Hook needed (something that will make the reader interested in your writing).

I think that school

uniforms should not be mandatory because of three reasons. Firstly, if students are forced to wear
school uniforms, they will have a hard time finding their clothes in the wardrobe and sometimes they just
simply do not have one or they lost it or for many other reasons. Secondly, in the condition that school
uniforms are compulsory to wear, this will be hot and uncomfortable due to the uniforms material which
will make it sweaty for the students for most students. These inconveniences will lower their
performances which lead to low grades and a bad job and nobody wants that. Last but not least,
assuming that students are expected to wear uniforms, the school is putting too much pressure on
students about the uniform, because some families do not have enough money to buy uniforms due to
harsh conditions. Introduction too long, the 3 ideas should only be one thesis statement.

Need body paragraph to explain the ideas and give example. Not just 1 idea sentences. The idea
sentences should be used for a topic sentence for each body paragraph.

Either than that they don’t have all the space needed to store all of the uniforms. Also if students were
allowed to wear the clothes they want, they can show their personality just by their clothes and
expressing themselves. Counter-argument needs a topic sentence telling the other’s side opinion and a
closing sentence.

That's why students should not be forced to wear school uniforms. Conclusion is too short, needed a
suggestion, opinion, and more…w