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After Action Assessment Marzan
After Action Assessment Marzan
Adam Marzan
ENGL101
01 December 2016
After receiving feedback from the instructor on the Definition essay assignment, it is with
great pride to say, there were many more positive notes than there were negative. According to
the rubric comments provided, the essay structure had a solid foundation and was free of
mechanical errors. Both body and conclusion had a smooth flow of information. Leaving the
reader to further think about the topic. Sources were cited correctly and the sentence structure
showed maturity.
Although a majority of the assignment received positive feedback, there is always room
for improvement. An essay's introduction should act as a road map for the reader. This
introduction for the graded assignment was a road map to nowhere. Dr. Dolnick writes “The
introduction did not really introduce all of the rest of the essay.” There were also facts in the
introduction that had nothing to do with the rest of the essay (Dolnick). After reviewing previous
weekly lessons and readings, the mistakes made were clearly visible. The introduction did not
answer who, what, when, why, or the how of the topic and there were also facts about 2014’s
population of the United States which had nothing to do with an essay on “Life.” In order to
grow and develop better writing skills, the attention should be focused on the beginning of the
essay.
While conducting research on how to make the introduction better, two YouTube videos
introduction. The plan is to watch and study these links until the basics of writing an introduction
come naturally. Step two in the homework plan is to learn how to increase the interest of the
reader. Week two's definition essay started off very bland and lacked a hook. Both an article by
Nicole Palmby “5 Types of Attention Getters in Essays” and Study.com encouraged using a
quotation from a famous person or humor as a hook. Humor would be an outstanding hook
because if you can make a person laugh, you already have their attention. The final step in the
plan is to work on using correct grammar. By reviewing the previous course lessons and our
Write Now text book by Russell, at the end of this class, there shouldn’t be any incorrectly placed
commas. The goal for the near future is to have a much more interesting introduction for the
You wrote an incredibly well written informative essay which I thoroughly enjoyed even though I knew about most
of the material.
That is about it. When you do your second after action assessment, in addition to the one error, just share some of
the things you would still like to learn about English.
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Works Cited
Dolnick, Karen. "After Action Assessment Assignment." Message to the author. 30 Nov. 2016. E-
mail.
Palmby, Nicole. "5 Types of Attention Getters in Essays." The Classroom | Synonym. Leaf
"Attention Getters for Essays: Types & Examples." Study.com. Study.com, n.d. Web. 02 Dec.
2016.