road safety
can certainly be improved by repairing potholes or widening narrow roads,
removing objects or overgrown plants that hinder drivers' sight, and setting up
more road signs.

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In some countries, parents are choosing to teach children themselves at home
instead of sending them to school.
Do the advantages of homeschooling outweigh the disadvantages?

Pros Cons

 personalized/ individualized curriculums  not all parents can teach or

=> mình chê school have a fixed schedule
⇒ homeschooling give a flexible timetable
⇒ parents can concentrate on subjects
that are related to their future career
orientation without spending time on
irrelevant subjects
 strengthen the bond between parents and
children
 safeguard children from school problems
such as peer pressure or bullying
lack of pedagogical skills ⇒
hamper/impede children’s
learning experience
 overly protective / indulged
children/ being spoilt by
parents
⇒ suffer from insufficient
interactions with peers ⇒
take a toll on their social
development
 not really
economical ⇒
incurred expense

 economical ( will not have to pay for

tuition fees)

Position: Cons > Pros

Approach 1:
Body 1 - Benefits
Benefit 1
Benefit 2
Body 2 - Refutation
Refute Benefit 1
Refute benefit 2

INTRODUCTION

SAMPLE ( 2 câu )

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It is widely recognized that many parents are opting for teaching their offspring at home
instead of entrusting this undertaking to school teachers. While this has admittedly certain
benefits, I would argue that its drawbacks are far more pronounced.

SAMPLE 2 ( 3 câu)

General statement: GIVING A FACT

It is widely recognized that education plays an important role in a child’s
development. (There is no denying the important role of education in a
child’s development.)

It is widely recognized that S + V (Clause)

There is no denying that + S + V / There is no denying + N

Narrowing:
Given this, the question of which educational method is the most effective is often a
topic of debate (the question of … has garnered a great deal of publicity), with
many (people) opting for / choosing homeschooling over formal education.

Opinion: S, albeit + adj, + V

In my opinion, home-education (homeschooling), albeit beneficial to some

extent (albeit somewhat beneficial), is attached with more serious / glaring
drawbacks.

Approach 1:
Body 1 - Benefits
Benefit 1
Benefit 2

Body 2 - Refutation
Refute Benefit 1
Refute benefit 2

Body 1

On the one hand, home education is beneficial to a certain extent. One key advantage is that
this educational route can help parents save a great amount of money on their children’s
studies. This is particularly true in the US and UK, where tuition fees have become so
prohibitively expensive that many parents fail to afford formal schooling for their children.

In addition to this, homeschooling allows parents to freely tailor curriculums that arguably
best suit their children’s strengths and weaknesses. Thanks to these personalized
curriculums, these young individuals could maximize their learning experience.

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Body 2:
On the other hand, I am convinced that the aforementioned advantages pale in significance
when compared to the glaring drawbacks of teaching children at home. First, home
education is not really economical. This is because there would be a host of incurred
expenses for learning materials, equipment, among others that could even offset the amount
saved on school tuition fees.

This is compounded by the fact that not all parents are well-versed in pedagogical skills as
well as in-depth knowledge. In other words, they might have difficulties explaining theories
and concepts thoroughly. That being the case, they could inadvertently impede their
children’s learning experience.

CONCLUSION
In conclusion, despite certain benefits that homeschooling can confer, I would contend that
these are outweighed/ overshadowed/ trumped by the drawbacks.

MISTAKES

 approach 1 có vẻ giống partly 50 50 agree / disagree nhưng đó là mistake 1 ⇒ 2 body

của em gồm positive vs negative nhưng nó không hề đấu đá phản biện dính líu
với nhau?
⇒ low điểm task response Coherence Cohesion
 Main idea 1 đằng sup idea 1 nẻo

Approach 2:
Body 1 - 2 benefits
Body 2 - Refute
Body 3 - Drawbacks
cái lợi của cách này là sẽ không đặt nặng về expand idea cho từng main idea mà chỉ cần nêu
ý ra thôi k cần supporting idea quá

cái khó là phải cần ít nhất 3 + 4 ý cho body 2 + 3

Counter - argument

Body 1: 2 Benefits before counter

Idea 1:
Firstly, given the spiraling / escalating cost of living, many parents find it difficult /
challenging to grant their offspring formal schooling, since tuition fees are sometimes
(prohibitively) exorbitant.
> By teaching their young ones at home, these parents could save a great amount of
money for other expenses. [Teaching their young ones at home may enable them to / let
them save a great …]

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 Idea 2:
In addition to this (financial savings), homeschooling could arguably preclude
children’s vulnerability to peer bullying, one of the worrying / vexing issues in many
educational institutions.
Body 2 - Counter
Topic sentence:
However, the aforementioned benefits are questionable at best.

Counter idea 1:

Regarding the economic benefit, while the worry about tuition fees is eliminated, a host of
expenses for learning materials, equipment, among others, would be another monetary
pressure on parents who choose to homeschool their children.
Counter 2:

As for bullying, this problem is, in fact, being dealt with successfully by schools
imposing stringent punishments for school bullies, thus making / rendering it an
unnecessary concern.

Body 3 - my idea about drawback / more and more drawbacks

Topic sentence:
From my perspective, home education is riddled with a litany of limitations that might
hamper the children’s comprehensive development.

Idea 1:

One major problem is that not all parents are well-versed in pedagogical skills as well as
in-depth knowledge about certain subjects.
> This means that they might fail to convey knowledge and explain lessons thoroughly,
thereby possibly placing impediments on (impede) the young’s learning progress /
experience.

Impede = hinder = to place impediments on sth = to put a hindrance on sth.

Idea 2: Worse still = This is compounded by the fact that …

Worse still, homeschooled children are likely to suffer from insufficient interaction with
friends, which may render them socially inept. (inept = incompetent)