ORGAN SALES SAVES LIVES by Joanna Mackay BACKGROUND

INFORMATION
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INTRODUCTORY PARAGRAPH

What’s a great example of a match made in heaven? Here is one. There are thousands
dying to buy a kidney and thousands of people dying to sell a kidney, literally. About 350,000
Americans suffer from end-stage renal disease, a state of kidney disorder so advanced that the
organ stops functioning altogether. There are no miracle drugs that can revive a failed kidney,
leaving dialysis and kidney transplantation as the only possible treatment. Dialysis is harsh,
expensive, and, worst of all, only temporary. Kidney transplantation, on the other hand, is the
closest thing to a cure that anyone could hope for. With the sale of organs outlawed in almost
every country, the number of living donors willing to part with a kidney for free is small. The list
is long. With over 60,000 people in line in the United States alone, the average wait for a
cadaverous kidney is ten long years. Daunted by the low odds, some have turned to an
alternative solution: purchasing kidneys on the black market. In spite of the perceived risks and
criticisms thrown at buying and selling kidneys, legalizing the sale of organs is a real
humanitarian act, it eliminates the black market, and protects both recipient and donor.
THESIS STATEMENT
NOW THAT WE HAVE SUBMITTED OUR

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BACKGROUND INFORMATION
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THESIS STATEMENT

It is time to work on our 3 body PARAGRAPHS

Argumentative Essays usually have 6 body paragraphs
3 to elaborate on the qualities of your chosen stand
( ex. Solar Panels, No to Conscription etc.) and 3 more to counter
argue against criticism

For our case, we will shorten it to half by combining the three

features with the counter arguments

The following are samples of the three body paragraphs using the
sample thesis statement below..
While many say that using SOLAR panels is eco friendly, the truth is
it is unreliable, inapplicable in urban settings and costly to maintain.
3 MAIN IDEAS of YOUR THESIS

Solar Panels are unreliable

Solar Panels are inapplicable in urban settings

Solar Panels are costly to maintain

BODY PARAGRAPH NUMBER 1 “ Solar Panels are unreliable”

Proponents of solar panels may argue that the value of their houses have increased because
these devices significantly increase the home’s appeal to environmentally conscious buyers.
However, Solar panels are very unreliable especially in some locations. According to Foster
and Ghassemi 2009, only when the sun’s light reaches the panels do they produce electricity.
This means they are hardly very dependable when there are thunder storms, evenings as well
as cloudy days. The sporadic generation of energy can hardly meet the constant electricity
demands of large communities or factories that run 24/7 thus leading to issues on
dependability. Jayarama Reddy in his book “Solar Power Generation
Technology, New Concepts & Policy” also states that the reliability of solar power systems is
greatly affected by how efficient an energy storage system is. So a home owner is at the
mercy of not only by weather elements but also the capacity in which his solar energy system
can store making this decision very impractical.
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BODY PARAGRAPH NUMBER 2 “ Solar Panels are inapplicable in urban settings”

Solar Panel advocates confidently contend that their use makes them eligible for real estate
taxation incentives and refunds while signifying one’s zeal to the reduction of carbon
productions and negative impacts to the environment. While this is a case in open spaces,
Solar Panels are inapplicable in urban settings. Living in densely populated areas can inhibit
home owners to increase capacity to capture the sun’s energy. This is because the little
amount of roof space they own can also be hindered by high-rise buildings, chimneys and
vents. Using land space also is not very feasible as one has to consider city ordinances and
building codes . Tesla CEO Elon Musk emphasizes that it is imperative that solar panel designs
have to be optimized first so that it can accommodate roof sizes. Lastly, if the panel one uses
is not of great quality, this then becomes a major issue as the owner may need to purchase
more lot or land area to supplement his energy needs. Overall, urban dwellers may have to
go rely on the regular electricity grid for peace of mind.

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BODY PARAGRAPH NUMBER 3 “ Solar Panels are costly to maintain”
One thing that Solar Panel owners are really proud of is how they significantly reduce or even
eliminate electricity bills . This nevertheless comes at a very significant investment because
Solar Panels are costly to maintain. One should cannot sit back and enjoy the benefits of
solar panels that easily. One must consider several factors such as costs of cleaning,
maintenance of inverters, system monitoring, annual inspections and most importantly
unexpected repairs. Buildup of animal excrement, dust, debris and leaves greatly affect
sunlight absorption and so this has to be addressed in a very regular manner. Constant
checking and replacement of inverters cannot just be done by untrained home owners. This
has to be performed by experts and that comes with a cost. Physical damage caused by
heavy downpours, hail/thunder as well as heavy snow must all be part of the thought
process. Forbes home states that only if panels are kept clean and free of debris, they
should continue to function for many years. Thus, one has to really do some careful
planning before making considerations to purchasing solar panels for one’s home.
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BODY PARAGRAPH NUMBER 1 “ Solar Panels are unreliable” Your Main Idea is the start of your counterargument ( however, but, nevertheless, etc)

Opening statement must oppose your stand

Textual evidence with in text citation

Proponents of solar panels may argue that the value of their houses have increased because these
devices significantly increase the home’s appeal to environmentally conscious buyers. However, Solar
panels are very unreliable especially in some locations. According to Foster and Ghassemi 2009, only
when the sun’s light reaches the panels do they produce electricity. This means they are hardly very
dependable when there are thunder storms, evenings as well as cloudy days. The sporadic generation
of energy can hardly meet the constant electricity demands of large communities or factories that run
24/7 thus leading to issues on dependability. Jayarama Reddy in his book “Solar Power Generation
Technology, New Concepts & Policy” also states that the reliability of solar power systems is greatly
affected by how efficient an energy storage system is. So a home owner is at the mercy of not only by
weather elements but also the capacity in which his solar energy system can store, making this decision
very impractical.
Concluding Statement summarizes your thoughts with the use of an evaluative statement
YOUR OUTPUT FOR TODAY:
Out of the three features you have included in your thesis statement, choose only
one and construct a body paragraph that includes the following.
1. An opening statement that features what opponents say about your subject
( ex. Proponents of solar panels may argue that the value of their houses have
increased because these devices significantly increase the home’s appeal to
environmentally conscious buyers. )
2. A counter argument or main idea: This is your chosen feature from your thesis.

( ex. However, Solar panels are very unreliable especially in some locations.
3. Supporting details that include a minimum of one textual evidence.
(ex. According to Foster and Ghassemi 2009, only when the sun’s light reaches
the panels do they produce electricity )
4. A concluding statement - This will be in the form of an Evaluative Statement.
( ex. So a home owner is at the mercy of not only by weather elements but also
the capacity in which his solar energy system can store, making this decision very
THIS IS WHAT YOUR OUTPUT SHOULD LOOK LIKE
SUBMIT VIA SCREEN SHOT SO YOU CAN HIGHLIGHT (UNDERLINE,
ITALICIZE and COLORIZE) CERTAIN PARTS FOR DISCTINCTION