REVISION AND

REVIEW:
CHINESE CINDERELLA
Tuesday, 17 January 2017
Structure and Form
• Required as part of the Assessment Objectives

• Structure: Focus on an internal structure – how the

‘sections’ of the writing are organised

• Form: ‘How does the PROSE look?’ is often an indicator –

Looking at this passage, do you see more dialogue or
narrative?
Structure
• Divide the text up. All these texts are IED
texts. Finding areas of each might be a good
start… lines IED

1-8 I,D

9-35 I,D

35-43 D

44-50 E (for the reader) D

52-57 I

etc

• Not wholly satisfactory: but we see how highly

descriptive the whole passage is…
Better
• Organise in line with narrative form:
Status Quo the opening establishes relationships
and foreboding

Development: The journey

Crisis: The meeting

Resolution: The Question

Status Quo: The outcome

• Work out where these sections come… Use them in your writing
FORM
• The bulk of the passage is in dialogue.

• Why do you think this is?

• How does it help to define character?

• How can the narrator indicate emotion and character when using
dialogue?
• What indicators stand out? How can punctuation be used for effect?
• How does “Sit Down! Sit Down!” differ from ‘sit down, sit down.’
• How reliable is the dialogue as an accurate depiction of the
meeting?
• What is the narrative function of the sections in plain prose
narrative?
Ideas for consideration
• 13: It’s a chauffeur rather than a family member who picks Adeline up. (Also signifies the wealth of
the family)
• 15-16: Adeline’s sense of foreboding. She assumes the worst.
• 20-1: Her feeling of dread and assuming that there will be bad news waiting for her.
• 23-6: Adeline’s lack of recognition of the family home.
• 29: Mother (step mother?) does not know she is coming or is deliberately “busy”
• 30-5: Her family are too busy to greet her and Adeline has never been to her father’s room.
• 35-38 Compare the descriptors of Adeline and father
• 38-40: Adeline is ill at ease with her father (who notices that she looks scared). She fears that her
father is going to catch her out.
• 54-62: Her father is pleased with his daughter because she ‘gives him face’ in front of a colleague.
There’s quite a lot to be said about his values and their relationship here.
• 67: Adeline’s father is measured in his encouragement here.
• 77-81: Her father’s cruel dismissal of her ambition (‘scoffed’ and use of questions) and her silence
(cultural honour codes).
• 82-89: His plans for Adeline (note the use of indicative future tense, the reasons he gives for going
into obstetrics and the accompanying brother). Q: why is the reference to Wordsworth ironic?

• In groups, discuss these and work out which topic they provide evidence for:
• Relationships, character of Adeline/Father, Nature of Society, Nature of Family