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Creative Writing Chapters 1 4
Creative Writing Chapters 1 4
6. You must set high standards and be ready for • what they did that day
disappointment. • lists of books to read
• drafts of letters
• quotations
• columns of words
CHAPTER 2
• bits of dialogue
KEEPING A JOURNAL • dreams
• ramblings about events and people
Almost all writers keep a journal. Some keep • memories
several different journals or notebooks: • anticipations
• A working journal in which they practice writing • story possibilities
and work out parts or whole drafts of a poem or • descriptions
story or play. • lists of intriguing words and phrases
In writing, the phrase has its common meaning Point of view you choose affects many other
plus a specialized meaning having to do with aspects of writing. Because point of view touches
grammatical person. For example, a story may be upon attitude and personality, it can affect the
told in the “first person," that is, from the “I" words you choose and even the sentence patterns
perspective. Because of its fundamental nature, with which you string them together.
this complex concern affects everything else the
writer does. It is the key to the structure of the THE DECISION AND ITS CONSEQUENCES
work and to the reader's response.
Granted, some of the examples above may indeed
WHO WILL DO THE TELLING? be close to the author's voice rather than a voice
We began this book with a point of view. That created especially for the work; however, from our
point of view involves both decisions we made point of view as readers, we can hear the story
before we began writing and decisions we made, only through the narrator's voice, which shapes our
consciously or unconsciously, as we were writing response to that story. Consciously or
and revising. Though the aims of this book are unconsciously the writer has the following
different from the aims of a story, poem, or play, decisions to make. He or she must:
1. Choose a narrator, usually first or third person. knows, and feels. Other characters are treated
2. Decide what the narrator's attitude will be. objectively: what they say and do is recorded.
3. Decide how the reader should respond to the However, what the central character thinks about
narrator and how to make the narrator create that them is an important ingredient. Sometimes, on
response. top of this limited omniscience, the narrator is
allowed a bit of knowledge or speculation beyond
The decision about who tells the story (even if the what the central character knows. This is important
"story" is about someone's feelings as expressed in in order for the reader to gain perspective on that
a poem) makes the story take on certain contours. character, to get outside of the main character's
No convincing narrator is totally objective, and the head. Most successful stories and novels use some
subjective perceptions and needs of the storyteller variation of the limited omniscient point of view.
make the story come out the way it does.
Objective limitation. The objective limitation
One meaning of point of view has to do with the point of view is most like that of the dramatist.
physical perspective a viewer can have on the Setting, action, and dialogue are the only tools the
subject. author allows the narrator-self. The reader is given
no direct access to the minds of the characters and
THE RANGE OF PERSPECTIVES is left to form judgments on his or her own. This
perspective is as difficult, in its own way, as
THIRD PERSON unlimited omniscience.
The third person narrator speaks from outside of
the story as an onlooker or reporter rather than as a FIRST PERSON
participant. The degree to which the narrator is In first person point of view the narrator is one of
given access to external and internal information the characters in the story or novel, either a
and the degree to which the narrator is allowed to witness to the events or a participant. The
express judgments about that information narrator's relationship to the events and to the other
determine more precisely the narrative stance. characters determines what can be convincingly
Within the broad third person category, the revealed from the chosen perspective. The first
narrator has three options: person narrator does not have access to the minds
of others (unless the narrator is a psychiatrist
Full omniscience. The fully omniscient narrator revealing professionally gained knowledge — a
accesses the minds, feelings, and dreams of all the cute trick). At every moment of the story's
characters in the work. Thus, the author, through progress, the first person narrator is being
the narrator, can shift focus along the way, giving characterized by the way he or she thinks and
the reader a variety of perspectives. This kind of speaks.
omniscient narrator also shifts back and forth
between subjective and objective approaches, Central character. When the narrator is the
sometimes becoming engaged in explaining, central character, the fiction is borrowing the
interpreting, assessing, and moralizing upon the appeal of autobiography. The author has to be
events and characters. The narrator may at times careful to restrain this kind of narrator. It is easy to
comment extensively, a technique we call sacrifice the developmental lines of the story to the
editorializing. The absence of any limitation on narrator's ego. Often first person narration is an
the narrator's information (and presence) can exploration of how memory works and how a
create havoc for an inexperienced writer. The person comes to understand, with the passage of
tendency is to lose focus, to bully the reader, and time, the meaning of events that happened years
to subjugate the story and characters to thematic earlier.
concerns in unattractive ways.
Limited omniscience. The limited omniscient Minor character/witness. "I was there" can be
narrator stands behind the shoulder of one almost as compelling as "It happened to me." This
character, usually the major character, and conveys kind of narrator has to be a true personality, not
to the reader only what that character experiences, merely a convenient reporter of events. The reader
must be able to gauge the degree of emotional Latinate word, a complex sentence, a nickname, a
interest — bias — of this narrator as well as of the noun instead of a pronoun, a quiet word rather than
central character narrator. Why is it important to a noisy one. Your first job as a writer is to master
the teller to relate these events? the medium of your trade — language itself. This
is not as simple a task as you may think.
As you can see, there are places where these
categories overlap. Certain kinds of third person It is not only when writers are writing that they are
narration come very close to first person witness, sensitive to words. Just as painters are aware of
but more than pronoun choice should separate colors whenever they open their eyes, just as
these perspectives. The third person narrator, even composers are alert to sounds even when they
if given a personality as in Henry Fielding's Joseph aren't writing music, so too are writers aware of
Andrews, is primarily there to tell the story. The words whenever words are near. Writers are
first person minor character is involved in some always on a busman's holiday, listening to people
way, even if not in terms of the main action. Of use words and, in their reading, testing the choices
course, in works like those by Arthur Conan of other writers.
Doyle, Dr. Watson works with Sherlock Holmes,
he doesn't just know about him or see him from Our purpose in this chapter is (1) to get you
afar. thinking about ways to hone your word sense, (2)
to introduce the complex decision making that
goes into finding the right words to nail your
As you continue experimenting with point of view, meaning to the reader's mind, (3) to change some
you will become more and more aware of its mistaken notions you may have about effective
ramifications. Selecting the appropriate narrator or word choice (diction).
speaker for a story or poem has a lot to do with the
shape of the work: what information, in what We offer one basic principle:
order, with what coloring, reaches the reader. Once For a writer, there is no such thing as a
you have made —or remade —this fundamental synonym.
decision, you must follow out its logical
consequences. We assume that there is always a best choice. For
a best choice there is no substitute.
The writer must learn to make analogous Actually, what they must do is learn the only
judgments: when to use an adjective, when to use a language we have as well as they can. Creativity is
not measured by the difficulty or sophistication of However, once you abandon the belief in
your words. Nor is it a sign of creativity to foil the synonyms, the choosing becomes more complex,
reader's expectation at every turn by choosing more exciting, and more professional. Thesaurus
words for their puzzle quotient. Finally, creativity mentality assumes that any word on the list will
does not license the misuse of language. Only a do. The genuine writer knows that only one of
responsible, caring attitude toward language makes them is best. Moreover, the person who
for good writing of any kind. relies on the synonym list assumes that the best
choice is on the list to begin with.
The sense of what a word connotes, either alone or
in a particular context, may differ slightly from CHOOSING WELL
person to person, depending upon one's Now let's take a closer look at the criteria listed
experiences with life and language. There are no earlier.
rules, since connotations are in the ear of the
listener; the point here is that you must be aware of Accuracy
all the fine adjustments that may be necessary. When a word choice is accurate, it is free from
error. It is "correct" in the sense that its accepted
EXERCISES meaning is the meaning the author intends. Unless
1. A woman is preparing to meet a man. Write a a word choice is accurate, it has no chance of
brief passage in being effective. Here are some examples of
which “see-through” would be appropriate. inaccuracy in diction;
Rewrite so that 1. In his valedictory speech. Brad made illusions to
“transparent” would be the best choice. Hollywood stars.
2. Write a brief scene for each word in these [The writer has confused "illusion" and
triplets: "allusion."]
a. eat/dine/consume 2. Brad had won far lesser awards than his father.
b. sole/single/individual [The writer has confused "fewer" and "lesser."
c. whiskey/liquor/booze Unintentionally, the writer has
d. but/conversely/on the other hand addressed the significance of the awards rather
e. single/one-base hit/one-bagger than the number of them.]
f. sexpot/seductress/temptress 3. Another significant factor was her leapfrogging
g. teacher/mentor/professor suspicion that graduate school was not, nor would
h. frugal/cheap/economical it be, her dispensation. [Two words don't mean
i. morning/dawn/daybreak what the writer hopes they mean.]
j. fraud/hoax/deceit 4. Once, after a particularly bitter loss—the Oilers
k. caviar/roe/fish eggs beat the Bears by a dropkick—Dad patted my
3. Explain the difference between having “know- shoulder and said, "Son, I feel bad, too."
how” and “skill”? [Dropkicks went out of the game before the Oilers
A “fear” and a “dread”? A “job" and an came into it. The writer means "field goal."]
“occupation”? A “helper” and an “assistant”? 5. I tried to light the half-smoked Camel, but my
“Work” and “labor”? fingers were shaking and I lit it twice. Finally, the
stogie ignited. [A "stogie" refers to a cigar, not a
One way of sharpening your language skills is to cigarette.]
practice and then
evaluate word substitutions while you are reading Precision
already published works. In writing, however, we The meanings of words have greater and lesser
recommend a very sparing and qualified use of the ranges. It is just as accurate to call Mr. Rockwell
thesaurus. A word chosen from a list simply the spouse of Mrs. Rockwell as it is to call him her
because it is on the list is not likely to be an husband. However, while "husband" is the more
effective choice. The thesaurus can be a good sharply defined term and thus the more precise,
memory jogger; it can provide you with a range of some occasions will dictate spouse as the better
possibilities from which to make choices. choice. Also, we might say that “spouse” is precise
in a legal context but not in other contexts. Here Writers need to choose language that creates a
are some examples of damaging imprecision: sensory world for the reader's imagination to enter.
1. The small town loomed in the distance. [In the As they struggle with their craft, writers learn the
broad sense, “loomed” is accurate; however, its fine balance between abstract and concrete
normal and expected usage has to do with figures, formulations. However, as a rule of thumb we
states, or images of impending doom or argue: when in doubt, make it concrete.
magnitude. A “small town" would be far less
likely to loom than would a mountain.] Concreteness — specificity of sensation — is a
2. The microwave time buzzed and the smoky relative matter. Even terms that are not abstract
aroma of cooking meat penetrated her can be made more concrete by being made more
consciousness causing her stomach to lurch. specific. In the sentences that follow, the italicized
[Many problems here. Did the time buzz, or the general terms are followed by more specific
microwave? “Aroma" is accurate but not precise alternatives in parentheses:
because we associate “aroma” with a pleasant
smell, not one that turns your stomach. Is the 1. The girl (child, toddler, daughter, princess,
ready-made phrase “penetrated her consciousness” Alice) cried (wailed, sobbed, whimpered).
accurate? Precise? Concrete? Appropriate? 2. He (the student, Edgar) got (asked for, ordered,
Idiomatic? (See below.) Do we need to be told that bought, demanded) food (Italian food, pizza,
the meat is “cooking"?] pepperoni pizza).
3. The airline crash dominated the headlines:
“Thirty dead, sixty-eight wounded." [We would The general principle of concreteness is that you
expect “injured" in such a situation, even if the call things by the most specific name you can and
people have suffered wounds. As worded, the you describe actions with the most specific verbs
passage suggests a battlefield statistic rather than you can, leaving minimal work to be done by
an accidental catastrophe.] modifiers. Of course, to be concrete you have to
either be observant or know enough to appear so.
Concreteness Most of us know that a forest is made of trees, but
Concrete diction is usually preferred over abstract few of us are in the habit of thinking about what
or general diction. Concrete diction evokes types of trees. The accomplished writer knows
images, bits of sensory experience. how to find and when to use the concrete word.
Appropriate diction, as we have seen, means many Priscilla had always thought Jeffrey as handsome
things. In a given context, any word or word as a prince—in fact, a character in the romances
combination can be appropriate. The writer's job she read by the hour.
requires an understanding of all the ways in which
word choices can be appropriate or inappropriate. In this example, the author used the trite
expression to characterize Pricilla's way of
Idiomatic Usage thinking as “trite."
An idiomatic usage is one that has a unique
grammatical construction or a meaning that cannot Generally speaking, then, you want to avoid the
be logically derived from its combined parts. trite, but not at the expense of the natural. Examine
When we say “the kettle is boiling" we are these alternative passages:
speaking idiomatically (and probably putting
words together in an untranslatable way). After all, 1. In spite of the statistical probability that the
the kettle is not boiling, the water inside it is. situation would eventuate negatively, and half-
Many of us, because we confuse idiomatic wondering if she wanted it to, she perpetrated a
expressions with trite expressions, have been fraudulent optimism upon herself and aimed her
frightened away from using standard English countenance in the direction of the inevitable harsh
idioms. While it is true that triteness is to be resolution.
avoided, the rich idiomatic resources of our 2. Hoping against hope, she faced the music.
language should be employed whenever they are
appropriate — and they almost always are
appropriate. Neither of these renderings is effective. However,
the first is so clotted, tortured, and unnatural that,
The following sentences contain trite expressions: if we had to choose, we'd select the trite yet
1. He was as handsome as a prince. smooth and spontaneous movement of the second.
2. She had a devilish twinkle in her eyes which, at
times, would flash with anger. In brief, you will usually want to work at a natural,
3. Their marriage started out all lovey-dovey. idiomatic diction that captures the quality of
4. Whenever they went out for pizza, they would friendly rather than academic or professional talk.
travel down memory lane, recalling the long lost There are exceptions, of course. Writers of
images of their youths. historical fiction might appropriately use a more
formal or archaic diction in order to suggest the
The following contain serviceable idioms: past.
1. Despite Elliot's good looks, Buffy could not
work up any interest in him. Like any other language tool, idioms can be
2. Elliot ducked out the back door rather than face misused or inappropriately used. Still, we
up to Buffy's anger. encourage you to use idioms rather than to go out
3. Buffy was Elliot's dream. of your way to avoid them and end up with stuffy
or overwritten prose. Here are some guidelines:
Idioms tend to be metaphoric and therefore
colorful. Most of all, they are natural, and the 1. Prefer a common idiom to eccentric diction:
natural is rarely misleading or ineffective. Trite Buffy felt that he had no call to jump down her
expressions, on the other hand, signal their throat simply because she forgot the mustard.
tiredness to an alert reader who will sense that the 2. Prefer nothing to trite diction: He was handsome
writer has plugged in the first available off-the- (not “as handsome as a prince"). Buffy felt a mess
rack phrase. These are constructions whose impact (not "as if she had been through a meat grinder").
has been worn away through overuse. Of course, 3. Prefer something you may think is trite to a
forced expression: When they walked by without
saying hello, Buffy felt that she had been given the deal with the padding sewn tightly to the rather
cold shoulder (not "as chilled as a lobster in a obvious, even silly, thought that both the big and
freezer"). little occurrences can become sweet memories.
This type of overwriting can disguise paucity of
SOME DICTION PROBLEMS thought even from the writer. (Of course, the
Many novice writers have the mistaken notion that passage might work if it revealed a rather foolish
they should "write writing." That is, they believe character's habitual style.)
that effective writing consists of verbal
prestidigitation and pyrotechnics. They believe not One type of overwriting grows from a virtue, the
that the words need to be chosen for specific tasks virtue of presenting precise detail for the reader.
but rather that the words chosen need to sound This virtue becomes a problem when the writer
important and weighty. Some beginners were becomes too ambitious and gives us too many
actually taught to worship words for words' sake; details to absorb. In the following passage, which
some simply pile word upon words as a substitute describes someone the major character sees once
for thinking. The end result of believing in this and never again, the writer's purpose is to describe
false god is twofold: (1) The writing becomes a representative character in a subway crowd.
padded and/or inflated; (2) problems in effective
word choice are actually disguised. But even He was dressed in the standard Washington
before that happens, the false god leads the writer attorney uniformconservative suit, solid color
to put enormous efforts into the wrong type of shirt. Ivy League tie, tan raincoat, Irish walking
work: the work of impressing rather than hat. Yet behind his Yuppiestyle glasses, his face
convincing the reader. had a devilish twinkle accented by a dimple you
could dangle barefoot in and brown hair that
We might have discussed the various guises in strayed past the regulation length, curling at least
which padded and inflated diction choices appear an inch down his collar.
under one or another of our major headings:
accuracy, precision, concreteness, appropriateness, Since there is no reason in the story to give us all
and idiomatic naturalness. However, the following this detail, the elaboration becomes a distraction.
strivings after quick effects appear often enough to In fact, when we look carefully at exactly what the
merit a separate section. They are not positive narrator has told us, we wonder — as we did in the
criteria for emulation, but negative habits to be former case — if the words are attached to any
avoided. authentic observations. Do faces "twinkle”?
Overwriting Overmodification
Many of the subclasses discussed elsewhere in this This kind of overwriting comes from the
section could be placed into this category. You admirable attempt to be concrete. However, the
overwrite when you pad your language without piling up of adjectives, adverbs, and especially
adding meaning or impact, as in the following prepositional phrases is a signal that something is
example from the beginning of a story: wrong. Often the muscle of sentence structure and
meaning gets covered over by the modifying fat.
It's funny how certain things, the biggest moments Sometimes choosing a more specific noun or verb
and the smallest passing thoughts alike, how they is the solution. In the following cases, the
can both become your sweetest memories later on. modification is unnecessary because its meaning
And, years later, when the places and the people so overlaps the meaning of the modified word.
who gave you these tender times are gone, their
memories become starbright highlight colors for A faded woven tapestry hung from the lintel of the
the tapestry of your life. door. [Most tapestries are woven; "lintel” is the
The problems in this passage cannot be solved part of the door from which one would assume
only by removing the obvious overwriting (in something as large as a tapestry would be hung.]
italics). Taking out such overblown adjectives as
starbright” is only the first step. One still needs to
Her lungs felt as if someone had stabbed her with a The result is a scattered effect, and some
knife. [Here a trite simile is automatically uncertainty about whether or not the writer is
continued to its predictable end. Without the always referring to the same thing.
unnecessary final phrase, the expression is
sharper.] Latinate Diction
Linking up a series of polysyllabic words from
Saying It Twice Latin roots makes your writing self-consciously
Redundancy is a common problem and has many learned and unpleasantly pretentious. It also slows
causes, some of which we have already addressed. the reader down, as the following sentence
In the example that follows, the writer refused to illustrates:
pay attention to what her words were saying, or
were supposed to say. Jane held to her assertion despite Bill's
remonstrance to the contrary. [Can you put this
Directly in front of me, a modern glass and steel into plain English?]
tower, illumination provided by lights in its
occupied rooms, sparkled like a monolithic crystal. Archaic Diction
[There is some nonsense in the closing simile; can This habit usually springs from a misguided notion
you detect it?] about how to sound "literary" or "poetic." We no
longer believe that such words or expressions as
Excessive Variation "yore," "thee," "o'er," or "finny prey" (for "fish")
This problem used to go by the name of "elegant confer a poetic or dignified quality to writing. In
variation," but the issue has less to do with fact, the convention of our day is that effective
elegance than with a learned fear of repeating key writing demands the words and rhythms of
words and phrases. With or without the "help" of everyday speech. "Alas" and "ill tidings" sound
the thesaurus, many writers act as if repetition like attempts to impose emotions rather than create
were a deadly sin. While repetition can become them.
deadly, often the means taken to avoid it create
even worse problems for the reader. In the passage Sonic Boom
below, the student writer seems to be driven by a Sometimes intentionally, sometimes not, a writer
misguided but honest desire to avoid repeating his allows the sounds to drown out meaning by calling
key noun. too much attention to themselves, as the following
case demonstrates:
As Jim entered the turn, the motorcycle seemed to
sink into the ground. He could feel the shocks The blustery day threatened to batter the delicate
being compressed as the force of the turn pushed blossoms that had drawn gaggles of gawking
him and his machine to a lower center of gravity. tourists to the nation's capital. [One might argue
As he leaned into the turn, he stuck out his knee that the alliteration on "b" has a positive effect, but
for balance. It was hard to remain in control, but certainly the italicized words make too much
Jim calmly, smoothly, lifted his head, twisted the noise.]
vehicle upright, and pulled back with his right
wrist. Instantly, the bike shot forward, its front If, as we have suggested, all successful writing
wheel once again coming off the ground. Already comes from editing and rewriting, then every good
entering the next turn, Jim shifted his weight writer must become a word detective, hunting
forward and braked hard. Slowing to 100 miles per down the criminal elements in early drafts and
hour, he leaned the Kawasaki once more over to taking them out of circulation. Breaking bad habits
the left. Passing by the pits, he could see David is only part of the job, however. A writer must
and Georgetti keeping track of his time while develop a positive working sense of what makes
Rhonda displayed it on the leader board for him to for effective diction-accuracy, precision,
see. At the end of the first session, Jim pulled his concreteness, appropriateness, and idiomatic
trusty mount back into the pit. usage. A writer must understand what it means to
live without the comfort of synonyms.
FUN WITH WORDS a grand madness. Stil, one could almost draw a
Word play is an important activity. It can help you picture of each imaginary flower.
build an active vocabulary, sharpen your diction,
and freshen your word combinations. In his poem Word play helps you go beyond your concern for
"Because I Never Learned the Names of Flowers,” diction that is literally accurate, precise, concrete,
Rod Jellema shows us the sheer fun of word play appropriate, and idiomatic. It allows you to enter
and the power of expectation. Even though the the world of figurative language, a world you must
tone and technique are playful, any reader can explore in order to make your writing lively.
recognize the genuine emotion in this love poem.
FIGURES OF SPEECH
Because I Never Learned the Names of Flowers Writers achieve economy and vividness of
expression through figures of speech, those
it is moonlight and white where complex ways of perceiving and phrasing
I slink away from my cat-quiet blue rubber truck comparisons and contrasts. At bottom, metaphors,
and motion myself to back it up to your ear. similes, and other figures of speech are not literary
I peel back the doors of the van and begin devices; they are the ways in which our minds try
to hushload into your sleep to make sense of experience. Everyday language is
the whole damn botanical cargo of Spring. filled with these constructions. When we speak of
"the head of a pin," "the teeth of a gear, the
Sleeper, I whisk you „ shoulder of a road," or "a dead-end street," we are
Trivia and Illium, Sweet Peristalsis, Flowering speaking figuratively. To call someone "spineless"
Delirium. is not to make a literal statement, but a figurative
one. Colloquial expressions like "get off my back"
Sprigs of Purple Persiflage and Lovers' Leap, attest to the figurative habits of mind that generate
slips new ways of communicating our ideas and
of Hysteria stick in my hair. I gather clumps of feelings.
Timex,
handfuls of Buttertongues, Belly buttons, and Some of the most successful figures eventually
Bluelets. turn into cliches — dead metaphors that have lost
their imaginative punch. Let's explore a few of
I come with Trading Nebula, I come with Late- these.
Blooming
Paradox, with Creeping Pyromania, Pink What genius first came up with the expression
Apoplex, “he's (or she's) a brick" to make a point about a
and Climbing Solar Plexis, friend's solid dependability? A brick is a building
block of reliable dimension and durability. A brick
whispering: Needlenose, is kind of square. How do these physical traits
Juice Cup, Godstem, Nexus, Sex-us, relate to character traits? Does the image of the
Condominium brick come to mind when the expression is used?
Do we any longer enjoy the particular areas of
from The Eighth Day: New & Selected Poems overlap between two relatively unlike things — a
human personality and a construction material?
Part of the fun of Jellema's poem is to discover the Once we stop seeing the brick, the metaphor is
strange tension between what we expect (names of dead and may have become a cliche, an expression
flowers) and the actual words and phrases the poet to be avoided unless selected for special, limited
has put in their places. To most novices, and purposes (to make fun of it, for instance).
perhaps even to some experts, there is something
almost convincing about these new "names.” Some We don't have to avoid every expression that we
of this has to do with the Latinate formulations recognize as a dead metaphor. In fact, we can't. As
that sound like those used in botany. This love we insisted earlier, many of these formulations are
poem, of course, is filled with physical passion and simply available idiomatic expressions that work
far better than outlandish alternatives some writers similes can be so farfetched, so forced, that readers
invent to avoid sounding trite. will either tune out or be so dazzled by the writer's
ingenuity that they will miss the point. More often,
Figurative expressions are literal lies. In the the problem is that elements in the metaphor are in
equation of metaphor, two unlike things (events, conflict with one another. We call such a
traits, or objects) are asserted to be identical: A = construction a mixed metaphor. The writer who
B. puts down "My spirit, like my blood, slowly drips
from my body, white feathers now turned
To give a footstep breath with which to puff likens crimson" has lost hold of effective figurative logic.
that action to animal or even human behavior. This It would seem that the spirit is being likened to
special kind of metaphorical expression is called white feathers, but it is also likened to blood. Once
personification. it is blood, it can't drip on itself, turning itself
crimson; it must have been crimson to begin with.
simile — a figurative linking in which A is Mixed metaphors often come from overwriting,
explicitly likened to B. allowing needless complexity and elaboration to
ruin a work¬ able insight.
In examples, a literal lie made something not only
vivid, not only fresh in expression, but clear as When we use images suggestively, they turn out to
well. Though it seems paradoxical, effective be more than descriptive. They may involve the
figures of speech do just that — lie to make things sort of figurative comparisons discussed above in
clear. Without this heightened clarity, figurative which one term is equated or related to another in
language is no better than muddy language of any a special way. Sometimes images generate
kind. The writer of the passage below probably felt associations in which the second term is not
proud of the way in which he made an abstraction named, but still understood. When an image
concrete — one of the goals of much figurative represents something other than or beyond itself, it
expression. We wonder, however, if the mean¬ ing is being used as a symbol.
is clear: "Time is like a trail cut through the woods
that we crawl down with our noses in the dirt." Many symbols are conventional: their meanings
are shared by a community or culture. Our flag is
One more point about similes. They are not simply one such symbol; the cross is another.
comparisons using like or as. The phrase "Jane Traditionally, the color white is a symbol of purity,
looks like her sister" is a literal comparison (it is red of passion, purple of royalty. No one can refer
actually true) rather than a figurative one. to a snake or serpent without suggesting the
Remember, it is the discovery of an area of meanings developed in the story of Adam and Eve.
likeness or overlap between two essentially We use symbols of this sort all the time, often
different terms that is the basis for a figurative without even thinking about them.
expression. In our own writing, we can also generate meanings
in a particular work through local symbols. For
Two special kinds of metaphor are synecdoche and example, in the following poem by A. E.
metonymy. In synecdoche, a part stands for the Housman, "London" is used to suggest all that is
whole, as when we call a detective a “private eye." opposed to gentleness, innocence, and
Metonymy works differently; an item is used in inexperience. It becomes a symbol for a worldly
place of something associated with it, as in “the toughness and a worldly style.
Pentagon announced." Obviously, the building
didn't announce anything. In practice, the two From the wash the laundress sends
devices are often indistinguishable. My collars home with ravelled ends;
I must fit, now these are frayed.
Though we have been giving examples from My neck with new ones, London-made.
poetry, figurative language is part of all kinds of
writing. So, too, are the problems that emerge Homespun collars, homespun hearts.
when figures of speech go berserk. Metaphors and Wear to rags in foreign parts.
Mine at least's as good as done.
And I must get a London one.