Name: Nadia Zahra Roseno

NIM: 1209622035
SASTRA INGGRIS - 22B
ITCW TASK 7 CHAPTER 11

Instruction: This paragraph needs more connection. Revise it. Then share your version with
other classmates.

The original paragraph:

Ho Chi Minh City, in Vietnam, is a fascinating destination for travelers to

Southeast Asia. It is located on the Mekong River. It was once an important
trading center for the French in Southeast Asia. The influence of French culture
can still be felt. Many people, especially the older generations, learned French in
school and still can speak it very well. Sorne cafés serve French-style bread and
pastries in Ho Chi Minh City. Expensive hotels and restaurants serve French
food. Many of the buildings in the city are built in French style. The Vietnamese
and the French fought. The French eventually left the country. There are

museums and monuments documenting the country's long-and often bloody-

history. If you are looking for a unique city to visit in Southeast Asia, Ho Chi

Minh City is an attractive choice.

The revised paragraph:

Ho Chi Minh City, which is located in Vietnam, is a fascinating destination for exploring
Southeast Asia for travelers. Because It’s located at the Mekong River, it is known as an
important trading center in Southeast Asia for French. Additionally, many people, including the
old generations who left the country, still can feel the French culture and also learned French in
school. They can still speak it proficiently. Moreover, some cafes that feel comfortable, make
many visitors enjoy the french -style bread and pastries, while expensive hotels and restaurants
offer authentic French cuisine. Moreover, travelers can also see numerous buildings constructed
in the elegant french architectural style. Despite the conflicts of Vietnamese and French, the
latter eventually withdrew from the country. Consequently, Ho Chi Minh City bears witness to its
eventful past through a myriad of museums and monuments that vividly depict the country’s
long and often tumultuous history. Therefore, if you are in search of a unique city to explore in
Southeast Asia, Ho Chi Minh City Unquestionably stands out as an attractive choice.