Todays Lesson

Outline and Drafting

Review
Midterm

Essay Writing
Class 6
Taught by
Fazil Munir BA JD Esq

 Silently read the essay on page 110

Answer the questions on page 109
Be prepared to discuss

Outlining v. Draft

Outlines are skeletons

Drafts are children.
There will be no class next week (week 7)
Instead you will write a draft and outline for an essay
I will be in my office next Tuesday from 10-4 to edit
your essays.
If there is no time, we can continue on Saturday.
famunir37@gmail.com

It is not mandatory to meet with me but helpful.

It IS mandatory to turn in the essay (next Friday)
You can leave it on my desk

Today you should sign the attendance twice.

Title
It is what your reader sees first. Use
strong specific words!
It makes people want to read the essay.
It does not merely repeat the thesis
statement.
It may hint at the main point but does
not state it directly.
Use an interesting word or phrase

 Topic: Job Interview Skills

Thesis: Job Applicants can improve
their chances of success through
preparation
Title
Will you get the job?
Turning Interviews into Touchdowns
How to Ace an Interview

Title? What kind of support?

THESIS STATEMENT: My younger sister is showing signs
of becoming a teenager.
SUPPORT POINT: constantly texting friends
TOPIC SENTENCE: She texts friends constantly, even when they are
sitting with her while Im driving them.

SUPPORT POINT: a new style of clothes

TOPIC SENTENCE: She used to like really cute clothing, but now she
has a new style.

SUPPORT POINT: doesnt want me to know whats going on

TOPIC SENTENCE: While she used to tell me everything, now she is
secretive and private.

SUPPORT POINT: developing an attitude

TOPIC SENTENCE: The surest and most annoying sign that she is
becoming a teenager is that she has developed a definite attitude.

Outline
Thesis statement (part of introductory paragraph)
A. Topic sentence for support point 1 (paragraph
2)
1. Supporting detail 1 for support point 1
2. Supporting detail 2 for support point 1 (and so on)

B. Topic sentence for support point 2 (paragraph 3)

1. Supporting detail 1 for support point 2
2. Supporting detail 2 for support point 2 (and so on)

C. Topic sentence for support point 3 (paragraph 4)

1. Supporting detail 1 for support point 3
2. Supporting detail 2 for support point 3 (and so on)

Concluding paragraph (paragraph 5)

Paragraph to Essay
Title???
People who keep guns in their houses risk endangering
both themselves and others. Many accidental injuries
happen when a weapon is carelessly stored or handled. For
example, someone cleaning a closet where a loaded gun is
stored may handle the gun in a way that causes it to go off
and injure him or her. Guns also feature in many reports of
crimes of passion. A couple with a violent history has a
fight, and in a fit of rage one gets the gun and shoots the
other, wounding or killing the other person. Most common
and most tragic are incidents in which children find loaded
guns and play with them, accidentally killing themselves or
their playmates. Considering these factors, the risks of
keeping guns in the home outweigh the advantages, for
many people.

 People who keep guns in their houses risk endangering both

themselves and others.
Many accidental injuries happen when a weapon is carelessly
stored or handled.
For example, someone cleaning a closet where a loaded gun is stored
may handle the gun in a way that causes it to go off and injure him or
her.

Guns also feature in many reports of crimes of passion.

A couple with a violent history has a fight, and in a fit of rage one gets
the gun and shoots the other, wounding or killing the other person.

Most common and most tragic are incidents in which children

find loaded guns and play with them, accidentally killing
themselves or their playmates.
Considering these factors, the risks of keeping guns in the home
outweigh the advantages, for many people.

Review

Bridges/Transitions
Introductory Paragraph
Contains the thesis
Hook the reader (get their attention)
Tell a story (anecdote), interesting fact, quote, etc.

Body Paragraphs (3-4)

Topic Sentence
Support Topic Sentence with anecdotes, facts, analysis.

Conclusion
Summarize the thesis (using different words)
Call to action/reflection or observation on topic/ thoughtprovoking statement.
Summarize main points

3 Good Thesis Statements

Dracula was one of the better films this
summer because if its setting, action, and
philosophy.
Social ostracism, great expense, and
personal hardship are three of the worst
problems suffered by people afflicted by the
most dangerous disease of the century - AIDS.
From my personal experience, I know that poor
preparation, alcohol consumption, and
insect infestation can cause most family
picnics to fail.

Outline of an Essay.
Title?
THESIS STATEMENT: The Latin American influence
is obvious in many areas of U.S. culture.
SUPPORT POINT: Spanish language used in lots of places
TOPIC SENTENCE: Wherever you go in America, you will see
or hear Spanish.
Support: signs in stores, answering machine at bank

SUPPORT POINT: lots of different kinds of foods

TOPIC SENTENCE: Spanish food is ubiquitous in America.
Support: Taco Bell, Rubios,

SUPPORT POINT: new kinds of music and popular

musicians
TOPIC SENTENCE: Every American is familiar with Latin
American music stars such as Shakira and Ricky Martin.
Support: 69 % of Americans love Shakira, Ricky Martin is most
popular singer in America

Outline: Skelaton of Essay

THESIS STATEMENT: The Latin American
influence is obvious in many areas of U.S.
culture.
SUPPORT POINT: Spanish language used in
lots of places
Support: signs in stores, answering machine at bank

SUPPORT POINT: lots of different kinds of foods

Support: Taco Bell, Rubios,

SUPPORT POINT: new kinds of music and

popular musicians
Support: Shakira and Ricky Martin, salsa music

Sample outline
THESIS STATEMENT: The American
influence is evident in many areas of
Indonesian culture.
SUPPORT POINT:
Support:

SUPPORT POINT:
Support:

SUPPORT POINT:
Support:

Outline existing essay

Title:
Thesis
Topic Sentence for Supporting
Paragraph
Topic Sentence for Supporting
Paragraph
Topic Sentence for Supporting
Paragraph
Conclusion:

Thesis; question or fill in the

blank;
Who is your role model?
My role model is __________ because

Write in English.
25-35 sentences.
What are the benefits of going to
college?

Introduction
HOOK the reader;
Have you ever noticed how many gym membership advertisements
appear on television right after the New Year? Many people
overindulge through the holiday season, beginning with Halloween candy
and ending with the last sip of eggnog on Christmas evening. On average,
Americans gain seven pounds in that six-week period. Do not despair; there
is hope! Instead of fearing the holiday weight gain and spending money on
expensive exercise clubs, you can start a new exercise routine at home. I
am living proof that beginning a home workout regimen will become a
positive, life-altering experience that quickly balances your physical and
emotional health, has a maximum gain for minimum pain, and can lead you
to improve other aspects of your life as well.
Question
Statistics.
General to Specific

Hook the Reader

Something snapped inside Jerry Sola during
his evening commute through the Chicago
suburbs two years ago. When the driver in front
of the fifty-one-year-old salesman suddenly
slammed on his brakes, Sola got so incensed that he
gunned his engine to cut in front of the man. Still
steaming when both cars stopped at a red light,
Sola grabbed a golf club from the backseat and got
out.
Dianne Hales, Why Are We So Angry?
Anecdote.
What do you think this essay is about?

Wrap up Conclusion
Since his roadside epiphany, Jerry Sola has
conscientiously worked to rein in his rage.
I am a changed person, he says, especially
behind the wheel. I dont have to listen to the
news on the car radio. Instead, I put on nice,
soothing music. I force myself to smile at rude
drivers. And if I feel myself getting angry, I ask
a simple question: Why should I let a person
Im never going to see again control my mood
and ruin my whole day?
Dianne Hales, Why Are We So Angry?

Checklist for first draft

A clear, confident thesis statement states my main
point.
Each paragraph has a topic sentences that supports
the thesis.
The other sentences in the paragraph support the
topic sentence.
The introduction will interest readers.
The conclusion reinforces my main point and makes an
additional observation.
The title reinforces the main point.
All of the sentences are complete, (consisting of a
subject and verb, and expressing a complete thought)

 My favorite _______ is ___________ because

_________, ____________, _________________
Being a good ____________ requires skills such
as ______.
Why do men and women often
misunderstand each other?
What are some of the benefits of going to
college?
I want to be a singer because