How to improve Essay

Writing
Writing Part 1
 Look at the task
In your English class, you have been talking about life in the past.
Now, your teacher has asked you to write an essay. Write an essay using all the notes
and give reasons for your point of view.
Write you essay in 140-190 words.
Essay question
“Life is better today than it was 100
years ago.” Do you agree?
Notes
Write about:
•Health
•Entertainment
•………………..(your own idea)
AGREE AGREE DISAGREE DISAGREE
ONE- BALANCED ONE-SIDED BALANCED
SIDED ESSAY ESSAY ESSAY
ESSAY (2 IN FAVOUR, 1 (2 AGAINST, 1
AGAINST) IN FAVOUR)
Writing tips

• Read the question carefully. Respond to all ideas in it or all parts

of it.
• Plan your ideas first and then choose the best ones.
• Introduce your essay by restating the question in your own
words.
• Use linking words to connect your ideas.
• State your opinion and give evidence/examples to support it.
• Draw your conclusion from the main ideas in your essay,
restating your opinion. Don't introduce new ideas at the end.
How can we improve it? Let’s
share our ideas.
· In second and third place, money management and learning a new language are two very important
skills. It allows us to know how to manage in the world, knowing what to do with your money or not, and
learning a new language opens different doors to new job opportunities.

· These days there is a common belief, in which schools are criticized, due to the fact that all they teach
are traditional school subjects, instead of teaching what is essential for the everyday life.

· The [MLD1] school education in Argentina is not enough to enter The University. That is why are not
teaching students the skills they need for their future. To argue this task I have some reasons that I will
explain in order.

· Nowadays, there is some discussion about education. [MLD3] . Many parents have made a complaint
[MLD4] about the skills given in school, because they consider that the students are not prepared for the real
world.

· First of all, the academic knowledge: [MLD6] There is a big knowledge inequality since people with more
resources and with access to private education have a better chance than the students that attends public
schools. Therefore, the academic knowledge depends on the access to the sector of education of each
student
How can we improve it? Let’s
share our ideas.
· The education system that school practices in its current form which has both its
positive and negative side. Complex topics in mathematics and sciences are being
taught, yet the most basic necessities in life, such as financial management and other
skills, are left out.

· In conclusion, I think that schools should improve their system. Although they cannot
do alone the improvements. They will need the assistance of the state. For example, the
state can help in the topic about the money management.

· As a conclusion I would like to add that if the school did not teach us these skills we
would not be able to face the different problems well prepared.

· On the other hand, Schools not organize in the right form. As a result there is a bad
money management. For instance, the children have not the books that they need to
study. In several cases, they have not a pencil case or there not enough tables. It is
difficult that Schools have computers for each student.