Daisy Espana

Allison Bocchino

Writing 2

10 June, 2024

Reflection Matrix

Text from my A comment or The change(s) I How this change

initial WP question I made to what I impacts my paper:

submission: (Note received (from initially wrote:

which WP) whom/where?)

WP2: This Me: The sentences This information may I focused on this
information may not seemed too repetitive not be understandable affected the
be understandable for and meant the same for everyone since unintended audience
everyone since there thing. there is an intended which makes sense
is an intended audience for these since we are
audience depending types of articles. The translating an article
on the text. The unintended audience to include other
intended audience will not be able to audiences. It helped
may understand what understand much. so that I could get my
is being said since the point across in a
author wrote the simple and quick
paper with them in way.
mind.

WP2: Had nothing Me: I believe I didn’t Genre translations are This helps my paper
after this sentence in include many reasons convenient so that because it helps my
the intro: A genre as to why genre there could be more audience understand
translation is helpful translation are a good people getting why genre
since there is not a thing information that is translations help get
target audience and important. information across to
can reach many other others.
people to understand
information in a way
that they understand.

WP2: For example, Me: Split paragraph The images weren’t This impacts my
the authors include into two to make it really going to help paper by allowing me
 one image on page 21 more flowy these authors because to include more
throughout the entire the information is without having one
article since they better explained in big continuous
really didn’t need to detail than in paragraph on only
incorporate many. pictures. Images conventions.
Based on the would’ve confused
subheadings that are nutritionists since
included in this they need to
article, the following understand the
paragraphs are either experiment with
short or long. words not pictures.

Mostly, every article

would have headings
included in them to
help the reader follow
with what is being
stated. The headings
would be the overall
section and then there
would be the
subheadings.

WP2: Based on the Allison: Commented Mostly, every article This impacts my
subheadings that are that I should expand would have headings paper because now I
included in this more on jargon included in them to was able to expand
article, the following conventions and other help the reader follow on my conventions
paragraphs are either conventions I with what is being for the paragraph
short or long. In the included . stated. The headings before and after so
article there is a would be the overall that I explain the
subheading titled “5. section and then there conventions in detail.
N-Acetylcysteine would be the
(NAC)” and another subheadings. Based
“6. Dietary Protein on the subheadings
Considerations. ”2 that are included in
These subheadings this article, the
each contain following paragraphs
information but the are either short or
first one is longer and long. In the article
lengthened there is a subheading
paragraphs while the titled “5.
other one is a bit N-Acetylcysteine
shorter and smaller (NAC)” and another

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“A Review of Dietary (Phyto) Nutrients for Glutathione Support”Deanna M. Minich and Benjamin I. Brown. 2
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“A Review of Dietary (Phyto) Nutrients for Glutathione Support”Deanna M. Minich and Benjamin I. Brown. 5-7
 paragraphs. “6. Dietary Protein
Considerations. ”3
These subheadings
each contain
information but the
first one is a longer
and lengthier
paragraph while the
other one is a bit
shorter and smaller
paragraphs. This
makes it for the
reader to know that
maybe some parts
aren’t that important
to read or to keep in
mind. The
subheadings make it
easier to know that
the topic discussed
will be different from
the one prior.
However, these
headings are not for
anyone who is not a
nutritionist. These
headings have their
own jargon which is
more known for
nutritionists to
understand, unlike a
normal person.
Throughout the
article, the authors
use the jargon that
nutritionists would
understand since that
is the target audience.

WP2: As shown in Allison: Commented I didn’t really look at This impacts my

some examples, I saw that I should cite my examples for this paper because now
the common examples assignment, since I the reader will know
conventions that can have worked with that I have worked
be found on an infographics before. with this genre before

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“A Review of Dietary (Phyto) Nutrients for Glutathione Support”Deanna M. Minich and Benjamin I. Brown. 5-7
infographic for In high school, I had instead of just
nutrition. The images to help create flyers/ looking at images off
have a lot of color, infographics for a of Google or the
little information, club that I was in my internet.
images, headings, and senior year. From
subheadings. what I remember,
there was a lot of
color, little
information, images,
headings, and
subheadings.

WP2: With this it Emma: Commented Giles helped me in This impacts my

helped me because that I should expand this aspect because I paper because now I
while writing my on the quote and how was able to have explained
process about this it helped me for my understand my further as to how
translation I was translation/ reflection. thought process readings have helped
thinking what I can throughout my me through this
add to my infographic translation. I was able process.
or take away. to understand why I
kept some things out
and kept some other
things. It helped me
because as I was
writing my reflection
I was thinking of my
translation; if I should
add more, delete
some stuff, or keep it
as the way it is.

WP2: Allison: Commented Added a subheading This impacts my

that the for what the list paper because now it
vitamins/nutrients list would do is clear what my list
function was unclear functions are and why
I have included them.

WP2: This genre is Me: had too many This genre is This impacts my
typically only one words that were typically only one paper because it
page long with many unnecessary page long (sometimes doesn’t have too
colors included in it, double-sided) with a many fill words that
it is not just one variety of colors were not needed,
color. included. shorter, and straight
to the point.
 WP1: talked Jared: Commented on talk This impacts my
approached changing these verbs approaches paper because now
mentioned into action verbs. being mentioned the tone of my paper
conducted being conducted is in present tense and
not in past tense.

WP1: Two articles Me: this paragraph One of these articles' This impacts my
discussing nutrients about one article not thesis is that having paper because now
have acknowledged both too many nutrients the audience knows
that nutrients are can actually be worse that I would be
important for human for our environment. talking about one
life and needed for article and not both.
society to be healthy. Much clearer as to
what the paragraph
will be about.

WP1: The authors Allison: To expand The authors have This impacts my
have made their claim more on the made their claim paper because now it
which shows what the conventions for this which shows what the shows the convention
authors are trying to paragraph authors are trying to for this certain
prove but for their prove but for their discipline that I am
own discipline being own discipline being writing about.
agriculture and how agriculture and how
to improve the to improve the
environment for environment for
society and the society and the
future. Being the future.4 This point of
complete opposite view is different from
from what nutrition’s the other article. This
point of view is. difference shows how
the convection of
arguments is different
based on just the
thesis. The thesis
helps us distinguish
the type of discipline
that is going to be
explained throughout
the article.

WP1: Totally Allison: Summarized Totally opposite from This impacts my

opposite from the the article instead of the other article paper because now I
other article included, writing about the included, this article have included the
this article is convention is explaining that convention for this

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X. Zhang, E. A. Davidson, T. Zou, L. Lassaletta, Z. Quan, T. Li, W. Zhang, “Quantifying Nutrient Budgets for
SustainableNutrient Management.” 1
explaining that nutrients are needed discipline and
nutrients are needed so humans can explained how it
so humans can become healthier and helps the author of
become healthier and have better conditions the article to prove
have better conditions while living. This their point.
while living. This text convention helps the
shows that the reader know the topic
authors are using and discipline. Both
their own point of articles include
view on nutrients to nutrients but in
improve someone’s opposite ways. The
life. A nutritionist argument and tone for
point of view helps both articles are
people see that even different because they
though too much for are not the same
an environment is not discipline. The tones
the best, for the body help these articles
it is a good thing. The further prove their
thesis statement point because the
shows the goal that a reader will know the
researcher in the field issue needs to be
of nutrition would addressed.
want to accomplish
while talking about
nutrients.

WP1: . It shows that Keshna: Include how This evidence has This impacts my
over the years the authors have been acquired by the paper because now
nitrogen and gotten this evidence use of pesticides for the reader will know
phosphorus keeps on that they have used farming. where the authors
increasing by being have gotten their
added with pesticides evidence from and I
and fertilizers didn’t just include it
into my essay.

WP1: This Me: This part needed Jargon’s are different This impacts my
clarification helps something more than but still prove their paper because now I
make a distinction as what I have already point as to bettering have included more
well since all articles said. the future so that we on the conventions.
are written for one won’t suffer as much
purpose, making sure later on. The type of
not to copy others. jargon used also helps
determine the type of
tone the articles have
taken. With different
tones the audience is
 able to see that there
is a distinction
between both
disciplines.

WP1: However, still Me: Didn’t make Deleted This impacts my

completely different sense for this paper because I was
in how they word paragraph able to include
their argument or something else other
thesis in their articles. than the thesis.