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Reflection Summary Week 3 [Write out numbers under 10] Team A [Use "an"] MGT [Do not use all capitals in academic writing--unless in trade name, an acronym, or the running head ] /230 June 26, 2012 Instructor: Professor Scott Hannum

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Reflection [Make sure paragraph indentation is five to seven spaces or one tab stop] Summary Last week we [Use "we," "us," or "our" to mean yourself and coauthors, not general humanity (or yourself and the reader)] have learned about the correct mind thinking and structure someone should have when first opening up a business. The main key point is staying focus, just like the two ladies in the story did with their new coffee shop business. To have the right and correct mind set while building and structuring a business is a key factor to [Incorrect word--in] stay in business, be profitable and [in academic writing, if this is a series, place a comma before the final conjunction (and)] [Insert a comma before this word if this is the last in a list of more than two -- or if it begins a new clause] have success in the business place. What was really [Writing suggestion--"real" or "really" means "existing in actuality"--it adds little to the meaning (and using it to mean "big," "very," or "genuine" is slang); replace it with a more expressive word] interesting and useful from last week was

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the SWOT. This technique is very practical to use when opening your [Eliminate second person (you, your) in academic documents and avoid addressing the reader directly. Prefer third-person pronouns (he, she, they, it)] own business. Checking the external opportunities, external threats, Internal strength and [in academic writing, if this is a series, place a comma before the final conjunction (and)] internal weaknesses of a company every year helps the company to grow big and become successful. Having ["having" as a transitive verb is vague. Reconsider the sentence using "possessing," "acquiring," "developing," etc. Often "having" can be deleted] a plan to take a company from satisfactory to successful is nothing but a list without executing it. Using the SWOT analysis, for example will help us analyze our potential for growth in a business and even in daily life. Implementing strategic, tactical, and operational planning is more in depth [As an adjective, these two words are hyphenated] and requires a larger amount of detail to make a plan. Having a greater understanding of how each student can apply each level of strategic planning into his/her [This awkward construction is a shortcut appropriate in a legal document, but avoid using it in academic writing. Write it out: his or her (or his and her)] line of business. There is a great [Writing suggestion: "great" is an overworked word, too frequently seen, and too vague. It has too many meanings: huge, superior, numerous, etc. Use a more specific adjective] example of a strategic map that could easily be implemented [The passive voice is a form of "be" (be) and a participle (implemented). Over-use of the passive voice can make paragraphs officious and tedious to read. Prefer the active voice. For example, passive voice = The paper was completed on time. Active voice = the student completed the paper on time. See Center for

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Writing Excellence > Tutorials & Guides > Grammar & Writing Guides > Active & passive voice] in a retail line of business. We have learned that the opportunity to learn in detail how companys functions determine the structure of its different departments because of the need to specialized tasks forces to achieve goals within the finance, marketing, sales, human resources and [in academic writing, if this is a series, place a comma before the final conjunction (and)] other departments that need a specific structure to help achieve the companys overall [Wordiness: unless meaning denim work clothes, "overall" is general and vague and contributes little to the sentence] goal. [Writing suggestion: If this sentence is as long as 50 or more words, it can be confusing with logic twists, recursions, or long lists. Cut it into shorter sentences featuring one idea. Shorter sentences are easier to comprehend] We have learned that organizations benefit from these structures because they manage to bring together great people that [Check word usage--If this word refers to a human being, people are never "that" or "which," they are "who"] share similar skills and knowledge, which brings success to the organization. On another note we have learned that the different structure of functions would depend on not only the size of the organization but also of the services or products it provides. In the past experience [Redundancy: what else can "experience" be but that which occurred earlier? Leave out "past"] we have been fortunate to work in large corporations where [If not referring to a place, instead of "where," use "which" or "in which"] department functions were specific to achieve a part of the companys overall goals. The material discussed in this

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weeks readings revolved around organizational agility, human resource [A "human resource" is a single person; written in plural, "human resources" is the personnel office ] management, and planning as a management function. We found the material of this weeks reading to be very interesting because we can apply it to our personal life [Use "our personal lives"] as well as future professional careers. The chapter that we found to be the most interesting was Chapter ten [Express numbers higher than nine in digits (when not the first word in the sentence)] because it goes into depth about the job duties and functions of an HR manager or specialist. Learning about all [Writing suggestion: "All" or "all of" used as an intensifier very often can be removed with no loss of meaning] that goes into considering which applicants to choose, how much to pay is very interesting and [Run-on sentence: Insert comma before "and" if the following is an independent clause (not part of a series)] we never really knew how complex the issue could be. For example, sometimes when we call to check on a job application the HR manager may state that the position will be filled [Passive voice ] internally (very discouraging to hear); but we realize that they do this for reason. We have also learned that establishing mission, vision, and goals is very important to the success of any business of any size or scale. A business must have a sense of mission or shared sense of goal to play a significant role in all aspects of the daily work, like growth of the business. The leader of the organization mush hold the companys vision high for all to recognize, constantly expand on it and continuously [Check spelling: "Continuous" means continuing unceasingly, constantly, all day and night; "continual" means frequent but not

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uninterrupted continuance] encourage employees to connect with it and find ways to personalize and make it [Writing suggestion: often you can remove "With" and "it" (and the comma before "it" if present), simplifying the sentence-- it and find ways to personalize and make] their own goal. Content 50 Percent 1 Collaborate with your Learning Team to discuss the previous weeks objectives. X/1
Excellent. All points are covered.

Points Points Additional Comments: Available Earned

Discuss what you learned, what could be applicable to your workplace or personal life, and how your knowledge has increased as a result of what you experienced through the learning activities in the previous week.

Organization / Development 25 Percent

Points Points Additional Comments: Available Earned 0.5 X/.5

The paper was well organized but it had several structure errors. I recommend checking your documents with write point and correcting your errors before you submit. I included a raw report from the system so you all could see the errors that it identifies.

The paper is 1-2 pages in length. Paragraph transitions are present, logical, and maintain the flow throughout the paper. The tone is appropriate to the content and assignment.

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Sentences are complete, clear, and concise. Sentences are well constructed, strong, and varied. Sentence transitions are present and maintain the flow of thought.

Mechanics 25 Percent

Points Points Additional Comments: Available Earned 0.5 X/.5

Excellent title page. No references or citations. Please check the Reference and Citation Examples document in the Tutorials & Guides section of the Center for Writing Excellence for examples of correct formatting. Even for a short paper intellectual property must be recognized. Write point will also help eliminate grammar and spelling problems.

The paperincluding headings, title page, and reference page is consistent with APA formatting guidelines and meets courselevel requirements. Intellectual property is recognized with in-text citations and a reference page. Rules of grammar, usage, and punctuation are followed. Spelling is correct.

.25

Total Total Available Earned 2 1.5