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Comp Timed Write Reflection
Comp Timed Write Reflection
Ms. Michko
June 7, 2024
Reflection 2
The prompt for the timed write was along the lines of to what extent is competition
most of my life and learned pretty quickly that it is a great way to release any anger. But the
great part about the athletic competition is that most often it comes to an end by shaking the
other team's hand and telling them “Great Game”. With this prompt, I had to think about how the
competition in everyday life can affect an individual, not just on the field. In my first draft, my
claim stated that competition caused “more harm than good to the individual”, which was a
beginner's mistake. This was one of the first argumentative essays I wrote, so it was difficult to
write a nuanced claim. My immediate thought was the competitive nature of social media and
how it promotes self-deprecating behavior and in extreme cases can lead to eating disorders. I
had this idea because of the recent unit in class “What is the internet doing to us”. My second
thought was the recent growth in consumerism because of the constant competition to have the
best products. Yet I did not execute my thought process very well.
evidence I wanted to mention writing “ Competition can be a playful way to interact with peers
but can become negative when applied to real-life situations instead of games, it loses the initial
exigence of the competition.”. Although I did earn the thesis point and didn't necessarily need to
revise, I felt for my paper to have a strong line of reasoning I would need to make my claim
more specific. When reading over I noticed that the evidence I had made sense, they did answer
the prompt, yet they hardly took a stance on the question or argued a specific point. So I ended
up re-writing the majority of my work for clarity. This included adding a claim to the beginning
of each paragraph and developing it further through my commentary. This timed write just so
happened to be one of my shortest, not because it was concise, but because it was missing the
statement immediately after my evidence, writing why that piece of evidence is significant to my
thesis. This revision made me realize how far I have come in my writing, not only that I have
strengthened my argumentative skills but I am now able to notice when a claim is weak. Which