Group 9 Members:

Essay Writing
22l_7901 Ahmad Shamail Butt

22l_79155 Muneeb Tariq

Type: Persuasive 22l-7920 Moin Chopra

22l-7941 Syed Huzaifa

22l-7945 Asfandyar

22l-7926 Muhammad Talha

People should be encouraged to
holiday abroad.
Introductory Paragraph
 According to a study a comparison between vacationers to
Readers Hook: non-vacationers showed that vacationers had an 8%
Interesting Facts
higher pre-trip happiness score than non-vacationers.
Lead in to thesis Statement
Travelling is an amazing way to learn a lot of things in life.
A lot of people around the world travel every year to many
Thesis Statement: Red
place. It is important to travel to humans. So, people must
3 points
1.Releases stress be encouraged to holiday abroad as traveling relieves
2.Causes exposure to new
culture stress, causes exposure to new culture and boosts
3.Boosts creativity
creativity.
Body Paragraph
 Traveling is one of greatest source for relieving stress.
Topic Sentence In fact, a vacation can help take your mind off issues

Major Supporting that causes stress and tension. As, vacations offer an
Details opportunity to spend relaxing time and keeps your
concentration away from daily life worries. Traveling
Minor Supporting
Details around the world refresh the mood. Travel time is filled
with social activities which boost happiness in the brain

Transitions and reduces mind tension level.

 Travelling can also cause exposure to new culture. First, when
Body Paragraph
we travel to a distant nation, we research its customs to

Topic Sentence understand more about its culture. We learn about

Thanksgiving, for instance, where family members get
Major Supporting Details
together to eat and exchange gifts with the younger
Minor Supporting Details members of the family. Second, by exploring them, we learn
about foreign cultures. People in Balochistan, for instance,

Transitions mostly consume seafood, indicating that the sea life there is
rich.
Body Paragraph
Further, travel can shape you into a better more creative
Topic Sentence person. When we travel to new and distant places our
senses jump into higher gear. This builds new
Major Supporting
Details connections, memories and trigger divergent thinking. A
study suggest travelling opens up your brain as well.
Minor Supporting
Details When we find ourselves in new places our brain starts to
connect different parts of brain, that in result boost our

Transitions creativity.
  To conclude, providing mental relaxation, exposing the cultures
Concluding Paragraph of unseen places and increasing mind’s creations are the factors
of encouragement for people to travel aboard. People should be
provided with opportunities of holiday abroad to make them
mentally calm and relax. This is beneficial for their both individual
Re-phrased thesis
statement as well as their social life. If people would not be encouraged enjoy
holiday abroad, how would they increase their creativity? How
would they manage hectic routines without a productive break?
Transitions The absence of this productive break would absolutely lead to
depression for them.