Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle.

Both schools and parents are

responsible for solving this problem. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

STUDENT 1
In recent years, maintaining a healthy life has become one of the MOST pressing
issues among people of all ageS, especially children. Although some people think that
young children nowadays have an unhealthy lifestyle. I would partly agree that both school
and parents are responsible for solving this problem.
On one hand, parents have a primary role in maintainING a healthy lifestyle for their
children. In particular, THE choice of daily diet by parents can affect to their children’S
health status. If their children’s daily diet is not carefully balanced with nutrients, (it will
have a very negative impact on their children’s health. As a result,) their children will get
various diseases, such as obesity, AND diabetes, and it will seriously affect the
development of their children. Therefore, they need to know how to balance nutrients for
each daily diet by changing the menu regularly, AND addING more vegetableS TO in the
meal to ensure that their children have enough resistance to prevent some serious
disease.
On the other hand, I also agree that schools have ARE responsible for THE
unhealthy lifestyle of many children. Nowadays, many people find that their children have
lack of physical activities at school. Moreover, it also THEREFORE, THIS FACT makes
their children increasingly obese and less active. The school should have more
extraCURRICULAR activities outside the AFTER class for their studentS, allowING them
TO keep fit and stay healthy.
Another side, the government also have partly responsible REGARDING THE
GOVERNMENT, THEY ALSO TAKE SOME RESPONSIBILITY for this problem because
they have a great influence in community. They can conduct the official news about the
harmful effect of obesity to raise public awareness. So, SO THAT THEY people can stay
active and get LIVE A healthier lifestyle. They also should control the frequency of
advertisements for foods and drinks which have A high level of sugar and fat. It IS mainly
because IT HELPS to help the people make wise choices for their healthy LIVES life.
In conclusion, ALTHOUGH IT IS EVIDENT / SIGNIFICANT THAT both schools and
parents are partly MAINLY responsible for an unhealthy lifestyle of many children recently,
I ALSO BELIEVE THAT THE GOVERNMENT playS a huge part in children's lives.
Although the government have great influence, they can’t CANNOT always control the
advertising of foods and drinks high in sugar and fat. Therefore, parents have a duty to
managing children’s daily diet and school need to be in charge of children’s physical
activities to maintaining a healthy life for their children.
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