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A TRIP TO THE MUSEUM

I went to the museum with my family last Sunday. We saw lots of

things. I liked the cavemen display and learned how they used to live a
long, long time ago. My favourite part was being able to touch and
play with things like sand, wood, and metal. It was a fun trip. I want to
go back and learn more!

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We saw lots of things.
- We saw lots of interesting things.

It was a fun trip.

- It was a fun and educational trip.
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We saw lots of interesting things.
- We saw lots of interesting things, like old bones, pots, and
pictures by famous artists.
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Sunday – weekend liked – enjoyed
lots of – many display – exhibit
old bones – dinosaur bones a long, long time ago – in
ancient time
pots – ancient pottery
play – explore
pictures – painting
want to – can’t wait to
A TRIP TO THE MUSEUM

I went to the museum with my family last weekend. We saw many

interesting things, like dinosaur bones, ancient pottery, and paintings
by famous artists. I enjoyed the cavemen exhibit and learned about
how they used to live in ancient time. My favourite part was being able
to touch and explore with things like sand, wood, and metal. It was a
fun and educational trip. I can’t wait to go back and learn more!

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I went to the museum with my family last weekend.
- Last weekend, I went to the museum with my family.
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I enjoyed the cavemen exhibit and learned about how they used
to live in ancient time.
- I especially enjoyed the cavemen exhibit, where I learned the
lifestyles and habits of early humans.
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My favourite part was being able to touch and explore with
things like sand, wood, and metal.
- My favourite part of the museum was the interactive exhibit
where I got to touch and explore different materials like
sand, wood, and metal.
A TRIP TO THE MUSEUM

Last weekend, I went to the museum with my family. We saw many

interesting things, like dinosaur bones, ancient pottery, and paintings by
famous artists. I especially enjoyed the cavemen exhibit, where I learned
the lifestyles and habits of early humans. My favourite part of the
museum was the interactive exhibit where I got to touch and explore
different materials like sand, wood, and metal. It was a fun and
educational trip, and I can't wait to go back and learn more!