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原文分析

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 夜色中看这堵围墙，十分奇妙，颇有点诗意。
白墙、黑瓦、宝蓝色的漏窗泛出晶莹的光辉，里面
的灯光从漏窗中透出来，那光线也变得绿莹莹的。

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清风吹来，树枝摇曳，灯光闪烁变幻，好像有一个
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童话般的世界深藏在围墙的里面。
抬起头来从墙顶上往里看，可以看到主建筑的黑色
屋顶翘在夜空里，围墙也变得不像墙了，它带着和
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主建筑相似的风格进入了整体结构。
附近的马路也变样了，好像是到了什么风景区或文
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化宫的入口。
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 文章体裁：小说（讽刺 小说首先描绘某建筑设计所的围墙倒塌后
小说） 在设计所员工间引起的反应。
语言风格：江南吴语气 讨论重建方案时，吴所长官气十足，尽说
息，夸张，幽默 一些大而无当的空话，原则性特强，具体

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措施一项也没有。“古典派”黄达泉、
“现代派”朱舟、“取消派”何如锦各有
各的“理论”，他们视严肃工作为儿戏，
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卖弄知识、夸夸其谈，还抓住对方的弱点，
互相攻讦，把简单的问题复杂化，把所里
的空气搞得乌烟瘴气。
马而立办事干练、效率高，只因有一副
“娃娃脸”且有点洁癖而被误认为“不可
靠”、“怕艰苦”之类。
接着，小说就具体描绘马而立在重建围墙 5
过程中的所作所为，展现其作为新时期实
于家所具有的风采。
Donec eget viverra nisi, non luctus
arcu. Sed ipsum leo, volutpat id 他在围墙砌成之后，“打躬作揖”送
convallis vitae, mollis ac dui. Cum
C sociis natoque penatibus et magnis 走劳碌的工人，独自在夜色中欣赏砌
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好的围墙，“越看越美，觉得这是他
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有生以来办得最完美的一件大事体”
 夜色中看这堵围墙，十分奇妙，颇有点诗意。
白墙、黑瓦、宝蓝色的漏窗泛出晶莹的光辉，里面
的灯光从漏窗中透出来，那光线也变得绿莹莹的。

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清风吹来，树枝摇曳，灯光闪烁变幻，好像有一个
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童话般的世界深藏在围墙的里面。
抬起头来从墙顶上往里看，可以看到主建筑的黑色
屋顶翘在夜空里，围墙也变得不像墙了，它带着和
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主建筑相似的风格进入了整体结构。
附近的马路也变样了，好像是到了什么风景区或文
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化宫的入口。
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感情基调：自豪，欣慰，高兴，期盼
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 ① 夜色中看这堵围墙，十分奇妙，颇有点诗意。
夜色中：
In the darkness
In the night

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一堵围墙：
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a wall ， a fence, an enclosing wall, a bounding wall

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 ① 夜色中看这堵围墙，十分奇妙，颇有点诗意。
It is quite wonderful and poetic to see this wall in the night color.
（直译）

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It is quite poetic to see this wall at night. （漏译奇妙的）
In the moonlight, the wall was marvelous and poetic.( 加个程度副词
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It is very strange and kind of poetic to see this wall at night. （感情基
调）
It was extremely magnificent, full of poetry, to look at the boundary 9

wall in the faint light of night.☻

In the darkness, this wall appears quite remarkable, infused with a
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 ② 白墙、黑瓦、宝蓝色的漏窗泛出晶莹的光辉，
里面的灯光从漏窗中透出来，那光线也变得绿莹莹
的。

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瓦： tile
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宝蓝色的： royal blue, bright blue , sapphire-blue

漏窗：
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 ② 白墙、黑瓦、宝蓝色的漏窗泛出晶莹的光辉，里面的灯光从漏
窗中透出来，那光线也变得绿莹莹的。
The white wall, the dark tiles and bright blue ornamental perforated window with glittering light.

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The light is shining from the perforated window and becoming green. （缺动词）
White walls, black tiles, blue windows with crystal light, inside the light from the leaks through the
windows, the light also becomes green. （语序混乱）
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White wall, black tiles, and the crystal light reflected by the dark-blue window panels （窗帘板） .
The light inside shines through the leaky window and becomes even greener. （原文没有体现比
较级）
Blue windows embedded in this hatting-black-root-tiles white wall shines brightly. Light from
inside penetrates through the windows; and it was colored a similar green color. （主语定位）
White wall, black tiles and crystal brilliance reflected by the royal blue leaky window. The light 12

inside shines through the leaky window and the light becomes green. （主语定位）
The white walls, black tiles and blue leaking windows are suffused with sparkling brilliance while
the light filtered out through the blocks was transformed into a shining emerald green.☻
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 ③ 清风吹来，树枝摇曳，灯光闪烁变幻，好像有
一个童话般的世界深藏在围墙的里面。
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摇曳： sway ， flicker
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闪烁 : flicker,twinkle,glitter,glint,blink

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 ③ 清风吹来，树枝摇曳，灯光闪烁变幻，好像有一个童话般
的世界深藏在围墙的里面。
When the breeze blows, the tree branches sway and the lights flicker and change, as if

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there is a fairy tale world hidden deep inside the wall. （对称）
wind breezes; Branches boogie （舞蹈的摇摆和摇滚） ; and light twinkles and
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flickers. Everything inside the wall seems as if came from a fairy story. （墙内的一切
都仿佛来自童话故事。）
With breeze blowing, branches swaying and lights flickering （缺少动词）
The wind blows, the branches sway, the lights flicker and change, as if there is a fairy
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The fresh breeze blew gently, making the branches sway and the light flicker. It seemed
there was a fairytale world hid deeply behind the enclosing wall. ☻
As the gentle breeze rustles the branches, the lights flicker and dance, creating an
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 ④ 抬起头来从墙顶上往里看，可以看到主建筑的
黑色屋顶翘在夜空里，围墙也变得不像墙了，它带
着和主建筑相似的风格进入了整体结构。

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The wall seems does not like itself ( 整体）
the wall has become less of a wall, with a similar style to that of the main building
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into the overall structure.

Raising your head and looking up to the top of the wall,
Flying, jutting, soaring, overhanging, bends upwards , curling up, protruding （突
出） into ， is warped （弯曲，扭曲） in ， rising ， 省略
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can see the black roof of the main building overhanging in the night
sky, and the wall has become less like a wall, as it has entered the
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 ⑤ 附近的马路也变样了，好像是到了什么风景区
或文化宫的入口。
变样： change/be different

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到了： arrive/reach
风景区：
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文化宫：
cultural palace( 文化馆）
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In the darkness, this wall appears quite remarkable, infused with a
touch of poetry. The white walls, black tiles and blue leaking
windows are suffused with sparkling brilliance while the light filtered

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out through the blocks was transformed into a shining emerald green.
As the gentle breeze rustles the branches, the lights flicker and dance,
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creating an enchanting atmosphere reminiscent of a fairy tale world

hidden behind the wall. When you pick up your head and look in
from the top of the wall, you can see the black roof of the main
building overhanging in the night sky, and the wall has become less 17

like a wall, as it has entered the whole structure with a style similar to
that of the main building. The roads nearby were also changed, as if
C you’ve arrived at the entrance of some scenic spot or culture palace
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 ① 句式变换
夜色中看这堵围墙，十分奇妙，颇有点诗意。
白墙、黑瓦、宝蓝色的漏窗泛出晶莹的光辉，里面
的灯光从漏窗中透出来，那光线也变得绿莹莹的。

Massive X presentation to DesignBall team

清风吹来，树枝摇曳，灯光闪烁变幻，好像有一个
Massive X

童话般的世界深藏在围墙的里面。
抬起头来从墙顶上往里看，可以看到主建筑的黑色
屋顶翘在夜空里，围墙也变得不像墙了，它带着和
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主建筑相似的风格进入了整体结构。
附近的马路也变样了，好像是到了什么风景区或文
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化宫的入口。 形合 vs 意合
c 直译 vs 意译
 ② 文化承载词
夜色中看这堵围墙，十分奇妙，颇有点诗意。
白墙、黑瓦、宝蓝色的漏窗泛出晶莹的光辉，里面
的灯光从漏窗中透出来，那光线也变得绿莹莹的。

Massive X presentation to DesignBall team

清风吹来，树枝摇曳，灯光闪烁变幻，好像有一个
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童话般的世界深藏在围墙的里面。
抬起头来从墙顶上往里看，可以看到主建筑的黑色
屋顶翘在夜空里，围墙也变得不像墙了，它带着和
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主建筑相似的风格进入了整体结构。
附近的马路也变样了，好像是到了什么风景区或文
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化宫的入口。
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 ③ 对原文的准确理解
夜色中看这堵围墙，十分奇妙，颇有点诗意。
白墙、黑瓦、宝蓝色的漏窗泛出晶莹的光辉，里面
的灯光从漏窗中透出来，那光线也变得绿莹莹的。

Massive X presentation to DesignBall team

清风吹来，树枝摇曳，灯光闪烁变幻，好像有一个
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童话般的世界深藏在围墙的里面。
抬起头来从墙顶上往里看，可以看到主建筑的黑色
屋顶翘在夜空里，围墙也变得不像墙了，它带着和
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主建筑相似的风格进入了整体结构。
附近的马路也变样了，好像是到了什么风景区或文
C
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化宫的入口。
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