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Reflection 1 - Protest Song Essay
Reflection 1 - Protest Song Essay
Tyler Chorebanian
Ms. Michko
E Block
6/6/2024
To start my task of revising my protest song rhetorical analysis essay on the song Born in
the U.S.A. by Bruce Springsteen I skimmed through the essay and highlighted any key points that
I understood needed work. These key points were two of my topic sentences, a few sections of
commentary, and two of my concluding sentences. Each of these structural pieces lacked
specificity and a clear line of reasoning. The first section I took down was the topic sentences.
My main goal when revising these was to get rid of any confusion that took away from the main
point of the paragraph, as well as to ensure that my topic sentence was connected directly back to
the thesis statement. This was the topic sentence of my second body paragraph “Springsteen
highlights the societal hardships that veterans face the idea of being trapped in the U.S.A. is
visited and the sorrowful tone of the song is built.” This sentence did a decent job of reflecting
the impact of the evidence to be presented when referring to the tone; however, the sentence
structure was very condensed, making it difficult to understand and ultimately taking away from
the sentence's strength. To improve this topic sentence I broke the sentence up into three pieces
and made more specific references to my evidence. Consequently, my topic sentence became
much easier to follow. This improved my line of reasoning, which aided me in improving my
analysis, I lacked specificity; to improve my analysis, I had to dive deeper into the meaning of
Springsteen's lyrics, and the impact they had. For instance, initially, I did not fully understand my
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second piece of evidence in my first body paragraph, “I'm a long gone Daddy in the U.S.A.
now”... “I'm a cool rocking Daddy in the U.S.A. now” (Springsteen). Prior to revising, I did not
realize that “Cool Rocking Daddy” was a reference to Springsteen himself and that “Long Gone
Daddy” was referring to the character in the song. Once I understood this, I was able to revise
my commentary by talking about what impact this comparison has. This approach to analyzing
the song was stronger and more detailed than the previous one and allowed me to improve my
commentary a decent amount. My final revisions were on the concluding sentences of my body
them more detailed, overall improving my line of reasoning. To be more specific, in my original
however, I focused on referring back to the evidence I used and outlining how the evidence
contributed to my thesis.