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Task 2: Public
Transport and Cars
by Sui

The rising levels of congestion and air

pollution found in most of the world cities
can be attributed directly to the rapidly
increasing number of private cars in use. In
order to reverse this decline in the quality
of life in cities, attempts must be made to
encourage people to use their cars less and
public transport more.

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To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, people use more private car,

which leads to more cars on the road, heavy
tra!c jam and air pollution. These problems
always happen especially in the cities. I
agree with the way to solve this problem by
encourage people to use public
transportation instead of using private cars
because it is the best and easy way that
people can do.

Using public transportation saves a lot of

money. Firstly, people do not have to buy
their own cars. When it comes to prices, the
fare for buses or taxis are cheaper than
private cars when compared bus fare to the
oil price. Accordingly, people do not have to
spend lots of money on gas that they have to
"ll the tank. Also, they do not have to "nd a
place for parking as well.

Moreover, using less private cars saves

environment and people’s health as well. It
causes less air pollution because carbon
dioxide that released from cars is decreased.
As all people know that carbon dioxide can
harm people’s health, if less carbon dioxide
release to the environment, people do not
have to breathe polluted air inevitably.
Furthermore, there will have no heavy tra!c
jam because people use more public
transportation.

Even though it is a waste of time that people

have to wait for a buses, taxis, subway or sky
train, it will not take people a long time to
reach their destination because public
transportation nowadays are developed to be
faster and more convenient for citizens.

Therefore, these are the reasons why I agree

with the way to decrease congestion and air
pollution by encourage people to use less
private cars and turn to use more public
transportation that government provided.

Words: 285

IELTS Sample Writing Analysis:

In order to answer this question, you will

need to state your opinion, and then give the
reasons why you have this opinion in your
body paragraphs.

If you agree that less car use and more use of

public transport will improve the quality of
life in cities, then you will need to explain
why this is the case.

In other words, you will need to discuss the

bene"ts of using cars less and public
transport more, speci"cally in relation to
improvements in quality of life with regards
to pollution and congestion.

If you disagree then you will need to discuss

the disadvantages of this. Of course there is
the
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option to partly agree and to look at some

bene"ts and drawbacks.

Content

The candidate’s introduction in this IELTS

sample writing is satisfactory as they
introduce the topic in the "rst few sentences
and give some background facts about it.
They then clearly give their opinion in the
"nal sentence.

However, their "rst body paragraph does not

really answer the question. Although they
correctly discuss the bene"ts of public
transport, the bene"ts discussed do not
relate to congestion or pollution.

Instead, the candidate writes about prices

and costs. It is important to keep the essay
on topic.

"Not having to "nd a place to park" is

relevant, but this is only in the last sentence.

The second body paragraph is better. The

candidate discusses how using cars less will
improve people’s health, which is directly
relevant to the prompt.

The third paragraph is relevant as the

candidate suggests that the speed of public
transport will improve people’s quality of
life.

The conclusion then correctly summarizes

the candidates point of view.

Organization

It is clear from the candidate's IELTS sample

writing that they understand the basics of
how to organize an essay, with an
introduction that contains background
information and a thesis, body paragraphs
with di#erent points and a conclusion.

However, these can be improved.

You should always try to have one central

theme in each paragraph. The topic sentence
in body paragraph one tells us that the
paragraph is about how “public
transportation saves a lot of money”, but
then the candidate talks about “"nding a
place to park” in the last sentence. This does
not "t with the topic of the paragraph.

Similarly, in the second body paragraph, it is

not quite clear how the last sentence "ts with
the topic of the paragraph.

Check all ideas "t with the topic sentence

(this is the purpose of planning your answer
"rst), and avoid placing a new idea in one
sentence at the end of the paragraph. All
ideas should be fully explained and one
sentence is not usually enough to do this.

Also, ensure all paragraphs are long enough.

The third body paragraph is only one
sentence. Three sentences are the minimum
length for a paragraph.

Grammar and Vocabulary

The vocabulary in this student's IELTS

sample writing is basically adequate to
answer the question and the grammar errors
do not cause too much di!culty when
reading the essay.

The errors, though, are quite frequent and

show that the candidate is pro"cient at
writing but not at a high level.

For example:

I agree with the way to solve this

problem by encourage people to use
public transportation

This should be:

I agree that the way to solve this

problem is by encouraging people to
use public transportation

Comments for Task 2: Public

Transport and Cars
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Jun THANK YOUUU

20, by: Anonymous
2012
THANKS A LOT MAN FOR THE
RIGHT ESSAY AND I WOULD SAY
THANK YOU AGAIN AND AGAIN

May 21, 2014 ok

by: Anonymous

it`s ok

Jun 10, 2014 Thanks

by: Keval

It's really nice thanks a lot

Sep 16, 2014 thanks

by: sharan

Thanks

Dec 03, 2014 public transport and car

by: sachin

OK nice

Jul 15, nice essay

2015 by: Anonymous

It is nice but you can do more

better

Sep 08, 2015 ielts

by: aditya aadi

thnkuuuuu

Feb question
26, by: Anne
2016
Hi. My name is Anne. I was just
wondering, could you please tell
me what could be the possible band
score for this essay? Thank you :)

Apr 25, nice

2016 by: Harpreet Chahal

Nice but try to do more hard

for good bands

Jul 07, 2016 best

by: hanshi nathaliya

Best

Jul Exellent essay

13, by: Sinan Saleem
2016
Very good essay and thanks a
lot.also it helps me in letter writing
in this same topic. And thanks a lot
again.

Sep 04, 2016 Thanks

by: parya

Thanks about task 2

Nov Satisfactory
03, by: Anonymous
2016
It's good but I would make a couple
of adjustments, for example, the
intro is quite similar to the "rst
paragraph of the body.

Dec 01, 2016 somewhat ok

by: Anonymous

this is somewhat ok

Dec thanks
30, by: shiine
2016
It's easy answer that every
person can understand very well.

Jan 20, 2017 good

by: Anonymous

recommend!

Oct My essay
25, by: hasi
2017
Air Pollution is becoming one of
the major issue in many cities
around the globe. The carbon
dioxide released from vehicles are
one of the contributor for this.
However , this does not indicate
private cars play major part of this.

Di#erent countries trying to tackle

this issue by making di#erent
approaches. One concept is
improve public transportation and
reduce use of private cars, which
failed to produce result in many
countries.

As we all aware , usually private

cars are well maintained and
reduce to release polluted air as
much as possible. Further ,
nowadays electrical cars and
proven 0% air pollution . On the
other hand , public transportation
still failed provide the same
comfort that you get from your
personal car. Also we should not
forgot that private vehicle
transportation is door to door.

Therefore , if we are trying "nd out

solution for air pollution , we
should encourage use private cars
though private cars cause some
other concerns such as tra!c
congestion's.

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