Creating text to influence others Set 3

TASK: The students have then written their own persuasive texts, on topics of their choice, in
order to persuade an audience of their point of view

Do you hate it when all the private schools look so smart in She clearly states
her point of view
their uniforms and your school does not? I bet you hate it when
and attempts to
your parents can’t buy you things because they have to spend convince her
audience of it.
money just to buy another school jersey, because your old one
is worn out after six months. Also would you like for your
community to think of your school as a good one? Well then
blazers should be compulsory at Snowy Creek High School; the
students look smarter and also feel smarter, parents don’t have
to spend money every six months, and frankly the blazers send
a good message to the community.

Firstly, have you seen how nice other schools look at inter-
school events or even just walking home from school? How
She tends to formal, neat, and tidy they are. The fact is, they look sharp.
overuse personal
opinions and
The school students look intelligent when wearing blazers and
makes some it makes the school seem like a smarter school just because of
assumptions about
shared opinions the appeal and eye catching look the blazers give. But not only
do blazers make students and schools seem brainy it also
For example, that
“blazers make makes the person wearing one feel smart and good about She includes some
students and evidence and
schools seem themselves. This means that students in the long run would examples, such as
brain. work harder as they feel good about themselves. the comparative
costs and
durability of
blazers and
Reason number two why blazers should be compulsory at jerseys, though
Snowy Creek High is that although they cost a bit of money she leaves it up to
her audience to
when you first go to buy one, if you work it out over the five work this out in
detail, and her
years of being at college it is actually cheaper as parents don’t arguments tend to
have to buy a New Jersey every six months because yours is be repetitive.

rubbed and worn out. The blazers not only look good but they
 last longer and the material won’t go bad. The blazers even
keep you warmer!

She uses some Following on how blazers make you look smarter, doing this
features of
persuasive sends a good message to the community and that’s what
language, such as
schools love to see. When the community looks at your school
rhetorical
questions, direct and says “wow” it means you have impressed them. Normally
address to the
this happens when you first see a student, neat and tidy in their Many of her
reader, and
sentences are
emotive language uniform, they look good and the community notices this quickly clumsily
(“they look sharp”,
constructed, and
“feel smart and and realises how good of a school it is. That is another reason
there are numerous
good about
themselves”)
why blazers at Snowy Creek High School should be compulsory. grammatical errors
(“you’re school”,
“how good of a
Blazers should be compulsory at Snowy Creek High School, it school it is”).

makes us look smarter and feel smarter, our parents can spend
money on us in a different way rather than buying a new school
jersey every minute because they haven’t lasted as long as you
would have hoped, and finally the community will think of
Snowy Creek High as one of the good schools.