手把手 小学英语作文 入门与提高 5 ~ 6 年 级

习作十一 An unforgettable day

难忘的一天

◆名师指导◆

写 作 要 点 提示

1. 可以叙述一次难忘的人生经历。
示例：On October 1st, I visited the Forbidden City. I’ll never forget that day.
译文：10 月 1 日那天，我参观了故宫博物院，我将永远不会忘记那天。
2. 可以叙述自己所做的有意义的一件事情。
示例：I picked up a wallet and found the owner.
译文：我拾到一个钱夹并归还了主人。
3. 可以叙述难忘那天的理由。
示例：That day I learnt a lot.
译文：那天我突然明白了很多事情。

写 作 思 路 提示

那件事发生在五一那天。
开头
It happened on May Day.

描述具体事件经过。
I went shopping with my mother. I saw a thief take a 中间
woman’s wallet.
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我不会忘了那一天。
I won’t forget that day.
结尾

写 作 步 骤 详解

1. 如何写好开头
① 可以介绍难以忘记的那天的日期。
示例：I’ll never forget that day, July 3rd, 2006.
译文：我将永远不会忘记那一天—— 2006 年 7 月 3 日。
② 可以用疑问句开头。
示例：Did you ever have a special day?
译文：对你来说有没有特别的一天呢？
③ 可以描述事情发生那天的天气状况。
示例：It was cold and windy that day.
译文：那天天气很冷并且风很大。
2. 如何写好中间
① 可以介绍事情发生的经过。
示例：It rained a lot, so I went to school to close the window. When I
got there, ....
译文：那天雨下得很大，所以我去学校关窗户。当我到那儿时，……
② 可以介绍事情让人难忘的原因。
示例：I hit an old man and didn’t say sorry, but he still waited for me
with my lost schoolbag.
译文：我撞了一个老大爷，没有说声对不起，但是他仍然等着我去
取丢下的书包。
3. 如何写好结尾
① 首尾呼应。

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示例：What an unforgettable day!

译文：多么难忘的一天啊！
② 可以写出自己的认知或感想。
示例：No pain, no gain.
译文：没有付出，就没有收获。
③ 可以发出倡导。
示例：We should help others.
译文：我们应该去帮助别人。

◆佳作示范◆

经 典 范文(一)

Cooking for myself

I still remember the day I cooked for myself the first time. That day
was a Sunday. I was free, but my mother and father were busy with work. So I
must cook lunch for myself. But I never cooked before. I wanted to have a try.
I decided to make noodles. First I put some flour and water into the
basin, and then I kneaded the dough. When cutting it into noodles, I cut my
finger seriously. I felt great pain and couldn’t help crying.
At last I ate the noodles I made myself. At the same time I felt that my
parents were really not easy. I understood a lot through cooking a meal. I
will never forget that day.

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名师点评

你会自己做饭吗？你能帮父母分担一些辛劳吗？本文小作者以自己的
经历，体验到父母的辛苦和不易，读完本文你是否应该学着做一些家务呢？
全文语言朴实，很感人。

精彩译文

给自己做饭
我仍然记得我自己第一次做饭的那一天。那天是星期天，我休息，
但是爸爸妈妈却要工作。因此，我得自己做午饭。但是我以前从没做
过饭，我想我应该试试。
我决定做面条。我先在盆内放入面粉和水，把面和好，然后擀面，
再把它切成面条。忽然，我切到手指了，真痛啊，我忍不住哭了起来。
终于，我吃上了自己做的面条，同时，我认识到父母真的不易。
通过做饭，我明白了许多道理。我将永远不会忘记那一天。

经 典 范文(二)

After knocking into an old man

It was on Friday, my mother was very ill. After school, I rode my bike
home very fast. Suddenly, an old man walked into the middle of the road
and I hit him. I was very afraid, and I didn’t say sorry to the old man and just
went home. When I got home, I didn’t find my schoolbag, so I went back
to look for it. In the same place, I saw the old man. He didn’t go away, but

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waited for me with my bag. He said to me, “Be careful! Don’t ride too fast!”
When I heard him, I felt very sorry. Then I thanked him.
I will always remember him, and that day.

名师点评

文章开头点明了事情发生的时间做了必要的铺垫。正文部分为我们讲
述了整个事情的过程及结果。结尾部分总结事情对自己所产生的影响。

精彩译文

撞人以后
那是一个周五，我妈妈病得很厉害。放学后，我飞快地骑着自行
车回家。突然有个老人走到了路中间，我撞了他。我很害怕。我没有
跟他说声对不起就回家了。回到家后，我发现自己的书包不见了。我
返回去寻找书包。在同一个地方，我又看见了那个老人。他没有离开
而是等着给我书包。他告诉我：
“你要小心点，别骑得那么快！”当我
听到这些，我感到非常抱歉 , 我谢了他。
我将永远记得那个老人和那天的事情。

经 典 范文(三)

A day to remember
I still remember the first time I went to the zoo. When I was only
five years old, my mother took me there. I was very happy to see so many

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animals in real life. They looked so lovely and active. I saw lovely pandas
and drew a picture of them. I had a nice day.
But on my way home, I began to feel sorry for the animals. They had
to stay at the zoo. They must feel lonely, I thought.

名师点评

文章开头开门见山，直接告诉大家难忘的一天具体是哪一天。接着正
文部分叙述了那天所见到的事物以及作者所进行的活动。结尾写了参观完
动物园后，小作者自己的感受。

精彩译文
值得纪念的一天
我仍然记得第一次去动物园的那一天。5 岁那年，妈妈带我去动
物园。我很高兴能看见那么多活灵活现的动物，他们看上去又活泼又
可爱。我看到了可爱的熊猫 , 并且给熊猫画了一幅画，我度过了快乐的
一天。
可是在我回家的路上，我开始替它们难过起来。他们不得不呆在
动物园。我想它们一定感觉很孤单。

经 典 范文(四)

Picking flowers
Do you have an unforgettable day? Let me tell you about it.
That was a day in last summer vacation. That day, I went to the garden

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with my mother. There were so many beautiful flowers in the garden. I liked
the flowers very much. I wanted to pick some of them. But my mum stopped
me and said to me,“Flowers are alive, too. We should leave them there, so
everyone can see them. ”I felt sorry and said to my mother,“I will not do
that again.”
I will never forget that day because I know a lot from it. Every one
should protect flowers and trees.

名师点评

文章以疑问句开头，引起读者的阅读兴趣，正文部分叙述了“摘
花”事件的始末，结尾点题。文章结构完整，语句通顺。短语“pick up,
protect flowers and trees”运用得当。

精彩译文

摘 花
你有难忘的一天吗？让我给你讲讲吧。
那是去年暑假的一天。那天，我和妈妈去了花园。花园里有那么
多漂亮的花朵。我非常喜欢花。我想摘一些。但是妈妈阻止了我并对
我说：
“花也是有生命的。我们应该把它们留在这里让大家观赏。”我感
到很抱歉，对妈妈说：
“我以后不会这样做了。”
我永远不会忘记那天，因为我从那件事中学到了很多。我们每一
个人都应该保护花草树木。

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