REPORT (2/5/2024)

Student’ name: DINH QUANG LUC

Student’ ID: 2313114

Class: AVK47A

Topic: The experience I had when I got lost at a national park.

1. Outline:

· Topic sentence: Going to a national park to see the diversity of nature has
been my dream over time, but the first time I was there is a memory I can’t forget.

· Major idea 1: The reason for visiting the park.

Supporting sentence: I had a good score after the exam, so my parents allowed
me to suggest a gift. I want to go to my hometown to visit my grandma.
Eventually, her house is near the Cuc Phuong National Park.

· Major idea 2: The emotion when I came there.

Supporting sentence: - Surprised at first – interested in seeing the plant, big tree,
atmosphere, etc – fall my mind in the majesty of forest certainly.

· Major idea 3: The process occurred when I got lost.

Supporting sentence: I followed a rabbit in the fastest way. After some time, I
realized I did not remember the way back. Opposite to the previous time, I was
scared of the darkness of the shadow of trees. I cried at that time. But, it was a
sign to my parent to look up to me.

· Major idea 4: My lessons from this happening.

Supporting sentence: I figured out my value for my parents after looking worried
when I got lost. I should have been keeping my mind certainly and being careful
with all the things I didn’t know.

· Concluding sentence: The trip to Cuc Phuong National Park was a great
moment with the mixing of excitement and scaring.

2. My narrative paragraph
 Going to a national park to see the diversity of nature has been my dream over
time, but the first time I was there is a memory I can’t forget. I was a good pupil in
my grade, so it was normal that I passed the examination with a high score. To
encourage me, my parents allowed me to choose a gift. I wanted to go to my
hometown to visit my grandma. Surprisingly, her house is located in Thanh Hoa,
where Cuc Phuong National Park stands. When I got there, my mind was
confused. I can’t visualize the majesty of the scenes. There were a lot of more
plants, and more animals, especially the old trees. So, I was interested in all
things around there. While chasing a rabbit attentively, I turned my head around
and realized that I got lost. Opposite to the previous time, I was scared of the
darkness of the shadow of trees. I cried at that time. However, it was a sign to my
parent to look up to me. After getting over thatthe terrible time, I figured out two
previous lessons some things. One is my value for my parents when I saw their
worried. The second one is that I should have been keeping my mind certainly
and being careful with all the things I didn’t know. The trip to Cuc Phuong
National Park was a great moment with the mixing of excitement and scaring.

3. My treasures

1 . Nguyễn Thuỳ Trang :Your paragraph gives an interesting and realistic sense of your first
experience.

2. Trần Thu Hằng: The topic is interesting and fresh, grammatically correct, and clearly
purpose.

3. Hoàng Thị Thu : The topic is very interesting. There are many linking words in the article.
Coherence linked chains of events, impression conclusion.

4 Nguyễn Thị Hường . The grammar is good, the topic is attractive

5.Phạm Như Phượng : The topic and the context are quite attractive. There’re many grammar
structure in the paragraph such as : Gerund clause;Adverbial clause ;Infinitive clause make the
paragraph quite smoothly.Using variety of conjunction like :Suprisingly;Howevermany

4. My traps
 1. 1. Nguyễn Thuỳ Trang: Maybe add some more detailed descriptive words to make your
story more vivid, and try to use varied sentence structures to make your writing richer
and more engaging.

2. Trần Thu Hằng: However, it was a sign for my parents to look up to me.

One is my value for my parents when I saw their worries.

3. Hoàng Thị Thu: many details in the article lack emotion. Need to express stronger
emotions to make the paraghraph more appealling.

4.Nguyễn Thị Hường use more words to describe your detail and make it more engaging

5. Phạm Như Phượng : Your paragraph lacksis lack of emotionsemotional,the way you
express the lesson is quite difficult to understand. There are some small mistakes in the tense.

5. My scores

Nguyễn Thùy Trang: 49/55

Hoàng Thị Thu: 48/55

Trần Thu Hằng: 50/55

Nguyễn Thị Hường : 48

Phạm Như Phượng : 48/55

Average score: 48.6