EXTRA LESSON 2: VOICE

Initial Introduction: WOW Vocab

Does listing always give the effect that you want? The land is important, useful and full of opportunity.

Vocab for Tone: metaphor

A torrent of The key to A windfall effect An illusion of The spell The inclement mood The tightrope in which we walk

Initial Introduction: Vocab for tone

Lets craft the tone in this:
Always match tone to audience and purpose!

The land is important to our community. The land is of tantamount importance to our community. This unused, wasted land is of tantamount importance to our community. Unused and barren, this could be of tantamount importance to our community. A potential windfall of opportunities could be achieved should the land be developed.

Initial Introduction: Vocab for tone

Lets craft the tone in this:
The public response to eco-friendly development has grown more positive in recent times.

Revision is best described by which image?

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=khrx-zrG460

What is a motif?

Read the lyrics to the Sheryl Crow song identify the metaphorical references she uses to explain life. THERE ARE 4! Write down your favourite metaphor for life in the song Visualise. Mind-map some other ideas that expand upon the metaphor, e.g. mountain, summit, first steps, a distant goal, planting a flag. In narrative, a motif is any recurring element that has symbolic significance in a story. Through its repetition, a motif can help produce other narrative (or literary) aspects such as theme or mood. A narrative motif can be created through the use of imagery, structural components, language, and other narrative elements. The flute in Arthur Miller's play Death of a Salesman is a recurrent sound motif that conveys rural and idyllic notions.

Why a motif?

Ideas
I hitched a ride with a vending machine repair man He says he's been down this road more than twice He was high on intellectualism I've never been there but the brochure looks nice Jump in, let's go Lay back, enjoy the show Everybody gets high, everybody gets low, These are the days when anything goes [Chorus] Everyday is a winding road I get a little bit closer Everyday is a faded sign I get a little bit closer to feeling fine... I've been swimming in a sea of anarchy I've been living on coffee and nicotine I've been wondering if all the things I've seen Were ever real, were ever really happening [Chorus]

How Will You Revise Motifs

Why Will You Revise Motifs

Introductions and Conclusions

Introduction must introduce motif Famous/Made-up quote to inspire the writing OR detailed imagery

The motif must be referred to in different ways 3/4 times through the text The conclusion must relate back SEMANTICALLY to the introduction

Lets craft an example together

Examinations, sir, are pure humbug from beginning to end. If a man is a gentleman, he knows quite enough suggested the great Oscar Wilde. And indeed as Wilde always is - he is right. While education is supposed to promise us all the worldly delights of the sweetshop in terms of prospects, finance and lifestyle, I feel that maybe this sugary coating is simply too sweetor simply just saccharine!

So, now as this exam dissolves away, I am reminded of Wildes words. Like the humbug, Ive now reached my end: lets hope for a new beginning in our attitude to what school can provide.

Your Goal
Choose a quote to or opt for detailed imagery in your opening paragraph Formulate your introduction and add it on. Identify the idea in the quote to create your motif. Think of the different references you could make that will take your reader through your ideas. Move from conflict to resolution. Make three/four VARIED references to the motif across the whole writing including once in the semantically linked conclusion you will add on too.

Use your support pack: Its full of: Images Famous quotes Song lyrics Example articles and essays showing how to use motifs and create fab intros and concs
Choose a quote to parody or opt for detailed imagery in your opening paragraph Formulate your introduction and add it on. Identify the idea in the quote to create your motif. Think of the different references you could make that will take your reader through your ideas. Move from conflict to resolution. Make three/four references to the motif across the whole writing including once in the semantically linked

Re-engage brain Look it up Ask a friend

Peer Marking
Swap work/send an envoy Highlight semantic links between the intro and conclusion. How does the motif take you from conflict to resolution? Any advice?

Final Checking
Highlight any words you think may be incorrectly spelled. Check in a dictionary. Highlight any words you think could make more of an impact or could be tripled perhaps. Do a punctuation check:
-- - : ; ( ) ? !

FINAL HOMEWORK
Produce your final draft Attach a plan for the writing that you can use in the final exam (the model may help) Attach the scorecard and tick all of them off. Only hand-in EXCELLENT work! Due: 00/00

Class scorecard: Writing to Argue A*

Parodied quote 2 Semantic play on quote in intro 2
Anadiplosis or antimetabole 3

Semantic link to intro in conclusion 1

Parallel phrasing 2

One sentence paragraph. One word sentence 1

Adverbial, connective, adjective and even preposition sentence starters 1

Clear attempt to engage with audience: rapport, addressing counter arguments 2

Motif (3-4 references). May well be linked to original quote Further imagery? 3
Dashes 1

Range of Argue conventions, including irony

2 Hyphen 1

Semi-colon 2

Colon 1

Emotive vocabulary 2

Sentence variety: simple, compound and complex 2

The 1,2,3, 4 of Planning

1: Audience Needs 2: Conventions of Form&Purpose/Stylistic Features 3: Technical Features 4. Vocabulary:

What do they need to Conventions: know?

Punctuation:

Impressive:

Linked to motif: How do they need to feel? Sentence starters/types:

Famous Quote to inspire writing:

What do I need them to realise? How can I encourage this? Motif:

Imagery:

Adverbials/Discourse markers:

For tone: