You should spend thirty minutes on this!

Question 5 Examine Text 1 and Text 2 for this question.

Compare how the writers present their ideas and perspectives about
experiences.
Support your answer with detailed examples from both texts including brief
quotations. 22 marks
How do they
present the How do they convey their ideas
subject? via feelings/attitudes/tone?

Immediately compare the texts.

Summarise overall similarities and differences you will be
Introduction discussing.
Suggest the significance of a text being in 1st/3rd person
Comparison of both texts Write about both texts in each paragraph.
Analyse language, tone and structure.
Use PEEL.
Conclusion Use connectives to show that you are comparing.
Summarise your overall essay findings.
Give your opinion.
Compare how the writers
present their ideas and
perspectives about
experiences.
 You should spend thirty minutes on this!

Question 5
Compare how the writers present their ideas and perspectives about
experiences.
Support your answer with detailed examples from both texts including brief
quotations. 22 marks

Text 1 Text 2

Both texts convey the perspective of being uncertain and anxious about their experiences at
the start of each piece.
In text 1 and 2, the writers alter their perspectives of their experiences after reflecting on
them. However, in text 1, the writer, as a child, has lesser perception of her experiences than
Zephaniah in text 2.
Furthermore, in both texts, adults have a negative impact upon the experiences of children.

In text 1, the writer’s perspective is explored However, in text 2, the writer’s experiences
through a frantic, chaotic tone. are conveyed in a more confident way.
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Introduction
Compare how the writers present their ideas and
perspectives about experiences.
Immediately compare the texts.
Summarise overall similarities and differences you will be
discussing.
Suggest the significance of a text being in 1st/3rd person

 Compares continuously;
Both the writer of ‘The Old Cricketer’ and  Explores HOW ideas and
Chimamanda Achide present their ideas and perspectives about perspectives are presented;
how people are not always what they seem through exploring the  Uses connectives;
fact that initial impressions are often  Looks at both similarities and
actually subverted: structurally, they ‘reveal’ at the midpoint differences;
of their texts that their first thoughts on these subjects  Covers some of the core elements –
are wrong. The writer of ‘The Old Cricketer’ uses first person to language, narrative voice and tone.
express his early doubt of Harold Larwood’s cricketing skill
through detailed description of his aged  It could have explored the impact
appearance. However, Achide uses first person to directly of structure on presenting ideas and
challenge the audience of the TED Talk to see a new perspective
perspectives.
on other people from different countries, races or backgrounds
rather than relying on their preconceived ideas about them
through using an extended metaphor of the power of stories.
 I then specify
Exemplar Paragraph for Question Five the techniques
Immediately comparative – focussing noted
Three quotations, split up and
on a language feature – maintained imbedded to support my ideas
to link ideas
Both authors choose to describe the setting of their surroundings using imagery and sensory
description to similar effect. In the Ellen Macarthur piece, the “wind whistled” past the narrator
and the “sea stretched out forever” causing her to reflect that “this is what it must look like to an
albatross”. The onomatopoeia of the wind that “whistle[s]” and the sibilance used to describe the
“sea” is used to give an overall image of isolation and a sense of height and danger but the writer’s
feelings of awe balance these emotions with the simile that wonders at the glory of nature and her
current predicament on the ship’s mast, linked with a sense of freedom and accomplishment.
Similarly in, A Journey to Bhutan, the writer uses the description of the setting, and more
specifically of the mountains, to exaggerate feelings of challenge and a general sense of feeling
overwhelmed with her journey and situation as she notes that the “entire earth below us was a
convulsion of crests and gorges and wind-shaped pinnacles”. Her use of the rule three and the
powerful adjective, further amplified with the alliterative “convulsion of crest” gives a sense that
the setting is harsh and moving yet again there is a sense of awe due to the sheer size and
impressive nature of this threatening but awe-inspiring setting. The use of the compound
adjective “wind-shaped” suggests a sense of natural beauty, crafted by the wind.

Continual focus on effect created and Quotation provided and then section
thoughts and feelings of writers shared selected for further analysis
Success criteria for body paragraph:

 Must begin with an umbrella sentence/s that compares the texts, stating a
similarity or difference.
 Use of frequent quotes, embedded into sentences. Try to keep them short.
 Analysis of techniques is at word level.
 Analysis of evidence often explores how techniques work together –
language/structure work together
 Talks about both texts evenly.
 Links them together with a connective.
 Stick to the question focus and reference it throughout.
 Say HOW techniques are working.
 Multiple readings/interpretations