Unit 3 Peer Review: Editing

Directions: Mark your responses directly onto the paper you are editing. Or, you can write your
answers here. If you are unsure, simply state that something seems off but you are unsure of
what.
1. How is the essay organized? Does each paragraph contain one and only one main idea
that connects to the thesis? Does this organization help move the ideas forward? Tell the
author if the organization works or offer organization ideas.
Each body paragraph focuses on one rhetorical device. The organization is well executed using
transitional sentences and phrases. The only thing that confused me was that there are more than
one summary paragraphs.

2. Where could the author use stronger transitions to strengthen connections between his/her
points?
The author uses strong transitions throughout.

3. Does the author have any fragments, comma splices, or run-ons? If so, mark them in the
text. If you know the rule, then go ahead an offer advice to the author. If you do not know
the rule, then simply mention that something seems off.
The article has no grammatical errors, fragments, comma splices, or run-on from what I can tell.

4. Where could the author use more detail to further illustrate his/her claim? Indicate these
places in the text.

Throughout the body paragraphs about the rhetorical devices used/analyzed.

5. Are the style and tone of the essay appropriate for the audience?
The style and tone are appropriate.
6. Are the sentences and word choices varied? Does the author use strong, active verbs and solid,
descriptive nouns? Indicate where the author could strengthen the verbs and nouns.
The sentences and word choices are varied and strong.

7. Is the author too repetitive or present too much information? In other words, does the
essay overwhelm you as a reader because there is too much information or underwhelm
you because there is too little information?
The author is not repetitive nor presents too much information.

8. Is the essay confusing because information has been omitted and/or too much information is
assumed to be known by the readers?
The essay is not confusing.

9. Is the essay in the correct MLA format?

Overall, it is in the correct format except for the professor’s last name needing to be capitalized
and the works cited page.

10. Indicate in the text the author’s strengths and weaknesses.

Strengths:
-Strong sentences and vocabulary
-Good introduction
Weakness:
-Lack of direct evidence and examples
-Towards the end, the structure of the essay was a bit confusing as there are multiple summary
paragraphs.

11. What are two or three revision suggestions you have for the writer?
The structure of the essay from “Furthermore, Edwards and Cheok…” to “quality education
worldwide” was a bit confusing as there are multiple summary paragraphs.
Provide more direct examples to have the readers get a clearer view of the rhetorical devices
analyzed.