The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different age ages, in the UK, who used the

Internet everyday every day from 2003-2006. Summarize the information by selecting and
reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
1. “Everyday” as one word as an adjective “everyday habits” … To words as for something
that you do every single day “every day I get up early” day is a noun.

The bar chart illustrates changes in the proportion, of five age brackets, who used the Internet
from 2003 to 2006. Overall, the Internet usage in all age groups surveyed experienced an
upward trend over time, and while people aged 16 to 24 used the Internet most, the opposite was
true for the over 64s.

Looking first at the groups comprising adults under 55, generally they had higher Internet use
than the over 55s. 80% Eighty percent of the 16-24 age group used the Internet everyday every
day in 2003 and 2004 and this usage rose to its peak of 100% one year later before dropping to
around 90% in 2006. The 25-44 age bracket experienced considerable rises from about a half to
precisely 80% between 2003 and 2006. Similarly, there were increases, albeit at a slower pace,
in the 45-54 age group. Starting at 60% in 2003, its Internet usage had grown to exactly 80% by
2006.
1. 16-year-olds might not be considered adults by some people… And even if they are you
don’t need this word
2. don’t start sentences with digits
3. precisely and exactly aren’t really needed… I suggest you don’t write them.

Turning to the last two groups, the 55-64 one group had significantly larger percentages of
people using the Internet everyday every day, compared to their 65 and older counterparts. The
former saw a substantial growth, rising from roughly 30% to about a half during the surveyed
period, despite a slight drop to just over 30% in 2005. As for the latter, almost no one older
than 64 used the Internet everyday every day in 2003 and such usage subsequently grew to
about 18% in 2004. Thereafter, it dropped moderately by merely 1% by 2005 before rising to
end the period at exactly one-fifth in 2006.
250 words
1. I like chronological order and the grey highlighted part breaks this and makes it more difficult to read.
It’s better if you move the grey highlighted information before the comment about half highlighted in
bold font

Task Achieve- 8-9 ✘ 150 -190 words

ment I feel your writing is so unnecessarily wordy in parts and could easily be reduced.
Comparisons are fantastic forgetting a higher score… But if you don’t finish your
report that will be an absolute disaster. Therefore, there is a trade-off between
making lots of comparisons and finishing your report.
overall summary

all key data covered / data is highlighted well

data is reported accurately

Cohesion and 8-9 ✘ logical separation of data into paragraphs

Coherence this is done really well
body paragraphs start with a phrase that indicates the data in the paragraph
this is done really well
logical paragraph development
I don’t like the grey highlighted part as it doesn’t follow chronological order [you
put the end time period and then you go back to something before the end of
time]
linking phrases are used well

your report seems unnecessarily wordy in places

Vocabulary 8 ✘
appropriate word choices / control of word endings/forms
every day should be written as to words… If you only made this mistake once I
might give you nine still but you’ve done it multiple times

spelling is correct

Grammar 9 articles (a, an, the)

sentence structures are correct

I didn’t find any problems

Overall 8.5 I’m not fond of 250 word long reports and I feel it’s better to write more
concisely.

You can read below about every day here

https://www.grammarly.com/blog/everyday-every-day/#:~:text=What%20does
%20each%20phrase%20mean,simply%20means%20%E2%80%9Ceach%20day.
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