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2024 Year 9 Checkpoint 1 Feedback Lesson
2024 Year 9 Checkpoint 1 Feedback Lesson
Lesson
Big Question: What are my strengths and targets for this term?
Do now:
On your papers, answer these questions:
1) What did you find the easiest about the test?
2) What did you find the most tricky?
Let’s take a look at the paper and mark scheme together…
You will need…
● Your question paper
● The insert (extract from the text)
● A blue pen
● Your thinking caps!
THE rain continued. It was a hard rain, a perpetual rain, a sweating and steaming rain; it was a mizzle, a downpour, a
fountain, a whipping at the eyes, an undertow at the ankles; it was a rain to drown all rains and the memory of rains. It came by
the pound and the ton, it hacked at the jungle and cut the trees like scissors and shaved the grass and tunnelled the soil and
moulted the bushes. It shrank men’s hands into the hands of wrinkled apes; it rained a solid glassy rain, and it never stopped.
(lines 1-6)
The lieutenant felt the rain on his cheeks. “How many million years since the rain stopped raining here on Venus?”
“Don’t be crazy,” said one of the two other men. “It never stops raining on Venus. It just goes on and on. I’ve lived here for
ten years and I never saw a minute, or even a second, when it wasn’t pouring.”
“It’s like living under water,” said the lieutenant, and rose up, shrugging his guns into place. “Well, we’d better get going.
We’ll find that Sun Dome yet.”
“Or we won’t find it,” said the cynic.
“It’s an hour or so.
“Now you’re lying to me, Lieutenant.”
“No, now I’m lying to myself. This is one of those times when you’ve got to lie. I can’t take much more of this.” (lines
They walked down the jungle trail, now and then looking at their compasses. There was no direction anywhere, only what
the compass said. There was a grey sky and rain falling and jungle and a path, and, far back behind them somewhere, a rocket
in which they had ridden and fallen. A rocket in which lay two of their friends, dead and dripping rain.
They walked in single file, not speaking. They came to a river which lay wide and flat and brown, flowing down to the great
Single Sea. The surface of it was stippled in a billion places by the rain.
Before we begin, just remember…
This was a CHALLENGE. It’s the first one you have done this year,
and you will keep on getting better and better! You should all be
proud of yourselves for doing the checkpoint, and look forward to
making even more progress next time.
That’s why we’re doing this now- so you can see the great stuff you’ve
done, and what you’ll do differently next time!
Reading
The following slides are for the
reading section of the exam.
Target:
● I will use a thesaurus or
word hippo to practise
synonyms
● I understand
different
sentence
types
Target: ● I am specific
● I will be specific when I am explaining why a piece of punctuation has in my
been used explanations
● I will link the punctuation to what has been said in the text
WWW:
● I can identify where metaphor has been used
● I can give a simple explanation why it has been used
● I can give a specific explanation why metaphor has been used
● I can give detail about the effect of language
Target:
● I will be specific when I am explaining the effect of language
● I will identify language techniques that have been used
● I will give more than one reason why language has been used
● I will explain my point without repeating what has been said in the quotation
Target:
● When asked to identify a structural feature, I will
WWW:
ask myself:
● I understand how dialogue is
○ Is is speech / dialogue?
structured
○ What narrative voice is it written in?
● I understand what a question about
○ How large or small are the paragraphs?
structure is asking me
○ Are there any headings or subheadings?
● I can find synonyms for words within
○ What are the paragraph / sentence begins
the text
like?
○ How have connectives been used?
● I will look carefully at the words in the text to
identify synonyms
WWW:
● I can identify
where simile has
been used
● I can give a simple
explanation why it
has been used
● I can give a
specific
explanation why a
simile has been
used
● I can give detail
about the effect of
language
Target:
● I will be specific when I am explaining the effect of language
● I will identify language techniques that have been used
● I will give more than one reason why language has been used
● I will explain my point without repeating what has been said in the quotation
WWW:
● I can give a specific
reason about why
language is effective
● I can look at the
amount of marks
needed and work out
that is how many
points I need to make
● I can give multiple
specific reasons about
why the language used
is effective
Target:
● I will be specific when I am explaining the effect of language
● I will identify language techniques that have been used
● I will give more than one reason why language has been used
● I will explain my point without repeating what has been said in the quotation
WWW:
● I can make a clear
point about a text
● I can use evidence /
quotations to backup
my point
● My quotation links to
the point that I have
made.
● I understand what a
phrase is
● I can explain things in
my own words
Target:
● I need to be clear and specific when making a point about a text
● I need to practise putting things in my own words
● I need to read the question carefully and locate information from the correct part of the text
WWW:
● I can make a clear
point about a text
● I can use evidence /
quotations to backup
my point
● My quotation links to
the point that I have
made.
● I understand what a
phrase is
● I can explain things in
my own words
Target:
● I need to be clear and specific when making a point about a text
● I need to practise putting things in my own words
● I need to read the question carefully and locate information from the correct part of the text
WWW:
● I can use
evidence from
the text to
support a point
● I can find
information from
the whole of the
text
● I can summarise
key points in the
text
● I understand key
themes in a text
Target:
● I need to be clear and specific when making a point about a text
● I need to practise putting things in my own words
●
Writing
Before we look at the markscheme please read your writing out loud and then do the
following:
Planning [4 marks]
Creation of text (WC) [4 marks]
Vocabulary and language (WV) [2 marks]
Structure of Texts (WS) [3 marks]
Grammar and Punctuation (WG) [4 marks]
Word Structure Spelling (WW) [3 marks]
We will look at what you need to do in each area to get the highest marks.
Like the reading, note down targets that can help you improve in this area
Planning marks [4 marks]
WWW:
● I have included at least 5 points on my plan
● I have included some vocabulary choices included on plan
● I have included language techniques in my plan
● I have indicated the order in which I will talk about these points
Target:
● Include at least 5 points on my plan
● Include some vocabulary choices
● Include language techniques in my plan
● Indicate the order in which I will talk about these points
Creation of text (WC) [4 marks]
4 marks: Content is wholly relevant and conveyed in a consistent style throughout which
effectively sustains the reader’s interest..
Descriptive features are successfully manipulated for effect throughout.
3 marks:Content is relevant with imaginative detail and in a generally appropriate and
consistent style, which mostly sustains the reader’s interest.
Descriptive features are occasionally manipulated for effect.
2 Marks: Content is mostly relevant using literary techniques appropriate descriptive writing.
1 mark: General features of descriptive writing may be present.
WWW:
● I have written in the correct style (descriptive)
● I have used some descriptive techniques (5 senses, metaphor, simile, alliteration, assonance, personification, etc)
● My writing is sometimes interesting to read
● My writing contains lots of descriptive features and is interesting throughout
Target:
● Write in the correct style
● Include descriptive techniques
Vocabulary and language (WV) [2 marks]
2 marks: Conscious and adventurous language choices are made appropriate to the genre. These are mostly successful.
1 mark: some interesting word choices are included
WWW: Target:
● I use interesting words! ● Use interesting words!
● I use paragraphs ● Use paragraphs
● I include connectives within and between ● Include connectives within and between paragraphs
paragraphs ● Make sure my ideas are in order
● I Make sure my ideas are in order
WWW: Target:
● Basic punctuation used ● Punctuate my work
● Tense is accurate and consistent ● Check that tense is accurate
● Range of sentence structures are used ● Use complex sentences
● Range of punctuation used accurately ● Include sentences of different lengths
● Range of punctuation used effectively ● Be more adventurous with punctuation
● Use punctuation for effect
Word Structure Spelling (WW) [3 marks]
3 marks: Spelling is nearly always correct throughout. (There may occasionally be phonetically plausible attempts at complex words.) Correct
spelling of complex polysyllabic words, e.g., intelligent, initiative, fundamentally, inferiority, paediatrician, accommodation.
2 marks: Spelling of common and less common words, including polysyllabic and compound words, is correct, e.g., accurate, present, evidence,
making, possible, search
1 mark: Spelling of common words is correct, e.g., their/there, friend, another, around, because, anything, something.
WWW: Target:
● Basic spelling is accurate ● Revise spelling rules for…
● Spelling of polysyllabic words is correct ● Learn the spellings for common homophones
● Spelling of compound words is correct
Recording your Marks
Please fill in the Google Form recording the mark that you got for each
question. This will help us to help you!