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Tom Daley
Wow! Who is that figure twirling through the air high above
the swimming pool, and what is he all about? Read on and
find out…
Introduction
British diver Tom Daley has
represented his country in many
competitions worldwide, including
four Olympic Games. He specialises
in platform dives - both as a solo
athlete and in synchronised events.
Sporting Beginnings
Having learned to swim at the age of four, Tom then began
diving lessons at his local pool aged seven. Although, he was
also keen on other sports including judo. He was soon spotted
by diving coach Andy Banks, who became his trainer when Tom
was eight years old. From that age onwards, Tom was part of
an increasingly intensive training regime – including regular
lessons and training camps in other cities. He has admitted that
he found being away from home very difficult as a young child,
and when Tom was placed in a competitive squad and began
travelling to diving events, his father decided he would give up
his job and accompany Tom on the road; had he not been there,
Tom might not have become so successful.
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Continued Success
Progress, achievements and awards came thick and fast after
that for Tom: he was junior 10m champion at the British
Championships in 2005, 2006 and 2007; BBC ‘Young Sports
Personality of the Year’ award winner three times and by the
age of 14, he was Britain’s youngest competitor at the 2008
Beijing Olympics. There, he reached the final with his dive
partner Blake Aldridge, as well as competing in the individual
10m event. At 16, he was a double-gold winner at the
Commonwealth Games.
Family Tragedy
Sadly, Tom’s biggest supporter – his father – was diagnosed
with a brain tumour when Tom was only 12. He died in
2011. Tom was devastated by the loss and has credited his
dad with making him the person
he is today.
Poster Boy
In the lead-up to the London 2012
Olympic Games, Tom was one of
the British athletes promoting
the Games around the country.
He won a bronze medal in the
individual 10m dive (which he
dedicated to his late father) but
unfortunately finished 4th in the
synchronised event.
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Dedicated Sportsman
Tom is seen as an inspiration for young sports fans across the
United Kingdom. His determination and willingness to train
incredibly hard make him an excellent role model. As Tom says,
“Oh, you have to want it more than anything. It has to be the
biggest thing in your life – otherwise why would you do it?”
Family Life
Tom Daley married Dustin Lance Black, LGBTQ+ rights activist,
film and TV producer, director and screenwriter, in 2017. They
met at an industry event, with Daley later saying that it was,
‘a real love-at-first-sight thing’. They both have a child together,
whose name is Robert Ray Black-Daley. The family live together
in London.
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Tom Daley
Wow! Who is that figure twirling through the air high above
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an introduction the swimming pool, and what is he all about? Read on and
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the main events
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Introduction1
British diver Tom Daley has
represented his country in many
competitions worldwide, including
four Olympic Games. He specialises
in platform dives - both as a solo
athlete and in synchronised events.
Sporting Beginnings2
Having learned to swim at the age of four3, Tom then began4 4
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past tense and
diving lessons at his local pool aged seven. Although, he was third person
also keen on other sports including judo. He was soon spotted
by diving coach Andy Banks, who became4 his trainer when
Tom was eight years old. From that age onwards, Tom was part
of an increasingly intensive training regime – including regular
5 lessons and training camps in other cities. He has admitted that
their feelings
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points and events
in their life and when Tom was placed in a competitive squad and began
travelling to diving events, his father decided he would give up
his job and accompany Tom on the road; had he not been there,
Tom might not have become so successful.
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information First Signs of a Star2
about the key
events in the Only one month after his tenth birthday, Tom became the
person's life in
chronological
youngest-ever winner of the under-18 platform competition3 in
paragraphs the National Junior Championships. Unfortunately, despite the
fact he had met the tough qualification standard for the 2006
Commonwealth Games, Tom couldn’t be selected for the England
team at that time since he wasn’t4 old enough. However, later in
2005 at the British Championships, he did become the under-18
champion in 10m platform and 3m springboard.
Continued Success2
Progress, achievements and awards came4 thick and fast after
that for Tom: he was junior 10m champion at the British
Championships in 2005, 2006 and 2007; BBC ‘Young Sports
Personality of the Year’ award winner three times and by
the age of 14, he was Britain’s youngest competitor at the
2008 Beijing Olympics.3 There, he reached4 the final with 3
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facts about
his dive partner Blake Aldridge, as well as competing in the achievements,
individual 10m event. At 16, he was a double-gold winner at influences and
significant people
the Commonwealth Games.
Family Tragedy2
Sadly, Tom’s biggest supporter – his father – was diagnosed
with a brain tumour when Tom was only 12. He died in
2011.3 Tom was devastated by the loss and has credited his
dad with making him the person
he is today.5 4
verbs written in
past tense and
Poster Boy 2
third person
In the lead-up to the London 2012
Olympic Games, Tom was one of
the British athletes promoting
the Games around the country.3
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their feelings He won a bronze medal in the
about different individual 10m dive (which he
points and events
in their life dedicated4 to his late father) but
unfortunately finished 4th in the
synchronised event.
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Dedicated Sportsman
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quotes from the Tom is seen as an inspiration for young sports fans across the 7
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or other key
United Kingdom.7 His determination and willingness to train are/ will be
people in their life incredibly hard make him an excellent role model. As Tom says, remembered
Family Life²
Tom Daley married⁴ Dustin Lance Black, LGBTQ+ rights activist,
film and TV producer, director and screenwriter, in 2017³. They
met at an industry event, with Daley later saying that it was, ‘a
real love-at-first-sight thing’⁶. They both have a child together,
whose name is Robert Ray Black-Daley³. The family live together
in London.
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represented his country in the blink of an
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Sporting Beginnings
Having learned to swim3 at the age of four,13 Tom then began 16
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sentences diving lessons at his local pool aged seven. Although3, he was colons to
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also keen on other sports9 including judo. He was soon spotted4
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within sentences
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where, when,
child, and when Tom was placed4 in a competitive squad and
whose and that. began travelling to diving events, his father decided he would5
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chef, cooked
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been there, Tom might not have become2 so successful. 6
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statutory
relative clauses a bronze medal in the individual
8
5
modal verbs dashes and
(e.g. can, commas for
could, should, Family Life parenthesis
would, etc.) Tom Daley married Dustin Lance Black, LGBTQ+ rights activist, 16
semi-colons,
6
multi-clause film and TV producer, director and screenwriter, in 2017². dashes and
sentences colons to
They met at an industry event, with Daley later saying that it separate clauses
7
single clause was, ‘12a real love-at-first-sight thing’12. They both have a child
sentence for hyphens to
17
effect - short together, whose³ name is Robert Ray Black-Daley. The family avoid ambiguity
and snappy
sentence live together in London⁷.
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relative clauses statutory
within sentences spelling words
starting with
who, which,
where, when,
whose and that.
(e.g. My mum,
who is a great
chef, cooked
dinner for me.)
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Grammar, Punctuation and Spelling Features
All text: Accurate 9
preposition
spelling, phrases to
Tom Daley
punctuation and add detail
grammar taught and clarity
in previous years (e.g. under the
is demonstrated floorboards,
throughout Wow!7 Who is that figure twirling through the air high above across the room,
the text. the swimming pool9, and what is he all about? Read on and etc.)
2
formal find out… 10
adverbs and
vocabulary and adverbials to
sentence structure
that matches the
Introduction add detail and
clarity (e.g.
formality of British diver Tom Daley has bravely, often,
the text repeatedly, in
represented his country in the blink of an
a range of 18 eye, etc.)
many competitions worldwide,
3
linking words/
phrases, including four Olympic Games. 11
expanded
including noun phrases to
adverbials, to He specialises in platform dives add detail and
join sentences clarity (e. g. a
and paragraphs
– both as a solo athlete and in state-of-the-art
together (e.g. synchronised events9. computer or a
first, then, hideous, green
after, while, alien with a
significantly, Family and Early Life pointy nose.)
likewise, for Thomas Robert Daley was born4
instance etc.) as 12
inverted
well as repetition in Plymouth on 21st May, 1994. commas
and ellipsis
His father, Rob,15 trained as an 13
commas for
4
passive verbs electrician10 while3 his mother (Debbie)15 was a housewife. Tom clarity
(e.g. The Spanish
team were beaten is their eldest child:16 his two brothers, William and Ben,15 are apostrophes for
14
by France or The
sweets were eaten three and five years younger than him. Tom attended local schools possession
by the children.) and, despite his education being interrupted2&3 by competitions, 15
brackets,
5
modal verbs he still achieved great exam results at his secondary school9. dashes and
(e.g. can, commas for
parenthesis
could, should,
would, etc.)
Sporting Beginnings
Having learned to swim3 at the age of four,13 Tom then began 16
semi-colons,
6
multi-clause dashes and
sentences diving lessons at his local pool aged seven. Although3, he was colons to
separate clauses
7
single clause
also keen on other sports9 including judo. He was soon spotted4
sentence for by diving coach Andy Banks, who became his trainer when Tom hyphens to
17
statutory
8
relative clauses lessons and training camps in other cities. He has admitted that spelling words
within sentences
starting with he found being away from home9 very10 difficult as a young
who, which,
where, when,
child, and when Tom was placed4 in a competitive squad and
whose and that. began travelling to diving events, his father decided he would5
(e.g. My mum,
who is a great give up his job and accompany18 Tom on the road;16 had he not
chef, cooked
dinner for me.)
been there, Tom might not have become2 so successful. 6
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statutory
relative clauses He won a bronze medal in the
8
5
modal verbs dashes and
(e.g. can, commas for
could, should, Family Life parenthesis
would, etc.) Tom Daley married Dustin Lance Black, LGBTQ+ rights activist, 16
semi-colons,
6
multi-clause film and TV producer, director and screenwriter, in 2017². dashes and
sentences colons to
They met at an industry event, with Daley later saying that it separate clauses
7
single clause was, ‘12a real love-at-first-sight thing’12. They both have a child
sentence for hyphens to
17
effect - short together, whose³ name is Robert Ray Black-Daley. The family avoid ambiguity
and snappy
sentence live together in London⁷.
Y5/Y6
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8
relative clauses statutory
within sentences spelling words
starting with
who, which,
where, when,
whose and that.
(e.g. My mum,
who is a great
chef, cooked
dinner for me.)