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Evaluation of Others’ Work.

Critique Evaluation
We All Bloom Like Cosmos & Realized

12 HUMSS J.S MILL

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Evaluation of Others’ Work.

Write goals here

1. Seek for grammatical errors.

2. Consider the five elements in evaluating one’s work.
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We All Bloom Like Cosmos (prose)

Do not worry if you think that the world is against you.

Do not probe on something that does not happen yet.
And do not get stuck on your painful past.
Because how will you bloom if you are incapable?
Incapable of being free from all your agony?
Incapable of spreading your wings?
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We All Bloom Like Cosmos

Honey, you won't use your wings to fly but to see the world
from a vast perspective.
So vast that you will get to see the land of the cosmos waiting
for you.
Dancing amidst the afternoon breeze like they are cheering
for you.
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We All Bloom Like Cosmos

Saying, "Go, bloom like us. Stand with simplicity, beauty,

and joy because you are like us, honey. Harmonize with other
people, and you won't realize that you'll be like a flower that
people would look up to. “
You can do it; believe in yourself.
Don't get stuck. Face forward. Let go and move on, honey,
because we all bloom like the cosmos.
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Evaluation by Jasmine Marie Isla

As I read the prose that she composed, I felt inspired

because her theme is about inspiring the people who will read
it. It is very engaging because this is the theme she chose to
do. After all, in today's time, this kind of work is what people
need to read today. Moreover, the words she used are very on
point, and there are not too many errors in her grammar, so
for me, her work is beautiful.
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Realized (short story)

On a well-known campus, there is a couple who are

famous, Jennie and Lisa. Jennie is the queen bee of the
campus, and Lisa is a famous dancer at their school.
Jennie and Lisa had a happy relationship for almost
three years since their first year in college, they met in school
because of Jisoo, Jisoo is their common friend.
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Realized

But Jennie was tested by the time when she met Kai
who was just a new transfer to their school, Kai always
teased her but she didn’t tell Lisa about it because she was
busy with her dance practice and because of this it didn’t
take long but little by little Jennie fell for Kai and Jennie fell
out of love with Lisa.
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Realized

Lisa found out everything that had been hidden from

her when she confronted her since she had discovered it. Her
world turns upside down because of it. Since then, Jennie
doesn't love her anymore and cheated on her, she has always
been drinking alcohol every night.
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Realized

One day while Lisa is walking around the park, she met
a girl named Irene. Irene is a sweet girl and she is from
Korea same as Lisa they start talking and Lisa discovered
that Irene has a sister named Joy and after their talk, they
took each other’s number.
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Realized

Jennie feels sad because her feelings for Lisa came back
after she and Kai broke up, she regretted that she left Lisa
just for Kai because Kai’s true behavior came out when they
became a couple, Jennie realized that she still loves Lisa but
she knew in herself that Lisa doesn’t love her anymore.
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Evaluation by Kristal Nollora

"Realized" by Jasmine Marie Isla:

A Critique Essay
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Evaluation by Kristal Nollora

The short story by Jasmine Marie Isla entitled,

'Realized, ' was about love and regret. This story was for one
of her subject requirements. The characters of the story were
from the Korean Pop Group, Blackpink. Her literary genre
was LGBTQ+, as the main characters were both women.
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Evaluation by Kristal Nollora

The story's structure and language are organized in a

detailed manner and a third-person point of view, meaning
the author herself was the one who was delivering the
narrative. The author also used the IBC (introduction, body,
conclusion) format, which was why it was comprehensive and
understandable.
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Evaluation by Kristal Nollora

In the introduction, she introduced the characters and

their significance to the story. It had a plot but lacked details.
Yes, it had a resolution, but the ending was somewhat
unconvincing and cut off. She utilized an open-ended story,
where the story was wrapped up and left the reader
wondering how the story would end.
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Evaluation by Kristal Nollora

If only the author added information, the story might be

more engaging for her audience. On the other hand, the
thought and ideas were there, but the readers would still look
for more until they were satisfied with the denouement.
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Overall, the story would leave the audience with

thoughts and realization. Maybe some would ask for revenge
because the character cheated, and some would ask for
closure. Some would also realize that cheating against your
significant other will never do good in all aspects of a
relationship. It will just leave regrets and despair in the
sinner. The story has potential just a bit of detail would make
it infallible.
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Presenters
Evaluation of Others’ Work.

Kristal Irish Nollora Jasmine Marie Isla

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Evaluation of Others’ Work.

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