Presenter's Name: Parham

Feedback Given by: Jinglue. H

Peer Feedback
Write your observations for each category. It would help to your partner if you
elaborated more on each one of them. Ideally, you want to write 5-6 lines for each:
tell them what they did very well and where improvements may be needed.

Introduction Did the presenter have a clear introduction?

Did their presenter include a hook (a story to start their presentation), a
thesis and background information?
The presenter had a clear and engaging introduction. He started with a
compelling hook, sharing a relevant anecdote that immediately captured
the audience's attention. The thesis was clearly stated, setting the stage
for what the presentation would cover. Background information was
thorough, providing necessary context without overwhelming the
audience. One area for improvement could be to make the connection
between the hook and the thesis more explicit, ensuring a seamless
transition from story to topic.
Body Was the presentation organized and easy to follow?
Did the presentation have main ideas and supporting details?
What would you have changed in their presentation?
The presentation was well-organized and easy to follow. Each main idea
was clearly delineated, supported by relevant details and examples. The
logical flow of information helped in maintaining audience interest and
understanding. However, at times, the transitions between sections felt
abrupt. Adding brief summaries or signposts at the end of each section
could enhance the overall coherence and make it easier for the audience
to follow the narrative.

Conclusion Did the presentation provide a conclusion and a summary?

Did the presenter paraphrase the main ideas?
The conclusion effectively summarized the key points of the
presentation. The presenter paraphrased the main ideas succinctly,
reinforcing the core message. The closing remarks were strong, leaving
a lasting impression on the audience. One suggestion for improvement
would be to include a call-to-action or a thought-provoking question at
the end to encourage further reflection and engagement from the
audience.

Mechanics Was the language used in the presentation appropriate for the audience?
Was there the right amount of content presented?
Were the technical terms used accessible for the audience?
 Were there smooth transitions and coherent flow in the presentation?
The language used was appropriate for the audience, striking a good
balance between technical detail and accessibility. The amount of
content presented was just right, avoiding information overload.
Technical terms were explained well, ensuring that even those less
familiar with the topic could follow along. Transitions between sections
were mostly smooth, although a few felt slightly forced. Working on
making these transitions more natural would enhance the
presentation's overall flow.

Clarity Were their words clear?

Did they mispronounce any words or terms? Did they misspell any words?
How was their speed (fast or slow)?
Did they make grammar mistakes? What kind? BE SPECIFIC!
The presenter's words were generally clear, with good pronunciation
and articulation. There were no noticeable mispronunciations or
spelling errors. The pace of the presentation was well-moderated,
neither too fast nor too slow, which helped in maintaining audience
comprehension. A minor issue was a few instances of grammatical
errors, such as subject-verb agreement. Paying closer attention to these
details in future presentations would help improve clarity.

Manner Did they make eye contact with the audience?

Did they read their presentation or did they speak?
Did they use body language and gestures?
Did they ensure that the audience did not get disconnected?
Did they engage the audience?
The presenter made excellent eye contact with the audience, which
helped in establishing a connection and maintaining engagement. They
spoke rather than read their presentation, which added to the
authenticity and impact. Body language and gestures were effectively
used to emphasize points, though there were moments where they
seemed a bit rehearsed. Ensuring a more natural use of gestures could
further enhance audience engagement.

Visuals How was their PowerPoint presentation?

Did they have enough visuals? Did they show them on time or too late?
Was the contrast of colors and font ideal?
The PowerPoint presentation was well-designed, with an appropriate
number of visuals that complemented the spoken content. Visuals were
shown on time and were integrated smoothly into the presentation. The
contrast of colors and font was ideal, ensuring readability and visual
appeal. One area for improvement could be to use more varied types of
visuals, such as infographics or charts, to break up the text and add
more visual interest.
Positive What do you feel they did very well?
The presenter excelled in their clear and engaging delivery, maintaining
audience interest throughout. Their use of storytelling at the beginning
was particularly effective in setting the stage for the presentation. The
logical organization and flow of ideas made the content easy to follow.
Their ability to explain technical terms in an accessible way was
commendable, ensuring that the audience could grasp the key concepts.
Improvement What do you feel they need to improve for their next presentation?

For the next presentation, the presenter could work on making transitions
between sections smoother and more natural. Addressing minor grammatical
errors would also enhance the overall clarity of the presentation.
Additionally, incorporating a more varied range of visuals and ensuring a
more natural use of gestures could further improve audience engagement and
the overall impact of the presentation.