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Narrative Description
Narrative Description
Narrative Description
• His hand was over his eyes. He looked like a failed soldier. Dirt seemed so worked into him that the
lines of his face were like writing.”
• Mama Urn stood watching us—a little jet-black woman. Her elbows stuck out like wings, and a huge
white enameled tub occupied the space above her head, somewhat miraculously holding steady
while her head moved in quick jerks to the right and left.”
• He was a compact, clearcut man, with precise features, a lot of very soft black hair, and thoughtful
dark brown eyes. He had a look of wariness, which could change when he felt relaxed or happy,
which was not often in these difficult days, into a smile of amused friendliness and pleasure which
aroused feelings of warmth,
Now you have a vivid character: why not add some flashback memories?
Flashback ideas:
1. A soldier returning to his home that was terrorized/ destroyed by the enemy- waves of the destruction
while fighting come back (describe the noise, fear, panic, destruction, things flying around)
2. A business woman with little regard for the past beauty of buildings planning to destroy the only
remaining one (subtle clues as to why she hates the building-tragic/ lost relative/ bullied)
3. An old man remembering his first date or his days with wife where they used to attend here
TASK: Proof-read your writing. You are looking for and
correct/adding in: