Final Draft Lit Review .

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by Camarillo Camarillo

Submission date: 08-Mar-2024 11:15PM (UTC-0600)

Submission ID: 2315839898
File name: Final_Draft_Lit_Review_.docx (32.77K)
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Final Draft Lit Review .docx
ORIGINALITY REPORT

4 %
SIMILARITY INDEX
3%
INTERNET SOURCES
2%
PUBLICATIONS
3%
STUDENT PAPERS

PRIMARY SOURCES

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mecp.springeropen.com
Internet Source 2%
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www.researchgate.net
Internet Source 1%
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umeblowani24.pl
Internet Source 1%
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Junling Gao, Pinpin Zheng, Yingnan Jia, Hao
Chen, Yimeng Mao, Suhong Chen, Yi Wang,
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Hua Fu, Junming Dai. "Mental health
problems and social media exposure during
COVID-19 outbreak", PLOS ONE, 2020
Publication

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Submitted to Rancho Santiago Community
College District
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GRADEMARK REPORT

FINAL GRADE GENERAL COMMENTS

82
Rubric Breakdown

Controlling idea/purpose: 15.8

/100 Evidence: 17

Audience Awareness: 15

Genre Competence: 16

Style, Grammar, MLA: 17.8

Total: 81.6 round to 82

This submission is on the right track. Given how fast

you work, I think what you should do is take time to
slowly go over what you wrote once it's done and see
if you have accomplished all the objectives of the
assignment and included all the necessary aspects of
the assignment. This is something that we can do
together in class on the days on which I allow you to
put the finishing touches on your papers.

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Comment 1
 I'd reframe this part to be a bit more specific/explicit. Give readers 2-3 quick examples of
stuff the research you will talk about more in depth later is saying to give them a hint of
what you'll be looking at.

Comment 2
period not comma. This isn't a bad thesis though I think it would be better if you were more
specific.

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Comment 3
Don't end the paragraph on a quote especially when you have two quotes stacked on top of
each other with no further analysis or explanation after them.

Comment 4
I don't think this is the right formatting because it looks like your quote intro is IN the block
quote when it shouldn't be.

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Comment 5
page number?

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Comment 6
this sentence sounds strange when read especially out loud, you want your sentences to
flow smoothly

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Comment 7
Don't use quotes in this part. This is supposed where you synthesize the two sources in your
own words. Quotes are to help setup and show the connections or lack thereof between
sources before you get to this part.

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Comment 8
And so what can the pushback by Malaeb tell us about this issue of social media usage? It
seems like the sentence at the beginning of page 3 would have been better placed here
than there

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Comment 9
It was a form of distress? I thought this paragraph was showing that she believes it's not.

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Comment 10
This is a bit too vague

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 Comment 11
You summarized each section in 1-2 sentences when you should've done so in 3-4. Make
your conclusion a bit more of a detailed summary/overview.

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