TAMIU FYWP ENGL 1302 Research Genre 2 Research Analysis

Research Genre 2 Peer Review Workshop: Content

Directions: Mark your responses directly onto the paper you are editing. Or, you can write your answers here.
If you are unsure, simply state that something seems off but you are unsure of what.

1. Is the essay in MLA format? If not, what suggestions can you make to the author to get it to MLA
format? Here is the link to OWL Purdue MLA so you can check:
https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/research_and_citation/mla_style/mla_formatting_and_style_guide/mla_gene
ral_format.html
Everything is good with the formatting.

2. Does the author make a claim (thesis statement) about the connections and disagreements of the research
in the field on their chosen topic? Does this claim reveal something about the varying perspectives on
the topic? What is the thesis statement? Mark it in the essay.
For the thesis statement you have to make a claim about the connection between articles as this question
mentions, not about the topic you’re analyzing. You could write something like “Professionals in the
medical community do not know for certain all the effects cellphone use has on children, however one thing
most scholars agree on is that…”

3. Is the author’s thesis statement clear and direct? Does it make a claim about the findings and come at the
end of the literature review? If not, give the author suggestions for revision.
You could use the first sentence of your conclusion for the thesis statement, it makes a claim about the topic
and mentions a connection between the articles. If you decide to include it in the thesis statement you can
repeat it in the conclusion just phrase it differently so that it doesn’t seem exactly the same.

4. Does the author present an argument for the topic? Or, does the author present an argument for the
differing perspectives of the topic? If they argue the topic, offer revision suggestions so s/he can present
the differing viewpoints on this topic.
I already answered this in questions 2 and 3.

5. Does the author use correctly cited paraphrases, summaries, or direct quotations from his/her sources as
evidence? Where could the author use more?
For the works cited page, you have to put the name of the journal in italics, Ex. International Conference on
Computing & Information Sciences (ICCIS) and also remember that you have to maintain a balance of 70%
your words to 30% quoted content in the lit review. *Note: The links for the 1st and 5ft articles don’t work.

6. Are the sources peer-reviewed? Mark them in the text. Tell the author if the sources are not peer-
reviewed so they know to find other sources.
All the sources seem fine, I would just recommend you check out the article by Gupta, Nilanjana, and
Kymberlee Fernandes because news articles aren’t normally peer reviewed.

7. Where could the author use more detail to further illustrate his/her claim? Where could the author use
examples to demonstrate his/her point? Mark these in the text.
The conclusion could use more evidence to be more specific.

8. Does the author maintain objectivity during his/her essay? Does the author establish his/her ethos as an
author? How can he/she be more reliable? Mark in the text where the author tends to be subjective.
TAMIU FYWP ENGL 1302 Research Genre 2 Research Analysis

The author is objective throughout the essay and establishes her credibility by quoting all the ideas she
mentions in the review.

9. Does the author have solid topic sentences that contain only one main point? Does the author maintain
that focus throughout the paragraph? Give revision suggestions to the author so that s/he can revise for
cohesion.
The topic sentences only contain one main point that is maintained throughout the subtopic.

10. How is the essay organized? Did the author organize it based upon the articles or did the author organize
the essay based upon ideas? Remember, that the author should organize his/her essay so that the
perspectives in the research are in conversation with each other. Give revision suggestions to the author
so that s/he can revise for cohesion.
The review is organized by ideas, each subtopic responds to a question that could be asked in an argument
about the main topic.

11. What are three things that this author does very well?
- I liked the subtopics that divide the review, they give a complete perspective of the ideas the articles
mention.
- The way the ideas in each subtopic are connected is really good.
- The quotes used as evidence give a good idea of the general opinion on the articles.

12. What are three revision suggestions you have for the writer?
- Read the grading rubric and make sure you follow all the guidelines for each category.
- Be specific. When you make a claim in your review you have to add evidence from the articles, the same
goes for when you cite an idea from these articles, mention why do the authors say that, what studies did
they conduct to reach that conclusion, what is the origin of that idea, etc.
- Make sure all the sources are peer reviewed, especially the news article one I mentioned before.