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Choosing Your Words (Legal Writing)
Choosing Your Words (Legal Writing)
Choosing Your Words (Legal Writing)
Every profession has its own jargon. Yet to the educated person who is not a doctor, a
police officer, or a lawyer, those who use jargon sound more than a little silly.
Example: “observed a fungal infection of unknown etiology on the upper lower left
extremity”
“When SP01 Mendoza entered the lot, he observed the two males exiting the lot. He
then initiated a verbal exchange with a female white subject, who stated that she had
observed two male whites looking into vehicles. When she pointed out the subjects as
the two male whites who had exited the lot previously, SP01 Mendoza promptly
engaged in foot pursuit of them.”
-Talabon v. The Iloilo Provincial Warden (G.R. No. L-1153, June 30, 1947)
Legalisms should become part of your reading vocabulary, not part of your writing
vocabulary.
Legalism refers not to unsimplifiable terms of art (like habeas corpus) but to legal
jargon that has an everyday English equivalent.
The Undersigned hereby extends said lien on said property until said indebtedness and
Loan Agreement/Note as so modified and extended has been fully paid, and agrees that
such modification shall in no manner affect or impair said Loan Agreement/Note or the
lien securing same and that said lien shall not in anymanner be waived, the purpose of
this instrument being simply to extend or modify the time or manner of payment of said
Loan Agreement Note and indebtedness and to carry forward the lien securing same,
which is hereby acknowledged by the Undersigned to be valid and subsisting.
With a little effort – and by giving “the Undersigned” a name – it’s possible to boil that legal
gibberish down to this:
Williams extends the lien until the Note, as modified, has been fully paid. The
modification does not affect any other terms of the Note or the lien, both of which
otherwise remain in force.
The moral is this: do not be too impressed by the Latin and archaic
English words you read in law books. Their antiquity does not make
them superior. When your pen is poised to write a lawyerism, stop to see
if your meaning can be expressed as well or better in a word or two of
ordinary English.
USE STRONG PRECISE VERBS.
MINIMIZE IS, ARE, WAS AND WERE.
is
are
was
were
been
being
be
am
Be-verbs lack force. If they appear frequently, the writing becomes inert.
Example: If there is information to which the company has reasonable access, the designated
witness is required to review it so that the witness is prepared an all matters of
question.
Edit: If the company has reasonable access to information, the designated witness must
review it to prepare for all matters of questioning.
Example: Affecting vitally the problem of the burden of proof is the doctrine of presumptions. A
presumption occurs in legal terminology when the fact-trier, whether a court or a jury,
is required from the proof of one fact to assume some other fact not directly testified
to. A well-known example is the presumption that a person is dead after seven years if
he or she has been shown to have been absent for seven years without being heard
from.
Edit: The doctrine of presumptions vitally affects the burden-of-proof issue. A presumption
occurs in legal terminology when the fact-trier, whether a court or a jury, must deduce
from one fact yet another that no one has testified about directly. For example, the law
presumes that a person has died if that person has been absent for seven years without
being heard from.
TURN –ION WORDS INTO VERBS WHEN YOU CAN
It’s not just passive voice and be-verbs that can snap the strength of your sentences. So can
abstract nouns.
Examples:
• Write that some has violated the law, not that someone was in violation of the law
• That something illustrates something else, not that it provides an illustration of it
• That a lawyer has decided to represent the defendant, not that the lawyer has made the
decision to undertake the representation of the defendant
• That one party will indemnify the other, not that the party will furnish an indemnification
to the other
Wordy Better wording
Are in mitigation of mitigate
Conduct an examination of examine
Make accommodation for accommodate
Make provision for provide for
Provide a description of describe
Submit an application apply
Take into consideration consider
Why concentrate on editing –ion words? Three reasons:
The underlying rationale in all this is concreteness. By uncovering buried verbs, you
make your writing much less abstract - it becomes much easier for readers to
visualize what you’re talking about.
SIMPLIFY WORD PHRASES. WATCH OUT FOR “OF”
Edit: Mrs. Smith knew the existence of the computer’s access port.
Example: The Court did not err in issuing its order of dismissal of the claims
of the Plaintiff.
Edit: The Court did not err in issuing its order dismissing the Plaintiff’s
claims.
AVOID DOUBLETS AND TRIPLETS
To avoid needless repetition, apply this rule: if one word swallows the
meaning of other words, use that word alone. To put it scientifically, if one
term names a genus of which the other terms are merely species—and if the
genus word supplies the appropriate level of generality—then use the genus
word only. And if the two words are simply synonyms (convey and
transport), simply choose the one that fits best in your context.
REFER TO PEOPLE AND COMPANY BY NAMES
(1)when you’re discussing a case other than the one you’re currently involved
in;