DISCOURSE ANALYSIS

OF GRADE 12 COMPOSITION

BACHELOR OF ARTS IN ENGLISH

LANGUAGE -III
 ORIGINAL TEXT

ABOUT MILLENNIALS
The millennials is they can do anything to
there self, because they are so very rich, beautiful that
can attract other people, The millennials is teeneager
that they can do the best to her self to be millenials.
The millennials that they can do anything being beauty
and being confident to there self. The millenials is to
know drink alcohol and to know to use the segarrate
and gadget. and to know about the girl friend and boy
friend and they can know about every friends.
 CORRECTIONS

SPELLING
Milenials - Millennials Teeneager- Teenager
Segarrate - Cigarette
GRAMMAR
The millennials is they can do anything to there
self because they are so very rich, beautiful that can
attract other people.
- Since the noun is plural the verb must also be plural so
it should be “are”.
- “They” is no longer necessary.
- It should not be there self but themselves.
- so and very makes the sentence redundant.
 The millennials is teeneager that they can do the
best to her self to be millenials. The millennials that
they can do anyhing being beauty and being confident
to there self.
- There is no longer coherence on the ideas.
- Some words are no longer necessary to use because it
would make it redundant.
 THE CORRECTED TEXT

ABOUT MILLENNIALS
The millennials can do anything by
themselves, because they are rich and beautiful that
can attract other people. They have the beauty and
the confidence, making them the best millennials.
The millennials know how to drink liquors,
know how to use cigarettes and gadgets, and know
how to deal with intimate relationships –like having
girlfriends and boyfriends.
 THE ORIGINAL TEXT

The millenial are have many Gadget so that's

why that there eye is defective. The millenils is so
sexy , smart and handsome. The millenials is use
cegaret, wine and other alcohol. The millenials is so
very Bitch. Millenials on a generation that have on lot
of gaget like an cellphone, laptap, tablet an ect. we are
Example of an Millenials is because we are a teenager.
That born on this generation.
 CORRECTIONS

SPELLING
Millenials - Millennials Gaget - Gadget
Millenils - Millennials Laptap - Laptop
Cegaret - Cigarette ect - etc.
GRAMMAR
The millenials are have many Gadget so that's why that there
eye is defective.
- are is no longer necessary to use
- gadget should not be capitalized and it should be in a plural form
- there is no need to use so and that
- it should be their not there
- eye should be in a plural form and must be followed with are not
is.
 The millenials is so very Bitch. Millenials on a generation
that have an lot of gaget like an cellphone laptap, tablet and ect.
- The word Bitch is an informal word it should not be use in
any formal compositions.
- it should be ''a'' not ''an''
- it should be ''lots of gadgets'' not ''lot of gaget''
We are Example of an Millenials is because we are a
teenager.
- example should not be capitalized as well as millennials
- it should be ''a'' not ''an''
- it should be are not is
- there is no need to use ''a'', and teenager must be in a plural
form.
 THE CORRECTED TEXT

The millennials have many gadgets like

cellphones, laptops and tablets, that is why their eyes
were defected. They are so sexy, smart and handsome.
They use cigarettes, wine and other alcohol.
We are an example of a millennial, because we
are teenagers, we were born in this generation.
 The 3 boys always absent from the class during
activities. In distributing the card They will got poorly
grade.
- Since the noun ''boys'' is plural it should also be
followed with a plural verb ''are''.
- ''They'' should not be capitalized because it's not in
the beginning of a sentence.
- it should be ''poor'' not ''poorly'', and ''get'' not ''got''
- since they is plural in form grade must also be pural.
ORIGINAL TEXT
My bedroom the left side is their have a picture
or frame and the right side They have a cabinet and
two windows.
- the ideas in this sentence doesn't have coherence.
- their and they should not be use since he's referring
to his bedroom.

CORRECTED TEXT
The left side of my bedroom has a picture frame,
and the right side has a cabinet and two windows.
ORIGINAL TEXT
Boys and girls are the same human, they have
eyes, ears, nose, mouth, hand and other parts of human
body. But they are not the same in reproductive system
and shape of the body. And boys are stronger than girls.
- both is the appropriate word to use not the same
- human should be plural since boys and girls are in
plural form as well as hand.
- ''they have eyes, ears, nose, mouth, hand and other
parts of human body'', this must be another sentence
because it's already a different idea.
CORRECTED TEXT
Boys and girls are both humans. They have eyes,
ears, nose, mouth, hands and other parts of human
body, but they are not the same in reproductive system
and body shape. Boys are stronger than girls.
ORIGINAL TEXT
I forget to bring my umbrella for the rainyday so
that I go on to school all wet.
- since the statement is in past progressive tense we
should use forgot instead of forget.

CORRECTED TEXT
I forgot to bring my umbrella for the rainy day,
so I go on to school all wet.
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