Title: AgriTrack

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More detailed description of the mobile system user testing Edited the user testing and added a more Page 17
detailed description
Notification system should be outside the mobile app, just like any The notification design was added on Page 35
other usual mobile app with notification system Figma.

The students forgot to write the scope where some limitations of the Scope and Limitations of the Research Page 5
laboratory work could not be justified. The students were also unable was changed to address this part.
to emphasize the contribution of their laboratory study where I
believe that the significance of study must be emphasized in the
proposal.
The presented methodology consists of sample collection; however, it Figure 3.1: Flow of Research Activities Page 16
might be clearer if the students can describe the procedure with the was added.
help of overall flowcharts and figures that summarizes the whole
methodology.
They should add research planning and schedule using a chart for easy Scope and Limitations of the Research Page 5
monitoring on the research progress because experimental work was changed to address this part.
requires a careful plan of experimentation/laboratory work. Some
information on the experimental setup may also be useful to be
included in the proposal. The description of that setup may help the
candidate to probe the initial work of the proposal.
Page Section in the Comments
Document
1 Overview, first and ● Cite your sources properly. In-text citation was edited and the Page 1
second sentence ● The paragraph is too long. You can paragraph was divided.
make multiple paragraphs on this.

4 General Objective General objective is too long. It could - Deleted this paragraph Page 4
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written in just one to two sentence. “This general objective lines up to
Instead of writing your general objective develop a user-friendly instructional
this long, include the discussion on the system and create a system that provides
problem statement. After the problems farmers with a comprehensive guideline
were discussed, how would your study on using organic inputs based on JADAM
solve it, by? Then you can shorten your Organic Farming. It will make the process
general objective. of making organic inputs simpler. This
aims to provide farmers with the
guidance and knowledge necessary to
make these inputs effectively, especially
those who are new to organic
agriculture. “
5 1.3.2 Specific ● Instead of “These specific objectives It was changed to - “Specifically, the Page 5
Objectives provide the concrete…”, write it as study aims to provide a user-friendly
“The specific objectives of the system…”
study….” Or “Specifically, the study
aims to….”

● Bullet #2: Is the notification system It was changed to - “To develop a

implemented as mobile notification? notification system as a mobile
If yes, specify it in the second bullet notification that notifies farmers”
of your specific objective.

5 1.4 Scope and When you mentioned in this section
Limitations of the about the “Its primary objective is to
Research thoroughly analyze and elucidate these
procedures, focusing on their making
procedure and application to locally
grown crops in the Philippines.” 
when you said locally grown crops, do
you intend to include ALL locally grown
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was changed to address this part.
“It aims to thoroughly analyze and
explain these procedures, and in the end,
the output can be applicable to various
crops, including vegetables, fruits, grains,
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crops in entire country in your study? Or and herbs.”
do you have specific local crops to be
used? If yes for the last question, then,
mention that in this section, else, you
may ignore this comment.

5 1.5 Significance of the Your study is significant also to future
Research researchers who would like to make
studies related to yours.
7 Review of Related Do not use “he” or “they” when you
Literature refer to the authors of the related
studies or literature. Use “the author”
or “the authors”
Added this part: Page 5
“Furthermore, this study holds
implications for future researchers who
are inclined to explore the same
undertaking.”
We changed the “he” or “they” into “the Page 7
author/s”.

16 3.2 JADAM Organic Include a brief discussion on what the A discussion was added. Page 19
Materials Preparations reader is expecting on this section.

17 Discuss Figure 3.1. No discussion found A discussion was added. Page 20

for this figure in your document.

27 3.4 Calendar of Discuss Figure 3.2 and Figure 3.3. No A discussion was added and it was Page 27
Activities discussion found for these figures or not mentioned.
mentioned in any parts of the
document.

29 Preliminary Results Discuss Figure 4.1 or at least mention it Figure 4.1 was edited and a discussion Page 29
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in your document. was added.

31-32 Mention Figure 4.2 and 4.3 in your A discussion was added. Page 35
document as part of your discussion in
Section 4.
General Comments: 1. Edited the “we” and “our” to “the
1. Do not use 1st person in your document. Instead of using “We” researchers”
and “Our”, you can use “The researchers”. 2. In-text citation was eedited
2. Double check on how properly write an in-text citation 3. Discussions were added to the
3. Discuss any figures included in your document. Do not just put figures
any figures without even mentioning them in your paper. As
the reader will be looking for its discussion .