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The use of social media, such as Facebook and Twitter, is replacing face-to-

face contact in this century. Do the advantages of this outweigh the


disadvantages?

It is firmly believed that the prevalence of social media is changing the way people
interact in real life. From my perspective, I reckon the benefits and drawbacks of this
trend will occur equally and this essay will discuss my views as follows.

On the one hand, allocating time to use social media could draw some benefits. It is
considered It serves as a practical way to keep in touch with long-distance
relationships.For example, people who study or work abroad for the first period
cannot encounter unavoidable problems. One of the most common ways to feel
motivated could be to interact frequently with their family or friends. Hence, thanks to
state-of-the-art technology and the big development of social media, individuals
might find it easy to connect with their loved ones.

On the other hand, despite its positive aspects, the use of social media has its
drawbacks in the contemporary world. In fact, many people nowadays have a high
preference for using the Internet at any age.The tendency to surf the Internet
everywhere from standing in the elevator, and waiting for the traffic lights to staying
with your parents on the weekend. This behavior can have negative consequences,
as seen in situations where people, instead of engaging with those around them, opt
to focus on their mobile devices, contributing to a sense of isolation. For example, in
a new semester, some individuals may shy away from making new connections in a
classroom, fostering a quiet atmosphere and hindering the development of
meaningful relationships.

To sum up, considering the arguments mentioned, I assume that the use of social
networks brings both advantages and disadvantages. The awareness of surfing
Facebook, Instagram, and Twitter reasonably and appropriately is supposed
remarkably necessary.

Dieu Linh - 310 words


TASK 2 CRITERIA Grade Tiêu chí đánh giá cụ thể
Task Response 7 - Introduction:
Paraphrase ổn
Trả lời được câu hỏi chưa được rõ ràng
- Body:
Topic sentence cần bám chắc ý hơn.
Ideas hỗ trợ ổn, tuy nhiên cần diễn đạt rõ ràng main idea và phần explain cần
liên quan với main idea hơn
- Conclusion:
Paraphrase ổn.
Cần chú ý những lỗi sai có nói trong phần comment “T”.
Cohesion and 6 - Coherence:
Coherence Sắp xếp các ý tạm ổn, rõ ràng logic. Cần chú ý những lỗi sai có nói trong phần
comment “C”.
- Cohesion:
Các câu cần liên quan với nhau hơn. sử dụng tạm ổn các linkers
Vocabulary 7 Còn mắc một số lỗi chọn từ.
Cần sử dụng đa dạng từ vựng hơn
Grammar 7 Sử dụng ngữ pháp chưa ổn lắm, còn mắc một số lỗi ngữ pháp Cần chú ý những
lỗi sai có nói trong phần comment “G”.
Chưa sử dụng đa dạng cấu trúc ngữ pháp.
Overall 6.5

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