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Stage 6 English Unit 5
Stage 6 English Unit 5
Week 1
Plan plot, characters and structure effectively in
writing an extended story.
Read a story together in which the events are told out of sequence.
Ask learners to show the order in which the events in the story were told
and to compare it with the order in which they happened.
Ask learners to think of another story (or a variation on the one you have
shared) in which it would make sense for the events to be told out of
sequence. They plot the events in boxes and then explore different ways
of sequencing the boxes.
Learners tell their story to a response partner before they begin to write
it to receive feedback on whether the order they plan to use makes sense
When should one *not* present events in
chronological order?
1. Flashbacks are great when something doesn't
make sense out of the context of what is
happening now in the story, or when something
that happened long ago (before the story's
timeline begins) is important to the story.
2. The story begins at a point where it is very
hard to introduce the characters well, so I
started at a point after that, then transitioned to
a flashback on how they got to that point.
You need to sometimes describe events that
happened a long time in the past, so that you
present them as sources or motives for events in
the present.
A nonlinear narrative.
When the woodsman saw the tracks in the mud, he knew something wasn’t right. The forest was
too quiet and both sets were fresh, meaning the second set could only have been a moment or
two behind the first. Shouldering his axe, he ran down the path just as a scream ripped the air.
Clancy loved her Grandma and tried to visit her whenever she could. It was spring, but it was not
warm enough to leave home without her cloak, a red, hooded cape that her mother had made
her. She prepared a basket of goodies for her grandma who hadn’t been feeling very well lately.
She kissed her mother good-bye and set off into the forest, but not before her mother warned
her to go directly to Grandma’s and not to dawdle or talk to strangers.
Wow. Grandma looks worse than ever, Clancy thought when she spotted her bonneted
grandmother peeking out at her from under the bed covers. Strange, too, that Grandma had not
opened the door for Clancy, but rather called out in a hoarse voice to enter. Usually her grandma
left the front door locked, but because Clancy had been late (she’d been distracted during her
journey) her grandmother had probably grown tired of waiting and unlocked the door before
lying in bed.
The day was truly glorious, and after only a few minutes of walking, Clancy
pulled her hood down. The sun peaked through the forest canopy and shafts
of sunlight spotlighted little groups of wild flowers. Clancy yearned to pick
some, but remembered her mother’s edict to go straight, so she walked on.
As Clancy approached the bed, she could see that her grandmother really
wasn’t herself today. Her hands, wrinkly and small on any other day, were
large—perhaps swollen—and covered in hair. “Gran, I brought you some
flowers,” she ventured. Grandma just looked at her with wide eyes.
Grandmother’s bonnet, too, looked stretched, and two lumps protruded on
the sides. When Clancy reached the bedside, her grandmother suddenly smile
a wide, toothy grin that Clancy had never seen on her nearly toothless old
grandma; she exclaimed, “Grandma, what big teeth you have!”
As she neared her Grandmother’s house, Clancy paused for a moment to loosen her
red cape. She was quite warm from the walk and needed to cool down. She put
down her basket and started to undo the lace at the neck, when a thick, growling
voice interrupted her. “Where are you off to this fine day?”
Grandma was setting the table when she heard a knock on the door. It wasn’t like
Clancy to be early, but she figured her granddaughter had perhaps left early
because it was so nice out. No sooner had she opened the door than she found
herself surrounded by giant teeth.
“Oh!” said Clancy, “I’m off to see my grandmother.” She’d been taken off guard by
the hairy creature that had silently emerged only a few feet from her. “I’d better get
going though.” She grabbed the basket and started to walk on, but the creature
said. “Oh really? How nice. I’m sure she’d love some of these flowers.”
“Well, yes, I had thought that, too, but I promised I’d…”
“Oh, it’ll just take a minute and no one would know. I bet your granny would love
them.” At this, the creature wiped some drool from his lip and blinked hard.
When the cottage door burst open, Wolf was still trying to get the grandmothers
tight nightgown over his bulging gut. He knew he was done for when he looked
up to see the man and the axe coming straight towards him. He had one final
thought as the blade split his belly, and little girl and her grandmother emerged
from the gaping hole left by the axe:
I don’t wish to deny that the flattened, minuscule head of the large-bodied
"stegosaurus" houses little brain from our subjective, top-heavy perspective,
BUT I do wish to assert that we should not expect more of the beast. FIRST OF
ALL, large animals have relatively smaller brains than related, small animals.
The correlation of brain size with body size among kindred animals (all
reptiles, all mammals, FOR EXAMPLE) is remarkably regular. AS we move from
small to large animals, from mice to elephants or small lizards to Komodo
dragons, brain size increases, BUT not so fast as body size. IN OTHER WORDS,
bodies grow faster than brains, AND large animals have low ratios of brain
weight to body weight. IN FACT, brains grow only about two-thirds as fast as
bodies. SINCE we have no reason to believe that large animals are consistently
stupider than their smaller relatives, we must conclude that large animals
require relatively less brain to do as well as smaller animals. IF we do not
recognize this relationship, we are likely to underestimate the mental power
of very large animals, dinosaurs in particular.
To show addition:
again, and, also, besides, equally important, first (second, etc.), further, furthermore,
in addition, in the first place, moreover, next, too
To give examples:
for example, for instance, in fact, specifically, that is, to illustrate
To compare:
also, in the same manner, likewise, similarly
To contrast:
although, and yet, at the same time, but, despite, even though, however, in contrast,
in spite of, nevertheless, on the contrary, on the other hand, still, though, yet
To summarize or conclude:
all in all, in conclusion, in other words, in short, in summary, on the whole, that is,
therefore, to sum up
To show time:
after, afterward, as, as long as, as soon as, at last, before, during, earlier, finally,
formerly, immediately, later, meanwhile, next, since, shortly, subsequently, then,
thereafter, until, when, while
To show place or direction:
above, below, beyond, close, elsewhere, farther on, here, nearby, opposite, to the left
(north, etc.)
To indicate logical relationship:
accordingly, as a result, because, consequently, for this reason, hence, if, otherwise,
since, so, then, therefore, thus
Week 2
Manage the development of an idea throughout a
piece of writing, e.g. link the end to the beginning.
Once learners have planned their story, they begin to write it. Generate/share the
success criteria:
• tell a story in which the events are out of chronological sequence
• use paragraphs successfully to structure their story and control the pace of
development
• include a variety of sentence structures to interest the reader and control the
information given and the pace of the story.
Once learners have written their first draft, ask them to do the writer’s mumble
and read the story aloud several times to check:
• the text meets the success criteria
• the story makes sense and the events follow each other logically
• their choice of words (Can they improve the quality of the verbs and the choice
of nouns?)
• punctuation / spelling.
Once learners have planned their story, they begin to write it. Generate/share the success
criteria:
Beginnings
Middles
Endings
Structure
Structure and paragraphs test
Beginnings
The beginning, or opening, is one of the most important sections of your writing. It should
grab the reader's attention and make them want to read on. For instance, which is the
best beginning for a ghost story?
a) The house was built in 1975. It was a typical semi-detached, but it did have quite an
impressive front door. Most of the windows were double glazed and the garden was quite
neat.
b) The creaking door swung open to reveal an empty hall. Ben shivered as he stepped
inside, his footsteps echoing on the cold tile floor.
There are no prizes for guessing that the second one is scarier. Of course, if you were
trying to describe the house and nothing else, then the first extract is better, because it
tells us more.
So you need to think about TAP (text, audience and purpose) and make a good start to
your writing. You should try to 'set a context', which is like setting the scene. So if it's a
speech, you might start by asking people a question and getting them to think. But if it's a
newspaper article, you need to write what happened and where it happened very early
on.
A persuasive letter to local residents
a) The subject I am going to write about today is why the local park should
not be closed.
b) Have you ever stopped to wonder how many hundreds of people make
regular use of our Memorial Park?
A newspaper report on a meeting
a) It is unlikely that newspaper readers who enjoy all the things that our
park has to offer will want it to disappear forever under tons of concrete.
b) 'Ashfield Park will be ruined,' claim protestors who held a meeting last
night to organise opposition to the council's plans for a car park.
It should be clear that the "b" versions are better - they fit the style and
show that the writer has used TAP to make their writing work. Remember -
you need to make it interesting right from the start.
Middles
This is the heart of your piece - it contains the key
points and will probably have three, four or five
paragraphs. You should have one basic idea in each
one, and the paragraph explains this, develops it and
makes it relevant for your readers.
So paragraphs are like stepping stones - they lead the
reader from one end of your writing to the other. But
when do you start a new paragraph? Well some
people like using TiPToP, so let's see how this works.
TiPToP
Ti - stands for Time, so start a new paragraph for
a different time period.
P - stands for Place, so start a new paragraph for
each new place.
To - stands for Topic, so start a new paragraph
for each new topic, idea or subject.
P - stands for Person, so start a new paragraph
for each new speaker.
Endings
This can be another tricky area - you shouldn't just stop writing. Instead,
make the ending memorable.
There are many different ways of doing this. If it's a ghost story, you can
leave it unsure and open, as if something else might happen next. Like
this…
He turned away just as a shadow rose up from the bricks. Was it a trick of
the light? Or something else?
In other pieces, you need to come to a definite answer, like this…
Once the trees are chopped down and the play equipment bulldozed
away it will be too late. Too late to save our park. Too late to think about
our children. And too late to remember those who died for our freedom.
So act now to safeguard this valuable, beautiful area for the future.
Structure
Now you've had a chance to practise beginnings, middles, endings
and paragraphs, you should have a clearer idea of how to organise
your work.
Remember:
You need to organise and structure your work. It should be in clear,
appropriate steps. If it's muddled, it will confuse the reader.
Think about the beginning - will it interest other people? Will it make
them sit up and take notice?
TiPToP your paragraphs. That means a new paragraph for a new time,
place, topic or person.
The ending is not just when you stop writing - you need to make it
memorable and as interesting as the start.
Structure and paragraphs test.
1. You've just asked if you can go down to the park to meet your friends and have been
given the following answer:
"You're not going anywhere near that place. It's full of litter, it's never supervised and
the equipment is a total health hazard! You'll have to find somewhere else to hang
around."
Write a letter to Mrs H Devonshire, Parks Department, complaining about the area and
requesting that something is done about it.
Below are five ideas for paragraphs that you could include in your letter. They are not in
the best order, so drag and drop them to improve the structure. Drag the idea into the
best place in the table below:
Hope improvements can be completed soon
Teenagers can frighten the children and no-one supervises them
Say who I am / why I'm writing / where the place is
Need proper attendants / railings / new equipment / notices
Danger to young children from litter and broken swings
Week 3
Use connectives to structure an argument or discussion.
Use a wide range of connectives to clarify relationships between ideas, e.g. however, therefore, although.
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Changing the order of the clauses subtly
changes the meaning of a sentence.
A complex sentence contains a main clause and a subordinate clause.
We carried on walking, although we were exhausted.
The main clause (we carried on walking) makes sense on its own; the
subordinate clause (although we were exhausted) begins with a connective
and does not make sense on its own.
The clauses can be switched round so that the subordinate clause comes
first.
Although we were exhausted, we carried on walking.
This has the effect of changing the emphasis of the sentence, and highlights
our exhaustion rather than the fact that we were walking.
Extend understanding of shades of meaning to connectives. Although a group
of connectives may be linked as ‘additional information’ connectives, their
meanings are often subtly different.
Certain connectives are associated with different text types and
use them to structure the text, e.g. furthermore, nevertheless
and moreover are associated with persuasive/argument texts,
and similarly, whereas and on the other hand are associated
more with discursive texts.
Punctuate speech and use apostrophes
accurately.
Learners need to secure accuracy in:
• punctuating direct speech
• making appropriate use of the apostrophe in
contractions and to show possession, but not in possessive
pronouns or plurals – focus on it’s and its.
The colon.
One common use of the colon is to introduce a list of items. For example:
To make the perfect jam sandwich you need three things: some bread,
butter and strawberry jam.
Three items are listed in the sentence above. The first part of the
sentence informs the reader that there will be three things; then the colon
tells the reader “here are the three items”.