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Important Subject: Rubbish in Kikorangi Park
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We are writing to you about all the rubbish lying around Kikorangi
Park the students in our class have noticed over the past six months.
Would you like to play in a park covered in rubbish? You must agree
that change must happen to help address this terrible rubbish problem
for our community. We believe that the rubbish needs to be removed
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because children don’t feel safe when playing, there is pollution in the
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there will be safe and healthy.

Firstly, do you realise that by allowing visitors to leave rubbish lying

around that it is a hazard for children who play there? Children don’t
feel safe playing there because sometimes the discarded rubbish is sharp
or broken. Sharp edges of cans and broken glass can cause serious cuts
to them as they run and play. If the cans are also rusty, or the glass is
dirty, infection can set in also. Clearly, a clean park means happy and
safe visitors.

Furthermore, we have noticed rubbish in the stream that flows through

the park. Fish and other river life often mistake small pieces of plastic
for food, which can lead to them choking or being poisoned by it. Also,
some rubbish can leak poison into the water causing life in the river to
die or become very sick. As a result, sick creatures in the stream isn’t
nice to see when visiting a park.

Another reason we want to keep rubbish out of Kikorangi Park is to

make sure we have healthy habitats for the wildlife that live there.
Healthy habitats mean healthy wildlife and plenty of food too. The
animals and birds wouldn’t get trapped or tangled in discarded plastic

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or hurt by sharp objects left behind as they scavenge for food if there
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The reasons are obvious; we need a solution to all the rubbish in
Kikorangi Park. We need to protect our waterways, to keep both
children who play there safe and look after the safety and health of the
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wildlife that live there. Our class would like to know what measures
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We look forward to hearing from you.

The students at Kikorangi School.

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Opening statement We are writing to you about all the rubbish lying

around Kikorangi Park the students in our class have

noticed over the past six months. Would you like to

play in a park covered in rubbish? You must agree

Introduction
that change must happen to help address this terrible

rubbish problem for our community. We believe that

the rubbish needs to be removed because children don’t

feel safe when playing, there is pollution in the nearby

stream, and if rubbish is removed, then the wildlife

that live there will be safe and healthy.

Argument 1 Firstly, do you realise that by allowing visitors to leave

rubbish lying around that it is a hazard for children

who play there? Children don’t feel safe playing there

because sometimes the discarded rubbish is sharp

or broken. Sharp edges of cans and broken glass can

cause serious cuts to them as they run and play. If the

cans are also rusty, or the glass is dirty, infection can

set in also. Clearly, a clean park means happy and

safe visitors.

Argument 2 Furthermore, we have noticed rubbish in the stream

that flows through the park. Fish and other river life

often mistake small pieces of plastic for food, which

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can lead to them choking or being poisoned by it. Also,

some rubbish can leak poison into the water causing

life in the river to die or become very sick. As a result,

sick creatures in the stream isn’t nice to see when

visiting a park.

Argument 3 Another reason we want to keep rubbish out of kikorangi

Park is to make sure we have healthy habitats for the

wildlife that live there. Healthy habitats mean healthy

wildlife and plenty of food too. The animals and birds

wouldn’t get trapped or tangled in discarded plastic or

hurt by sharp objects left behind as they scavenge for

food if there was no rubbish. Their water source would

be clean too if the park was rubbish free. All in all,

clean habitats means happy wildlife.

Conclusion The reasons are obvious; we need a solution to all

the rubbish in Kikorangi Park. We need to protect our

waterways, to keep both children who play there safe

and look after the safety and health of the wildlife that
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live there. Our class would like to know what measures

you plan to take?

We look forward to hearing from you.

The students at Kikorangi School.

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